Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 344 "The Star"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Domino 2
I would never have the patience for one of these, where you've perfectly formed the shape, in this case that of the star of Bethlehem, so very well done on that, Treischel.
I've seen many of these before where the lines are falsely split to meet the shape and syllable count (when required in some genre), but all your lines are excellent and do stand alone.
VERY nice festive message.
Excellent.
Merry Christmas to you and yours, and a speedy recovery to your wife after her surgery.
Cheers, Ray.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2015
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I would never have the patience for one of these, where you've perfectly formed the shape, in this case that of the star of Bethlehem, so very well done on that, Treischel.
I've seen many of these before where the lines are falsely split to meet the shape and syllable count (when required in some genre), but all your lines are excellent and do stand alone.
VERY nice festive message.
Excellent.
Merry Christmas to you and yours, and a speedy recovery to your wife after her surgery.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2015
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Thank you very much Ray, for your wonderful words and review. I'll give my wife your regards.
Comment from Pantygynt
A pleasant Christmas thought in the shape of the star of Bethlehem spoiled slightly by the everything having its own line. Was that by design or as a result of the length of the line? On the other hand the slightly asymmetrical effect reminds one of the twinkling of a star, so perhaps it works. I am undecided, waiting for your explanation.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015
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A pleasant Christmas thought in the shape of the star of Bethlehem spoiled slightly by the everything having its own line. Was that by design or as a result of the length of the line? On the other hand the slightly asymmetrical effect reminds one of the twinkling of a star, so perhaps it works. I am undecided, waiting for your explanation.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. It was mainly a result of the length of the lines.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is really lovely, Tom, and you did so well getting the shape of the Star of Bethlehem so right. The words are perfect and all in all, this is a pleasure to read and look at. Well done, my friend. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2015
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That is really lovely, Tom, and you did so well getting the shape of the Star of Bethlehem so right. The words are perfect and all in all, this is a pleasure to read and look at. Well done, my friend. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 16-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Good too hear from you. Hope you are doing fine with that knee.
Comment from Joan E.
My, you've been busy of late, with many posts and this creation of a complex shape poem. Your star is perfection! I enjoyed your speaking in the voice of the star in the first person with a timely message. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2015
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My, you've been busy of late, with many posts and this creation of a complex shape poem. Your star is perfection! I enjoyed your speaking in the voice of the star in the first person with a timely message. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 16-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2015
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Thank you Joan, for the stars on my star, as well as your encouraging support.
Comment from I am Cat
Not an easy thing to do in advanced editor (sort of an oxymoron in itself, eh?)
well done though, Tom... I believe you've achieved a lovely star.
perfect, even. wow.
Cat
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Not an easy thing to do in advanced editor (sort of an oxymoron in itself, eh?)
well done though, Tom... I believe you've achieved a lovely star.
perfect, even. wow.
Cat
Comment Written 15-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Hey, thank you Cat. Definitely an Oxymoron. Lol.
Comment from amada
Such a wonderful and worthwhile effort. Inspiring sight these enthralling bright words against the simple majesty of a blue sky. I see my loved one in Heaven now smiling through that redeeming star.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Such a wonderful and worthwhile effort. Inspiring sight these enthralling bright words against the simple majesty of a blue sky. I see my loved one in Heaven now smiling through that redeeming star.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Thank you Amanda, for sure wonderful thoughts and all the stars.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. A beautiful piece of work. Well expressed and enjoyable to read. I love the way you put your poem into the shape of a star. Very clever.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Excellent. A beautiful piece of work. Well expressed and enjoyable to read. I love the way you put your poem into the shape of a star. Very clever.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Thank you pretty bluebirds.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love the beautiful star shape and mostly the words and message that create that shape. Wonderful Christmas poem.
Teresa
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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I love the beautiful star shape and mostly the words and message that create that shape. Wonderful Christmas poem.
Teresa
Comment Written 15-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Thank you Teresa.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A good recognizable star and a wonderful message of the child whom was born to save us from sin and will lead us to the Kingdom for eternity.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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A good recognizable star and a wonderful message of the child whom was born to save us from sin and will lead us to the Kingdom for eternity.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from Tessa Kay
You achieved a perfect star shape. Actually, I was talking to someone about this star only this morning. People thing God sent the star, but why then did it first guide the astrologers to Jesus' enemy who then plotted to have him killed? Only after that did it guide them to Jesus.
For the shepherds God chose angels, not stars. Astrology was against god's law as well, so why use it? Maybe there's another explanation...
Just a thought. :)
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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You achieved a perfect star shape. Actually, I was talking to someone about this star only this morning. People thing God sent the star, but why then did it first guide the astrologers to Jesus' enemy who then plotted to have him killed? Only after that did it guide them to Jesus.
For the shepherds God chose angels, not stars. Astrology was against god's law as well, so why use it? Maybe there's another explanation...
Just a thought. :)
Comment Written 15-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Thank you Tessa. I take it as the star was always leading, but the men stopped for directions thinking it would be a friendly visit. False assumptions and Human error, at play.
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Maybe, but the star took them to the exact house afterwards. And why would God guide astrologers, something he'd always condemned, non-worshippers of him, and not of his people, and thereby put his own son in danger and contribute to the killing of many young children?
I can't see how that star was sent by God. Astrology is part of Satan's camp, and he would've had every reason to guide them to Herod first. God uses angels, not stars.
Interesting subject, though. You obviously have thought about it quite a bit as well. It's refreshing when Christmas isn't just all about Santa. :)
