To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "Souls Know"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
Another stonking effort here.
The interwoven thoughts and movements of the language are expressive simple and yet complicated. It sounds right - if that makes sense. I don't pretend to fully comprehend the nuances of the entire piece, but it feels good.
Great stuff
G
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Hi Mikey,
Another stonking effort here.
The interwoven thoughts and movements of the language are expressive simple and yet complicated. It sounds right - if that makes sense. I don't pretend to fully comprehend the nuances of the entire piece, but it feels good.
Great stuff
G
Comment Written 02-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Hey, Gman, hope your new year is going well. Congrats on hanging in there for that trophy. They are MOST COOL and I look at mine all the time. It's a great reward for a lot of work well earned.
Pleased you enjoyed this. mikey
Comment from BOO ghost
This is an unusual cocktail of words. I will have to read this several times to comprehend something that I may have missed. Impressive vocabulary of words which is hard to duplicate, I do like this very much. Seems... you are connecting to your spiritual world, your transcending soul, your God side. I can not say enough about the unique twist of words that stand out, words like venom, garrotes, fickle. BOO
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This is an unusual cocktail of words. I will have to read this several times to comprehend something that I may have missed. Impressive vocabulary of words which is hard to duplicate, I do like this very much. Seems... you are connecting to your spiritual world, your transcending soul, your God side. I can not say enough about the unique twist of words that stand out, words like venom, garrotes, fickle. BOO
Comment Written 02-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Wow. THanks for the great complimentary review. It makes the work feel totally worth it!! mikey
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yep, I liked it, bro. I will be back, I'm working an another synopsis about a Shinto/Kami cult and this is about a real cult in a Japanese village. I got a friend that went there, spooky stuff, they tried to recruit me, haha, also, the queen of teh vilage tried to get me as a husband, I had five years to become a KAMI, which is like a GOD, not me, her name is Hubuki, I got out of the arrangement. Burannko will send me info about the cult from the village in japan, he went back home to japan, the village.My buddy Hazard been to the village, they gave him a sword named Shadow, he said that he was cursed and he has nightmares. Yep, they tried to deceive me but there is only one transcender and that is God, rest is of the antichrist, I mucked up with Hubuki and made a promiss i could not keep. Yep, it will be a novel on a true story but I can not tell where it is and I have to change the names. They live in the mountains, they a cult, a group of 26 families, they live like the Omnish, I bullshit you not.
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YEAH! Now this is going to be interesting. Yes, I can feel the boredom vanishing. Sounds like a great tale and I KNOW you can pull it off. mikey
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yep, I'm through with this war game, i will be online lot more and give you some stars. Yep, true tales are easy to pull off, yep, don't forget to message me on e mail, Mikey. What category are you focussing on? I'm looking forward coming back, I liked that last poem you did, take me a couple days to get my synopsis going. Wonder if there is a good poem contest poing on?
Comment from amahra
The soul speaks and the heart and mind listens and all a moment is known certainty [This is my favorite line in this poem.] Not that I didn't enjoy the entire poem. I did. Happy New Year.
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The soul speaks and the heart and mind listens and all a moment is known certainty [This is my favorite line in this poem.] Not that I didn't enjoy the entire poem. I did. Happy New Year.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Thank you so much. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Happy New Year!! mikey
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Of all the tremendous thoughts this poem holds in store for the reader, there is one that will stick in my mind.
the well intentioned kiss, gentle though it may be, can sting, if it is places on a bruise or an injury. That is so true.
Your verses are very proverbial in their flow.
I enjoyed the poem and will revisit it from time to time as I can.
Thank you for sharing,
Carolyn
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Of all the tremendous thoughts this poem holds in store for the reader, there is one that will stick in my mind.
the well intentioned kiss, gentle though it may be, can sting, if it is places on a bruise or an injury. That is so true.
Your verses are very proverbial in their flow.
I enjoyed the poem and will revisit it from time to time as I can.
Thank you for sharing,
Carolyn
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Hi, Carolyn
I'm so pleased this spoke to you. Wow, I can't tell you how happy I am you liked this. Wonderful compliments to keep me smiling for a long while. Thanks so much, mikey
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Happy writing. :-)
Comment from Unspoken94
It's my last six and I'm glad you're back, Michael. I too am struggling with posting as much as I have. I've come out of retirement and have four new clients. So much for time to write. Your poem spoke to me because of the words we can use to heal or hurt. I know that the one who is the caretaker of my soul is so intimate that I hold her name as too sacred to say. I appreciate your post and I hope it won't be the last. -Bill
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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It's my last six and I'm glad you're back, Michael. I too am struggling with posting as much as I have. I've come out of retirement and have four new clients. So much for time to write. Your poem spoke to me because of the words we can use to heal or hurt. I know that the one who is the caretaker of my soul is so intimate that I hold her name as too sacred to say. I appreciate your post and I hope it won't be the last. -Bill
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Great insights as always. Wow. Out of retirement. What a change of direction. Such are the times. I was hoping to be sitting around writing full time by now. :)) Stupid world and responsibilities!!!
I'm going to try and post no more than I can manage to follow through with responses and reviews. I got totally buried last year. Great to hear from you. mikey
Comment from c_lucas
The body is human and is fallible. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very sensitive read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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The body is human and is fallible. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very sensitive read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Well put. Thanks, mikey
Comment from rspoet
A word once spoken, a bruise once raised
can be softened, but never fully removed
If the heart and mind fling arrows
they may wound and heal
If the soul sling arrows
the wounds can never be repaired
Scars seal hard
bind things in and out
Listen well before
or there may not be an after
Six healing stars
that send only light, beauty and promise
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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A word once spoken, a bruise once raised
can be softened, but never fully removed
If the heart and mind fling arrows
they may wound and heal
If the soul sling arrows
the wounds can never be repaired
Scars seal hard
bind things in and out
Listen well before
or there may not be an after
Six healing stars
that send only light, beauty and promise
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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WOW. A six for your review. Beautifully put and most appreciated. Thank you so much for all the stars and the exceptional review. mikey
Comment from Kingsland
This is a very original piece of poetic writing. You have a lot of things to think about here on this outstanding piece of poetic art. I liked everything about this piece of poetry. It gave me pause to think on the depth of its thoughts. This was well worthy of all six stars awarded here... John
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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This is a very original piece of poetic writing. You have a lot of things to think about here on this outstanding piece of poetic art. I liked everything about this piece of poetry. It gave me pause to think on the depth of its thoughts. This was well worthy of all six stars awarded here... John
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Hey, thanks so much, John. These are some great words to kick off my new year. Thanks for your music posts too while I'm thinking of it. You put Knights in White Satin up for a listen just when it was exactly what I needed to hear!!!
Hoping for an awesome New Year for you. mikey
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
What comes to mind upon reading this brilliant work is the complicated language of love. Finding someone who can speak to your heart and understand and help to heal the battered and bruised pieces while still taking the time to understand your unique language of the heart and soul, baring all to one another, feeling naked and exposed. That is when the unintended hurt comes I think. This is a fantastic piece! I hope you don't stop posting!!!
but hearts are healing places
and wounds in the most delicate places
heal slowly and scars impede
a smooth touch confused by resistance
~This is my favorite part! What truth you speak!
Thank you for sharing! Happy writing!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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What comes to mind upon reading this brilliant work is the complicated language of love. Finding someone who can speak to your heart and understand and help to heal the battered and bruised pieces while still taking the time to understand your unique language of the heart and soul, baring all to one another, feeling naked and exposed. That is when the unintended hurt comes I think. This is a fantastic piece! I hope you don't stop posting!!!
but hearts are healing places
and wounds in the most delicate places
heal slowly and scars impede
a smooth touch confused by resistance
~This is my favorite part! What truth you speak!
Thank you for sharing! Happy writing!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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What wonderful thoughtful words to read. So beautifully put on your part. I am so delighted you understood this so perfectly. Wow. I'm smiling!! Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from Pantygynt
Whether you continue to post or not is of course entirely your own affair. But I will fan you here so I don't get to miss anything else you do.
On first reading I found this a difficult poem to comprehend on a word for word basis so I did what I always do in such circumstances, refrain from comment and let it lie awhile. Such poetry always becomes clearer after it has been absorbed.
On revisiting it I found it resonating with me much better as I was able to identify with one whose words have, unintentionally in the past, and in quarters where I would rather they hadn't, stung like your "most well intentioned kiss" because I must have applied them to some unrecognized bruise.
For me this poem, made up of course of words, is all about words and what can happen to them in inapproriate hands or rather on inappropriate lips.
I am so glad I came back to this, Mikey, because had I castigated it as incomprehensible, I might otherwise have correctly been categorized as "the empty well" in which "venom forms". There is no venom in me here. This is a poem I was at first unsure of and later came to admire.
A very happy New Year to you.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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Whether you continue to post or not is of course entirely your own affair. But I will fan you here so I don't get to miss anything else you do.
On first reading I found this a difficult poem to comprehend on a word for word basis so I did what I always do in such circumstances, refrain from comment and let it lie awhile. Such poetry always becomes clearer after it has been absorbed.
On revisiting it I found it resonating with me much better as I was able to identify with one whose words have, unintentionally in the past, and in quarters where I would rather they hadn't, stung like your "most well intentioned kiss" because I must have applied them to some unrecognized bruise.
For me this poem, made up of course of words, is all about words and what can happen to them in inapproriate hands or rather on inappropriate lips.
I am so glad I came back to this, Mikey, because had I castigated it as incomprehensible, I might otherwise have correctly been categorized as "the empty well" in which "venom forms". There is no venom in me here. This is a poem I was at first unsure of and later came to admire.
A very happy New Year to you.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2016
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I can't tell you how delighted I am you spent the time with this. I'm not surprised. I often read your reviews which is a good way to learn new things around here. In spite of all the silliness of the place, many of us have a serious writer underneath and the hope that another serious writer will take a moment to truly read and contemplate what we write. You always do this. That's what keeps a lot of us here. A writer like you makes this all worthwhile. Thank you so much for the awesome and thoughtful review. Hoping you have an amazing 2016. mikey
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Mikey, I cannot thank you enough for these few words. I will treasure them forever.
