The Royal Clock Tower Mourns
A solemn tribute for Paris Attacks.27 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
It is hard to understand why anyone would attack so many innocent people. There are better ways to make a statement. The fact is, though the act will be remembered, the reason why is already lost as people remember the horror and the hurt.
Well constructed nonet.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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It is hard to understand why anyone would attack so many innocent people. There are better ways to make a statement. The fact is, though the act will be remembered, the reason why is already lost as people remember the horror and the hurt.
Well constructed nonet.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Many thanks, w.j.debi
Comment from Joyce Long
This is a very sad time for our world. You have done a great job with the idea of your poem. Very well done.
To go out for an evening of entertainment and end up witnessing the horrible tragedy or being a part of it. How very, very sad.
I didn't see any errors.
Thank you for sharing.
Joyce 11-21-15
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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This is a very sad time for our world. You have done a great job with the idea of your poem. Very well done.
To go out for an evening of entertainment and end up witnessing the horrible tragedy or being a part of it. How very, very sad.
I didn't see any errors.
Thank you for sharing.
Joyce 11-21-15
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Many thanks, Joyce Long.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine nonet
both as a poem and as a tribute
to the victims and their families
as a nonet, the syllables are very good
as a tribute the emotional content
is very well expressed
Nicely done
with excellent art work to match
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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This is a fine nonet
both as a poem and as a tribute
to the victims and their families
as a nonet, the syllables are very good
as a tribute the emotional content
is very well expressed
Nicely done
with excellent art work to match
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you rspoet.
Comment from Sambangi
This is an excellent nonet written as a tribute to the Paris victims. Just have a re-look at first line. Looks like it has 10 syllables which actually should be 9 for a nonet. Rest all fine. Leaving that apart, I liked this very much for its subject and wording
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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This is an excellent nonet written as a tribute to the Paris victims. Just have a re-look at first line. Looks like it has 10 syllables which actually should be 9 for a nonet. Rest all fine. Leaving that apart, I liked this very much for its subject and wording
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Thank You. When I looked up the syllable count for (theater) it gave 2. I counted 3.
It left me puzzled for correctness. How do you feel with this, Sambangi?
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I checked in two web sites. Poetrysoup.com and howmanysyllables.com. Both are showing it as 3. I think as far as it is not claimed it as nonet, it is fine. Or I may be wrong
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Thank you, Sambangi.
Comment from Ben Colder
We are experiencing a great spiritual war fair manifested in the carnal. I suspect we will see more. Such a shame our countries seem to be in trouble.Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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We are experiencing a great spiritual war fair manifested in the carnal. I suspect we will see more. Such a shame our countries seem to be in trouble.Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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You're right indeed it is spiritual. Thank You, Colder.
Comment from Irish Goat
nice nonet about the terrorist attack in France this past weekend. Well described and emotionally evocative wording on the event. Good diction choices and all syllable counts were dead on. Good job
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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nice nonet about the terrorist attack in France this past weekend. Well described and emotionally evocative wording on the event. Good diction choices and all syllable counts were dead on. Good job
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2015
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Thank You. Best wishes on your Chapbook. Irish Goat.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a well written poem that shows the horror of this day. I like the last line "net" which is exactly what this was. Your poem does a good job of showing what happened and the sadness of this event.
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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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This is a well written poem that shows the horror of this day. I like the last line "net" which is exactly what this was. Your poem does a good job of showing what happened and the sadness of this event.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2015
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Thank You, Michael
