Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Watch"A collection of dark poetry
69 total reviews
Comment from SarJ93
I like this a lot. There is something truly majestic about a hawk and you portray that very well here. I can really feel the power behind the bird as it stands watch over its master's grave.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
I like this a lot. There is something truly majestic about a hawk and you portray that very well here. I can really feel the power behind the bird as it stands watch over its master's grave.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Sarj, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem of the hawk's watch over his master's grave.
I appreciate your encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. Sorry I haven't been around much but this internet here is like the master lying below dictating my life. This is another beautifully written and presented piece and scary as heck to an old bloke like me. Great job. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
G'day mate. Sorry I haven't been around much but this internet here is like the master lying below dictating my life. This is another beautifully written and presented piece and scary as heck to an old bloke like me. Great job. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 01-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2015
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Hello, again. Thank you, Fez, for the encouraging review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the scary blank verse poem of the hawk and its vigil. I appreciate your positive comments very much.
Comment from Pantygynt
I missed this first time around. I remember seeing it but it coincided with a very busy period and I never got around to reading it properly or reviewing it. So I am here today by virtue of Part 2 that I have just now read and will be reviewing when I have finished here.
This is an excellent poem. It seems pretty good blank verse to me. Now back to Part 2.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
I missed this first time around. I remember seeing it but it coincided with a very busy period and I never got around to reading it properly or reviewing it. So I am here today by virtue of Part 2 that I have just now read and will be reviewing when I have finished here.
This is an excellent poem. It seems pretty good blank verse to me. Now back to Part 2.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2015
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Hello again. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem enough to read and review both parts. I plan it to be a trilogy, so the last part will be the finale. Thank you very much for your positive and encouraging comments.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow! I just read partII and had to come looking for partI - what a great read this is! Now I can't wait to return to partII again and to write my review. Chilling, and yet somehow so very marvelous - to think this bird is watching over the master in death...loved it!
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
Wow! I just read partII and had to come looking for partI - what a great read this is! Now I can't wait to return to partII again and to write my review. Chilling, and yet somehow so very marvelous - to think this bird is watching over the master in death...loved it!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2015
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Hello again. Thank you for going back to Part I, I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments, as I respect your opinion very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the first two parts and the form. The last one should be finished shortly. Thank you! :)
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from chasennov
book Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness This is a poem of a hawk and his master. "The Watch" This is a great poem you have created here. I found a lot of power exuding. Flying as high as a Hawk.It also has a clear message. Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
book Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness This is a poem of a hawk and his master. "The Watch" This is a great poem you have created here. I found a lot of power exuding. Flying as high as a Hawk.It also has a clear message. Very well done.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you, chasennov, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Gloria ....
Wow, rs. Excellent idea for a poem into supernatural poetry. The loyalty we receive from animals is the kind we hope to obtain from our family and friends.
The photograph is actually very well composed and developed. I love the tree behind the hawk. He looks quite noble, determined and fierce atop the obelisk.
Excellent use of poetic devices, and all written in fine meter without rhyme.
Exceptional presentation and write all around.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
Wow, rs. Excellent idea for a poem into supernatural poetry. The loyalty we receive from animals is the kind we hope to obtain from our family and friends.
The photograph is actually very well composed and developed. I love the tree behind the hawk. He looks quite noble, determined and fierce atop the obelisk.
Excellent use of poetic devices, and all written in fine meter without rhyme.
Exceptional presentation and write all around.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Hello Gloria. Thank you for the marvelous review and the exceptional rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. The autumn leaves were a little bit of serendipity, but he is a noble bird and a true and faithful friend, who will not leave his trainer. I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments and those elegant six stars very much. Thank you. :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello rspoet
Very powerful rhyming poem that will draw a readers full attention
written in excellent Iambic pentameter
A very impressing photo.
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
Hello rspoet
Very powerful rhyming poem that will draw a readers full attention
written in excellent Iambic pentameter
A very impressing photo.
Gert
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Gert, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil, and noticed the iambic pentameter I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments very much.
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You are so welcome rspoet
Gert
Comment from RGstar
I like the thought, the narrative and the execution here. Deeply thought through with a strong reasoning behind the narrative.
Good aura.
You have worked well here, my friend.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
I like the thought, the narrative and the execution here. Deeply thought through with a strong reasoning behind the narrative.
Good aura.
You have worked well here, my friend.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2015
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Hello RG. Thank you for the splendid review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. I appreciate you mentioning all the details, for the poem was carefully crafted. I'm currently working on part two. I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments and the best wishes very much. Thank you for the marvelous stars, as well!
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You are welcomed. Great write.
Comment from Word Doctor Carson Volk
This is a really cool piece! I love the idea of a hawk (or is it a falcon in the picture?) watching over his former falconer. Ravens or crows or other eerie birds are usually used in this sort of context so seeing a different bird, especially a bird of prey, being used instead is a nice little switch up from the norm.
Thank you for sharing this delightful piece!
With gratitude and respect,
Your friend and colleague,
Word Doctor Carson Volk
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
This is a really cool piece! I love the idea of a hawk (or is it a falcon in the picture?) watching over his former falconer. Ravens or crows or other eerie birds are usually used in this sort of context so seeing a different bird, especially a bird of prey, being used instead is a nice little switch up from the norm.
Thank you for sharing this delightful piece!
With gratitude and respect,
Your friend and colleague,
Word Doctor Carson Volk
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Word Doctor, for the marvelous review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments very much.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, this really tugged on my heartstrings. I always get emotional when I read about bonds between humans and other species.
You did a wonderful job with the meter which made this a joy to read. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
Oh, this really tugged on my heartstrings. I always get emotional when I read about bonds between humans and other species.
You did a wonderful job with the meter which made this a joy to read. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 24-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Lou, for the excellent review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and the art work of the hawk and its vigil. It is a true and faithful friend, and will not leave its trainer. I appreciate your warm and encouraging comments very much.