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Comment from redrocklover
You did an excellent job writing a poem about a topic of importance. Depending upon where you live, you may never even see railway tracks, so it's important to remind people of this potential problem.
Linda
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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You did an excellent job writing a poem about a topic of importance. Depending upon where you live, you may never even see railway tracks, so it's important to remind people of this potential problem.
Linda
Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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Thank you redrocklover.
Comment from kiwisteveh
An interesting form which I haven't seen before. If we are being nit-picking about syllables, I would point out that line 2 of the second stanza appears to have only 5 The alternating rhyming is a nice extra touch.
Of course railroad companies are in it for the money, so it must be tempting to skimp on maintenance - accidents will happen.
Steve
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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An interesting form which I haven't seen before. If we are being nit-picking about syllables, I would point out that line 2 of the second stanza appears to have only 5 The alternating rhyming is a nice extra touch.
Of course railroad companies are in it for the money, so it must be tempting to skimp on maintenance - accidents will happen.
Steve
Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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Thank you kiwisteveh. You are correct. I pronounced oil as 2 syllables.
Comment from kiwijenny
Yikes yikes yikes..we have a train blasting through our town..but I've noticed lately that they have replaced railroad ties..yay
Well done...trains are great transport but hazardous
God bless
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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Yikes yikes yikes..we have a train blasting through our town..but I've noticed lately that they have replaced railroad ties..yay
Well done...trains are great transport but hazardous
God bless
Comment Written 28-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2015
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Thank you kiwijenny. Good to know.
Comment from Pantygynt
When I first saw this I thought oh a double diamante - a double diamond was a brand of beer in this country some years ago. You have I believe let US railways deteriorate because the passengers (they're the ones who keep things safe) have deserted rail vfor air or road travel.
Britain is mostly too small to bother with air travel and the train is still number one choice for most longer journeys. Our tracks don't have time to rust over.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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When I first saw this I thought oh a double diamante - a double diamond was a brand of beer in this country some years ago. You have I believe let US railways deteriorate because the passengers (they're the ones who keep things safe) have deserted rail vfor air or road travel.
Britain is mostly too small to bother with air travel and the train is still number one choice for most longer journeys. Our tracks don't have time to rust over.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. You may have something there.
Comment from Joan E.
I agree with your call for more safety measures--thanks for documenting you concerns with your photograph. I enjoyed your rhymes, use of alliteration and shape of the stanzas. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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I agree with your call for more safety measures--thanks for documenting you concerns with your photograph. I enjoyed your rhymes, use of alliteration and shape of the stanzas. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you Joan
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Railroad Roulette" is an excellent poem calling attention to a dangerous situation, the deterioration of the railroad tracks. which can lead to catastrophe and environmental degradation. It is only one instance of the deterioration of infrastructure; highways, gas and oil pipelines,and bridges which are in serious need of repair cab lead to dangerous environmental and disruptions and serious loss of life. As usual you have introduced an unusual form which you have mastered completely. The figurative language; "clickity clicks," "devils dare" "rail road roulette" fresh and excellent.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hi, Treischel,
"Railroad Roulette" is an excellent poem calling attention to a dangerous situation, the deterioration of the railroad tracks. which can lead to catastrophe and environmental degradation. It is only one instance of the deterioration of infrastructure; highways, gas and oil pipelines,and bridges which are in serious need of repair cab lead to dangerous environmental and disruptions and serious loss of life. As usual you have introduced an unusual form which you have mastered completely. The figurative language; "clickity clicks," "devils dare" "rail road roulette" fresh and excellent.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Lreston. I agree, there are nancy needs in infrastructure. We seem to rather want to build sports stadiums for Billionaires.
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I agree.
Comment from ravenblack
It is a freaking devil's dare. So many bridges, including railroad treaties, are on the low end of passing inspection, some sure failures and there is still no passage of funding for infrastructure. Thanks for bringing it to light in Verse.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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It is a freaking devil's dare. So many bridges, including railroad treaties, are on the low end of passing inspection, some sure failures and there is still no passage of funding for infrastructure. Thanks for bringing it to light in Verse.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you ravenblack, ever candidate keeps promising but nothing happens.
Comment from amada
Near Minnesota! I have a son living in Rochester! Dramatic account of a very dangerous bridge, heavens! Favorite line: "It's such a Devil's dare." Something needs to be done.!
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Near Minnesota! I have a son living in Rochester! Dramatic account of a very dangerous bridge, heavens! Favorite line: "It's such a Devil's dare." Something needs to be done.!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Amada. Rochester is a great town. Especially if you work in health or hospitality industries.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
It's well known our infrastructure needs serious revitalizing in this country. Some progress has been made, but not enough. It's very frightening to know that dangerous chemicals are being transported on aging rails and bridges.
Thanks for bringing this serious situation to our attention through verse. As always, you deliver the message very skillfully.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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It's well known our infrastructure needs serious revitalizing in this country. Some progress has been made, but not enough. It's very frightening to know that dangerous chemicals are being transported on aging rails and bridges.
Thanks for bringing this serious situation to our attention through verse. As always, you deliver the message very skillfully.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you for an excellent review and encouragement.
Comment from I am Cat
Hi Tom,
It's only a matter of time before we've bore so many holes in our planet that it implodes and decides that 'this bra doesn't fit and I'm not going to do this anymore'
yeah... that.
;)
well done,
Cat
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Hi Tom,
It's only a matter of time before we've bore so many holes in our planet that it implodes and decides that 'this bra doesn't fit and I'm not going to do this anymore'
yeah... that.
;)
well done,
Cat
Comment Written 23-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2015
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Thank you Cat, Lol.
