When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 70 "Before the Celebration"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Sasha
The fact that cancer so seldom reveals itself until it is too advanced to do anything for is what makes it such a bitch. This is a very sad chapter and I found myself fighting back the tears myself.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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The fact that cancer so seldom reveals itself until it is too advanced to do anything for is what makes it such a bitch. This is a very sad chapter and I found myself fighting back the tears myself.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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That's the reaction I hoped for. Thank you, Sasha
Comment from joann r romei
This read wonderfully, but tugged at the heart. What an insidious type of disease to get, such a shame, and no way of knowing how to stop it,
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2015
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This read wonderfully, but tugged at the heart. What an insidious type of disease to get, such a shame, and no way of knowing how to stop it,
Comment Written 18-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2015
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Thanks so much, joann, for the sixer on this. It's scary that it can be in your body so long without showing symptoms.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written and brought to mind the forties and fifties when Cancer was a death sentence. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2015
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This is very well written and brought to mind the forties and fifties when Cancer was a death sentence. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2015
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An interesting analogy. Choose Death would be a good title for someone battling Cancer.
Comment from boxergirl
A sweet scene dealing with a sad situation between you and your sister. Your descriptive details engaged me from the start.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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A sweet scene dealing with a sad situation between you and your sister. Your descriptive details engaged me from the start.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much, BG, for the exceptional review and your reaction to the story. More sweet scenes coming. :-)
Comment from Muffins
It appears that your sister has excepted with grace her situation. Her decision not to take chemo is an ego thing. People in that state of cancer need to feel control. Control equals power and when you don't have control over your body, your health any little thing is seized.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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It appears that your sister has excepted with grace her situation. Her decision not to take chemo is an ego thing. People in that state of cancer need to feel control. Control equals power and when you don't have control over your body, your health any little thing is seized.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Thank you for such as astute observation. You're absolutely right.
Comment from robyn corum
1.) Seeing a tear on his cheek, I said, 'I'm going to die, aren't I?'"
-> second punctuation not needed at the end.
I just find it hard to believe that this is real. I hate that you had to go through this (your sister as well, of course!) I'm sending hugs -
A good write!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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1.) Seeing a tear on his cheek, I said, 'I'm going to die, aren't I?'"
-> second punctuation not needed at the end.
I just find it hard to believe that this is real. I hate that you had to go through this (your sister as well, of course!) I'm sending hugs -
A good write!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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It's real, Robyn. My sister's reaction was so controlled, I guess it would be hard to believe. Thanks for correcting the punctuation, but it's not to be a question. I did take out the second punctuation.
Comment from Curly Girly
To me, this seems like a successful reunion. It's surprising that she's unaware of your mother's pride in her abilities. Some times the older generation hid their true feeling from us, but I don't think that was a good idea.
It must have been a shocking diagnosis. Then she woke up from anaesthetic to find that they could not do the surgery.
I've been at work, now I'm rushing to catch up on reading.
Nicole
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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To me, this seems like a successful reunion. It's surprising that she's unaware of your mother's pride in her abilities. Some times the older generation hid their true feeling from us, but I don't think that was a good idea.
It must have been a shocking diagnosis. Then she woke up from anaesthetic to find that they could not do the surgery.
I've been at work, now I'm rushing to catch up on reading.
Nicole
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Very successful, Nicole. Had my sister not chosen to alienate me and Mother, I would have shared this with her.
Barb took the news so well, I suspect the doctor may have prepared her for the worst. No way to ever know unless I learn the are of mediumship--my project for 2016. :-)
Comment from Leen1
This for me was such an emotional chapter. I didn't know how much until I read the last line and felt tears streaming down my face. It's wonderful indeed that you had this time together and at this point let past discords lie dormant. No doubt the next chapter will be emotional as well due to the inevitable outcome,
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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This for me was such an emotional chapter. I didn't know how much until I read the last line and felt tears streaming down my face. It's wonderful indeed that you had this time together and at this point let past discords lie dormant. No doubt the next chapter will be emotional as well due to the inevitable outcome,
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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I'm eager to recall what happened in the time she had left. A real story of redemption. Thanks for sharing your reaction. That's so important to a writer.
Comment from Donya Quijote
Quite a lady, your sister. She faced her death courageously from my perspective.
A bit about tone here. You present this segment very matter of fact like, however, it still manages for pack a wallop of emotional punch. I didn't notice any nits or find anything on which you can improve as I got caught up in the emotional conversation between you and your sister.
Emotions will run high as your sister nears her death and you and her reconcile... Good chapter...
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Quite a lady, your sister. She faced her death courageously from my perspective.
A bit about tone here. You present this segment very matter of fact like, however, it still manages for pack a wallop of emotional punch. I didn't notice any nits or find anything on which you can improve as I got caught up in the emotional conversation between you and your sister.
Emotions will run high as your sister nears her death and you and her reconcile... Good chapter...
Comment Written 14-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2015
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Thanks, Diana, for the comment on tone. Good to know that it works.
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, my, Shari, I have tears in my eyes. It is not so much from the cancer you sister is going through in this chapter, but her reaction to your mother's statement. It shows we are never to old to crave the approval of our parents, doesn't it.
Again, such excellent storytelling. You don't tell the story. Instead, you show the story thought the actions, dialog and circumstances that they reveal.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Oh, my, Shari, I have tears in my eyes. It is not so much from the cancer you sister is going through in this chapter, but her reaction to your mother's statement. It shows we are never to old to crave the approval of our parents, doesn't it.
Again, such excellent storytelling. You don't tell the story. Instead, you show the story thought the actions, dialog and circumstances that they reveal.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2015
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Yes! I was hoping for that kind of reaction to the ending. There will be more in another chapter on that situation. Appreciated the six star rating and the compliments.
