The Royal Clock Tower Mourns
A solemn tribute for Paris Attacks.27 total reviews
Comment from cj lutton
A shockingly timely poem on today's sad commentary.
The world is at one moment joyous and full of potential, and in the very next instant, your sanity is put to the test.
Your short verse conveys the desperateness of our world beautifully.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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A shockingly timely poem on today's sad commentary.
The world is at one moment joyous and full of potential, and in the very next instant, your sanity is put to the test.
Your short verse conveys the desperateness of our world beautifully.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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My thanks to you, cj lutton
Comment from Liberty Justice
Mourning personification-the tower mourns dedcribes a happy time turned tragic alluding to Paris violent mass shootings.liberty justice
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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Mourning personification-the tower mourns dedcribes a happy time turned tragic alluding to Paris violent mass shootings.liberty justice
Comment Written 04-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2015
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My humble thanks, Liberty Justice
Comment from nancyrabbrose
You have written a lovely, heartfelt tribute to the people of Paris on the recent terrorist attacks. I believe that artists can help people from afar with their artwork -- especially in times of great trouble.
Good for you and well done one the writing and illustration selection.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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You have written a lovely, heartfelt tribute to the people of Paris on the recent terrorist attacks. I believe that artists can help people from afar with their artwork -- especially in times of great trouble.
Good for you and well done one the writing and illustration selection.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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Many Thanks, nancyabbrose.
Comment from Jacq77
This is a fine tribute to the tragedy that happened in Paris recently. Such senseless acts of barbarism leave the world reeling. I feel you have captured the horror, especially in your words, "Then serial rapid shots, there attackers stand mute." Pure, cold-blooded murder. We all mourn for those lost and injured, caught within the crazy murderers' net. Well done with this.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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This is a fine tribute to the tragedy that happened in Paris recently. Such senseless acts of barbarism leave the world reeling. I feel you have captured the horror, especially in your words, "Then serial rapid shots, there attackers stand mute." Pure, cold-blooded murder. We all mourn for those lost and injured, caught within the crazy murderers' net. Well done with this.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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Thank You, Jacq77.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written poem depicting one of the horrors of the Modern world.
One that media seems to want to play over and over again, simply for the viewers their reports rate.
Uses terms such as "Royal Tower mourns," and "aggression acts," to much better illustrate the devastation caused by these terrorists in support of their own agendas.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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Well written poem depicting one of the horrors of the Modern world.
One that media seems to want to play over and over again, simply for the viewers their reports rate.
Uses terms such as "Royal Tower mourns," and "aggression acts," to much better illustrate the devastation caused by these terrorists in support of their own agendas.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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Thank You, Brett Matthew West.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a sound write and a solid tribute towards the Paris tragedies just recently. Very heartfelt and reflective. Your syllable count is correct. My only comment would be the last two lines. I'm not sure if it's the word net that does not sound as powerful as it should to end this piece. Perhaps if you change the word "within" to 'caught in' that may sound better to include the use of 'net'. Food for thought. Well done and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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This is a sound write and a solid tribute towards the Paris tragedies just recently. Very heartfelt and reflective. Your syllable count is correct. My only comment would be the last two lines. I'm not sure if it's the word net that does not sound as powerful as it should to end this piece. Perhaps if you change the word "within" to 'caught in' that may sound better to include the use of 'net'. Food for thought. Well done and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you for your suggestions, PoemsOFDD.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Great tribute to the innocent people that lost their lives in the Paris terror attack and the loved ones who stayed behind to mourne the terrible attacks.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Great tribute to the innocent people that lost their lives in the Paris terror attack and the loved ones who stayed behind to mourne the terrible attacks.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Sandra du Plessis.
Comment from AnnieDawn
Your poem is good with a lot of current history contained in it which I enjoyed reading but to follow the form you only have nine lines and are missing the line with nine syllables. All the other lines are correct in their syllable count. If you can check on that and add that line your poem will be perfect. You have done a good job with this and I am sure that the missing line is just an oversight.
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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Your poem is good with a lot of current history contained in it which I enjoyed reading but to follow the form you only have nine lines and are missing the line with nine syllables. All the other lines are correct in their syllable count. If you can check on that and add that line your poem will be perfect. You have done a good job with this and I am sure that the missing line is just an oversight.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Thank You, AnnieDawn.
Comment from Pyrrho
I often have difficulty with free verse because poets employing it tend to be abstruse ... in fact revel in hiding their meaning. Such is ... almost ... the case here.
I read this not as a commentary on the atrocious act, but more a reporting of same.
My review is neither negative not is it constructive criticism. It is more my inability to accept free verse as poetry ... my deficiency, not yours.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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I often have difficulty with free verse because poets employing it tend to be abstruse ... in fact revel in hiding their meaning. Such is ... almost ... the case here.
I read this not as a commentary on the atrocious act, but more a reporting of same.
My review is neither negative not is it constructive criticism. It is more my inability to accept free verse as poetry ... my deficiency, not yours.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Humbly thankful for your honesty, Pyrrho.
Comment from Goyas
This poem is short and to the point. The flow of the words used and the picture complement each other. I wouldn't change anything. Keep up the good work
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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This poem is short and to the point. The flow of the words used and the picture complement each other. I wouldn't change anything. Keep up the good work
Comment Written 21-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Than You, Goyas.
