Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Ronni. So good to see you post again. It seems like it has been a while. Your poem is absolutely lovely. I liked these lines sin particular:

"Each of us
with our secret gifts
magic potions
lovely notions
waiting to be
caressed
longing to be
shared."

Blessings and Happy Holidays. X Bob

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015

Hi Bob,
Most delightful surprise my friend...thank you for your thoughtful supportive comments
and kind compliments! So happy you enjoyed! Not much time to be on here oftener,
but am as I can be. Have a blessedly beautiful Christmas, and a most successful
and rewarding New Year, personally, and professionally as our brilliant author!
Love and blessings always, Ronni

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your reflections about "secret gifts" each of us has to offer and your discovery of the special gift a loved one proffers. I liked the visual, narrow stream of words paralleling your stream-of-consciousness, along with the dreamy scene. Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015

Hi sweet Sunshine,
I just wonder if you read this since a few suggestions by a couple of kind readers with keen eye,
were followed up on dear friend. You are so quick! I was very grateful for the suggestions, as
I was having some weird skips and key sticks on my keyboard.
Anyway, thanks for the appreciations and accolades, glad you enjoyed! That is always a plus
and reward all its own. Love and hugs, Ronni

reply by Joan E. on 22-Dec-2015

I just re-read your piece and think the edits make it read more smoothly, especially in the second stanza. I salute your striving for perfection! Hugs and one more wish for a joyful holiday- Joan

Comment from reconciled

Exceptional

"cared for" "longing to be shared for..." will sing with a better sound. "the you "and" me" also. Hey Ronnie....-smile- Wonderful expression of discovery. love Michael

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015

Hello Michael,
There have been some changes made since you read this, which included the ones you noted here too,'
so I thank you for your constructive overview and keen eye to point them out so thoughtfully.
Otherwise, sincerely thank you for the appreciations of presentation of the 'discovery' theme.
And to merit an extra star...'awesomely' grateful! smiles for you always...Ronni

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

1.) waiting to be
cared (for?)

2.) Each of us
a half
a whole
a mind
a mind
--> 'a mind' listed twice

3.) Yet
a part
of a better
richer
more
--> ...better, richer, more... (what?) /seems incomplete

Merely some suggestions I think of as I read. Please feel free to toss the lot! *smile* Otherwise, this is a provoking piece. Let me know if you decide to edit and I will happily re-rate!

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 Comment Written 21-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015

Hi robyn,
Thank you for a most objective and constructive review. I sincerely appreciate your suggestions and
questionable parts, and have followed up with corrections and changes. I hope the improvements
are better, and may rate a re rating. Thanks for your appreciati9ns and keen eye for improvement
and corrections. Best wishes, Ronni

reply by robyn corum on 21-Dec-2015

Certainly! So glad you weren't offended. I've changed the rating for you!

reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015

reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015

No indeed, never offended by such
thoughtful suggestions...that is how
we improve and merit the rating of
the readers time and consideration
to be as correct or as intended.
Thanks so much for the second
chance rating, sincerely grateful.
Best always, Ronni

reply by robyn corum on 21-Dec-2015

Did you mean to say something? I just got an empty box. (Easy to do here!) *smile*

reply by the author on 21-Dec-2015

I meant to tell you I was in no way
offended over suggestions, and
so very grateful you did take time
and effort to do so dear! I goofed
on keyboard..sorry for empty box..
and thanks so much for the changed
rating too. Best always, Ronni

reply by robyn corum on 21-Dec-2015

no worries! We're here to help each other. Thanks for your kind response!

reply by Anonymous Member on 23-Dec-2015

I meant to tell you I was in no way
offended over suggestions, and
so very grateful you did take time
and effort to do so dear! I goofed
on keyboard..sorry for empty box..
and thanks so much for the changed
rating too. Best always, Ronni

reply by Anonymous Member on 23-Dec-2015

reply by Anonymous Member on 23-Dec-2015

No indeed, never offended by such
thoughtful suggestions...that is how
we improve and merit the rating of
the readers time and consideration
to be as correct or as intended.
Thanks so much for the second
chance rating, sincerely grateful.
Best always, Ronni

Comment from Amy Greta

Excellent

I love your poem and how it sends a message that everyone has gifts in such a unique way (magic potions, lovely notions)...beautiful. My only question is did you mean to write "a mind" two times? I can see how that might have been intentional, but it could also be a typo (?)
Regardless, excellent piece!
Amy

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 Comment Written 21-Dec-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2015

Hi Amy,
I am elated you enjoyed and appreciated this poem and shared such warm and
enthusiastic comments. Thanks for the note on the duplicate "the mind" it was
a typo and key sticking...fixed soon as you noted it, and I so dearly appreciate]
your keen eye and thoughtfulness. Have a most delightful Christmas and
truly joyous New Year. Best wishes always, Ronni