2nd Time Around
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Part I, Chapter 5"A fight for life and truth.
8 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
T.,
Another wonderful chapter. It's tragic to think what electrocution can do to the body. I'm not sure who came up with it and thought it would be a better alternative to hanging. Ugh.
Notes:
1.) No one else seemed to have heard the remark and Doug let it go.â??
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2.) Since it was two in the morning, he was sure his search wouldn't be the easiest.
--> I think we should have this info a little earlier. It kind of changes the setting, you know?
3.) Did you know you can 'mute' any reviewer you don't like? It's always an option, and some folks take advantage of it - especially, if there's a reviewer - like me, for example - that you ever find irritating. *smile* Just click on the person's name - which will take you to their profile. On the left, you'll find the option to 'mute' them. Then they can longer even read your stuff, much less remark on it.
I hope you do understand it's always my goal to help and not to be rude. Sometimes I may sound too harsh and critical - and I don't mean to. This is a really good story but you should be turning out something as close to perfect as you can get. I DO expect to see this in a book form if it's not already. The storyline is definitely that good.
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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T.,
Another wonderful chapter. It's tragic to think what electrocution can do to the body. I'm not sure who came up with it and thought it would be a better alternative to hanging. Ugh.
Notes:
1.) No one else seemed to have heard the remark and Doug let it go.â??
--> delete extra symbols
2.) Since it was two in the morning, he was sure his search wouldn't be the easiest.
--> I think we should have this info a little earlier. It kind of changes the setting, you know?
3.) Did you know you can 'mute' any reviewer you don't like? It's always an option, and some folks take advantage of it - especially, if there's a reviewer - like me, for example - that you ever find irritating. *smile* Just click on the person's name - which will take you to their profile. On the left, you'll find the option to 'mute' them. Then they can longer even read your stuff, much less remark on it.
I hope you do understand it's always my goal to help and not to be rude. Sometimes I may sound too harsh and critical - and I don't mean to. This is a really good story but you should be turning out something as close to perfect as you can get. I DO expect to see this in a book form if it's not already. The storyline is definitely that good.
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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This is the kind of feedback I came to FS for. Thank you. Sorry, you can't get away that easily. ;)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was a creative chapter. I like how you have the characters telling their story in kinda their own words and way. Very creative. This was an excellent chapter that was enjoyable to read. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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I thought this was a creative chapter. I like how you have the characters telling their story in kinda their own words and way. Very creative. This was an excellent chapter that was enjoyable to read. Well done!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you kindly.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oh, no she lost her eye-sight because of a mistake, this is so unbelievable poor Sara will wake up in complete darkness. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Oh, no she lost her eye-sight because of a mistake, this is so unbelievable poor Sara will wake up in complete darkness. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2020
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Thank you kindly.
Comment from aryr
You have done great research from the medical point of view in describing the effects of electrical flow on body tissues. What happened to Sarah was devastating not only to her but to her family. This chapter (having read your notation about the split) was a very appropriate length for reading.
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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You have done great research from the medical point of view in describing the effects of electrical flow on body tissues. What happened to Sarah was devastating not only to her but to her family. This chapter (having read your notation about the split) was a very appropriate length for reading.
Comment Written 24-May-2016
reply by the author on 24-May-2016
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Thank you very much.
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You are so welcome.
Comment from DonandVicki
Excellent work, I like this kind of crime fiction. You hold the readers attention all through the work. Good character development as well. You keep the reader wanting more.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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Excellent work, I like this kind of crime fiction. You hold the readers attention all through the work. Good character development as well. You keep the reader wanting more.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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Thank you very much.
Comment from damommy
Of course, I like it. I'm moving right along, catching up. This is a great story. Very real. I feel like I'm right there watching everything that's happening.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Of course, I like it. I'm moving right along, catching up. This is a great story. Very real. I feel like I'm right there watching everything that's happening.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2016
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Thank you. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Comment from foxangie123
Not many writers impose a Southern Draw into written format which I admire about your book. You take things that are in this life and apply them in quite a brilliant form as they become words and lines to read.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Not many writers impose a Southern Draw into written format which I admire about your book. You take things that are in this life and apply them in quite a brilliant form as they become words and lines to read.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you. And, may I say, this quite an elegant review.
Comment from trumby
good work. well written.
this puts a good sized hook in people's mouth's so that they want to read more.
I know that I do
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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good work. well written.
this puts a good sized hook in people's mouth's so that they want to read more.
I know that I do
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you. That's great to hear.
