When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Before the Celebration"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Domino 2
I have been reading snippets of this series as you've posted, Shari, and it is brilliantly written - a mixture of sadness, REAL life and your usual wacky humour, particularly in your excellent dialogue.
Here's a well-deserved overall sixer which I hope gives extra exposure in the 'well received' section.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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I have been reading snippets of this series as you've posted, Shari, and it is brilliantly written - a mixture of sadness, REAL life and your usual wacky humour, particularly in your excellent dialogue.
Here's a well-deserved overall sixer which I hope gives extra exposure in the 'well received' section.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Thank you for the six, dear Ray. Brilliantly written! Wow- that is worth more than the rating. Appreciate it especially since I know you don't care for long reads.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment from Jay Squires
I just love your family, Shari. I'm sure I wouldn't get on well with them, or they me, but I love hearing about them from a distance.
She squeezed to death any pimples or blackheads [a juicy image. Great!]
while I set the unopened desert box on the dining table. [extra space after "unopened" and misspell of DESSERT. >> Two S's because you always want S-econd-S]
the bag full of presents and party trimmings and on the floor. [I don't understand the "and" after trimmings.]
"Oh," I backed off too. [Period after "Oh." I backed off too isn't a speaker tag.]
I brought out the paper crown. [I haven't been mentioning the extra spaces between words, and there have been several, but you said you were having challenges with your computer, I believe.]
' I'm going to die, aren't I.'", I said. [Question mark. No comma after the closed quote.]
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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I just love your family, Shari. I'm sure I wouldn't get on well with them, or they me, but I love hearing about them from a distance.
She squeezed to death any pimples or blackheads [a juicy image. Great!]
while I set the unopened desert box on the dining table. [extra space after "unopened" and misspell of DESSERT. >> Two S's because you always want S-econd-S]
the bag full of presents and party trimmings and on the floor. [I don't understand the "and" after trimmings.]
"Oh," I backed off too. [Period after "Oh." I backed off too isn't a speaker tag.]
I brought out the paper crown. [I haven't been mentioning the extra spaces between words, and there have been several, but you said you were having challenges with your computer, I believe.]
' I'm going to die, aren't I.'", I said. [Question mark. No comma after the closed quote.]
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Yea! You finally gave me a way to remember when to use the double "s". Thank you.
Fixed some of the others. I tried posting this back to Word to find the extra spaces, but they didn't show any green squiggle lines.
And the spell checker on this site doesn't work to change a word. I have to go back into the post.
She stated "I'm going to die." It was a fact, not a question, at least the way she told it to me.
Thanks again for taking he time to correct.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment from Realist101
Hi Shari...This is another well written chapter to your book that really delves into details. As always, your dialogue is just right, and I'm scared I guess, of cancer too. This awful tired that just will not go away ... but I've not lost too much weight. Who knows. I do hope your sister is okay. I think I will dread the next chapter to this. Sigh...at our age it's scary. x
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Hi Shari...This is another well written chapter to your book that really delves into details. As always, your dialogue is just right, and I'm scared I guess, of cancer too. This awful tired that just will not go away ... but I've not lost too much weight. Who knows. I do hope your sister is okay. I think I will dread the next chapter to this. Sigh...at our age it's scary. x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Sue. We all have cancer cells I'm sure, but they need the "right" soil to grow. Stay positive. Frank is weak and tired all the time too, so I'm wondering if something is happening internally beside the diabetes and dementia. Thank goodness he hasn't lost his sense of humor. I can always make him laugh-- and I'm not talking about tickling. :-) Any feedback from your doctor yet???
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Hi Shari...sigh...I sure hope Frank can pull out of his health issues. I will go back the 17th for a follow up. If they tell me everythings okay I will scream. I know better. It's not that I want to be ill, but no one's this tired for no reason. I had a 'good' day yesterday. It was a bit warmer so tried to ride. And sure enuff, they set off Tanerite as we rode. Scared me so bad my whole body went numb with that butterfly fear. And fury. Today, back to being so weak I can't sit here for long. Going to lay down. Hugs for caring my sweet friend. x.
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You definitely need to move!
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Hubby set the bag full of presents and party trimmings and on the floor. Typical male maneuver."---And just what's THAT supposed to imply...'typical male maneuver', lol? Where did ya' want Frank to set the bag, on the roof?!? Heh-heh...
My mother-in-law (may she rest in peace) was consigned palliative care during her last few weeks. The pancreatic cancer that, at that point, had riddled her body with tumors was too far gone. Like your sister, Barb, she was a very proud yet private person. She also had a short-cropped head full of silver hair, again, just like your sister had.
I can only imagine what it feels like to lose a parent or a sibling as mine are all still living, thank heavens. It's not something any of us looks forward to.
Yet another excellent, very well written chapter, Shari. Error free, as usual.
Well done...
~Dean :}
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"Hubby set the bag full of presents and party trimmings and on the floor. Typical male maneuver."---And just what's THAT supposed to imply...'typical male maneuver', lol? Where did ya' want Frank to set the bag, on the roof?!? Heh-heh...
My mother-in-law (may she rest in peace) was consigned palliative care during her last few weeks. The pancreatic cancer that, at that point, had riddled her body with tumors was too far gone. Like your sister, Barb, she was a very proud yet private person. She also had a short-cropped head full of silver hair, again, just like your sister had.
I can only imagine what it feels like to lose a parent or a sibling as mine are all still living, thank heavens. It's not something any of us looks forward to.
Yet another excellent, very well written chapter, Shari. Error free, as usual.
Well done...
~Dean :}
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Oh, to keep one's hair! Because I have to take thyroid medication, mine keeps thinning out. My hairdresser is brilliant and knows how to cut it to look fuller.
Men throw everything on the floor. LOL It's like they never heard of counter space or a chair.
Losing a blood relative close to you is harder to take than I thought. I fear that hubby will die before I do and wonder how I'll get through it emotionally.
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I'm sure it'll be hard on you emotionally if that happens. I always said to my wife that I hoped I'd go before she did because it would kill me anyhow if she did.
That doesn't really matter anymore...
~Dean
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
She's doing her best to be her old self, still looking her best, tho she feels like crap. Inside, she must be suffering. I know what it's like to have death looking you in the face and waiting to get weaker and closer to the end, even if I still have a year or two. I imagine having just a few months is harder on the spirit. She must have been a good actress.
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She's doing her best to be her old self, still looking her best, tho she feels like crap. Inside, she must be suffering. I know what it's like to have death looking you in the face and waiting to get weaker and closer to the end, even if I still have a year or two. I imagine having just a few months is harder on the spirit. She must have been a good actress.
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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When you see death coming, it's time to put away pretense. Barb has to come to grips with her feelings toward mother yet. Two chapters away, I hope.
