Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Watch"A collection of dark poetry
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Comment from ravenblack
You hear stories of dogs guarding the graves of their masters- what a unique take! I hope that when it is my turn to go, I have a hawk...rather than a raven lol. Excellent poem! Is the hawk Photoshopped on to the obelisk or was your friend one of the fortunate photographers to be at the right place at the right time?
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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You hear stories of dogs guarding the graves of their masters- what a unique take! I hope that when it is my turn to go, I have a hawk...rather than a raven lol. Excellent poem! Is the hawk Photoshopped on to the obelisk or was your friend one of the fortunate photographers to be at the right place at the right time?
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, ravenblack, for the excellent and amusing review and the excellent rating. I think Dean has reserved the raven, so no worries, you get a falcon or a hawk. He was one of those fortunate ones who happened upon the right moment. But he often walks through that cemetery, a lot of history, art and emotion there. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your positive and encouraging words very much.
Comment from Jacob Collins
I really liked the strong visual imagery in your writing of the owner's pet standing in his grave, I could feel the emotion tied to it especially when he wouldn't move from the grave. An excellent write, thanks for sharing...Jacob
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I really liked the strong visual imagery in your writing of the owner's pet standing in his grave, I could feel the emotion tied to it especially when he wouldn't move from the grave. An excellent write, thanks for sharing...Jacob
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Jacob, for the excellent and interesting review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your positive and encouraging words very much.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi rspoet. You have written a great poem of unbridled dedication of the Hawk on watch for his master and just how long he would stay there who knows? I enjoyed the composition ans strong words used in this poem and your first stanza set up the rest of the poem. Great image and use of the black and orange colours to compliment the image. A sad but lovely poem. Cheers Christineð???
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Hi rspoet. You have written a great poem of unbridled dedication of the Hawk on watch for his master and just how long he would stay there who knows? I enjoyed the composition ans strong words used in this poem and your first stanza set up the rest of the poem. Great image and use of the black and orange colours to compliment the image. A sad but lovely poem. Cheers Christineð???
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Christine, for the excellent and interesting review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the photographs of the Hawk. Thanks for mentioning the presentation. I appreciated your warm and encouraging words very much.
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you are very welcome😀
Comment from mermaids
I am in awe here. Love the tale of the hawk, still guarding his master after he passed on. Your poetic form tells a tale, it is powerful and has a spiritual feel to it. The hawk is a loyal hero. His eyes are sharp, he cannot be deceived, shows how strong this bird is and shows his character. Love the pic, it fits your words.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I am in awe here. Love the tale of the hawk, still guarding his master after he passed on. Your poetic form tells a tale, it is powerful and has a spiritual feel to it. The hawk is a loyal hero. His eyes are sharp, he cannot be deceived, shows how strong this bird is and shows his character. Love the pic, it fits your words.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, mermaids, for the marvelous and interesting review and the exceptional rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the picture of the hawk. I think of the hawk as a steadfast and loyal hero, as well. I appreciated your warm and encouraging words and the splendid six stars very much. Thank you! :))
Comment from AnnaLinda
repoet,
That's a beautiful photo your friend has and very nice of him to let you use it to accompany your well written poem. It was interesting to read and I like how your repeating lines which adds emphasis.
Wonderful form, subject and rhyme throughout!
Linda
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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repoet,
That's a beautiful photo your friend has and very nice of him to let you use it to accompany your well written poem. It was interesting to read and I like how your repeating lines which adds emphasis.
Wonderful form, subject and rhyme throughout!
Linda
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Linda, for the detailed and interesting review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your warm and encouraging words very much.
Comment from MacMhuirich
Beautiful, the grace and guile of the hawk caught in your words. Like the fact it has alighted on the Tom of the austringer (excellent word) to give the poem a cnnention to ponder. Thank you and your anonymous friend for sharing.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Beautiful, the grace and guile of the hawk caught in your words. Like the fact it has alighted on the Tom of the austringer (excellent word) to give the poem a cnnention to ponder. Thank you and your anonymous friend for sharing.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, John, for the excellent and interesting review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your positive and encouraging words very much.
Comment from Eric1
Hi RSP, this is a beautifully written and well structured poem, I am never sure whether this is free verse or blank verse but either way it is a really excellent work that puts me in mind of Greyfriars Bobby.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Hi RSP, this is a beautifully written and well structured poem, I am never sure whether this is free verse or blank verse but either way it is a really excellent work that puts me in mind of Greyfriars Bobby.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Eric, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. Because of the repeat line and several near rhymes, it is not blank verse. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your positive and encouraging words very much.
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You are most welcome my friend.
Comment from Ben Colder
Graceful and cunning, the hawk. I see them often in the fields waiting for prey. We have tangled before. They know who I am. Good poem. Well penned.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Graceful and cunning, the hawk. I see them often in the fields waiting for prey. We have tangled before. They know who I am. Good poem. Well penned.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Ben, for the interesting review and the excellent rating. There are many hawks where I live, as well. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your positive and encouraging words very much.
Comment from Nosha17
I am afraid I am not too fond of horror or the supernatural, I find it rather scary. Well chosen words and imagery. Sad story,
Faye
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I am afraid I am not too fond of horror or the supernatural, I find it rather scary. Well chosen words and imagery. Sad story,
Faye
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Faye, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the words and imagery. It is a sad story, but the austringer lies in peace. I know supernatural is not a topic you are fond of; I appreciated your positive review very much.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I must learn to become a falconer, I would like one to keep guard over me too. What a lovely poem, I like supernatural stories, and this one is really good. A pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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I must learn to become a falconer, I would like one to keep guard over me too. What a lovely poem, I like supernatural stories, and this one is really good. A pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Hello Sandra, I hope your knee is improving each day. Thank you for the detailed and interesting review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the Hawk. I appreciated your positive and encouraging words very much.
