Christine's Poems
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Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Christine. I enjoyed reading your excellent poem. Rhyming and content are interesting and poem flows well. The different post for our poems of Picture This are truly varied. Marilyn/BeasPeas
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Hi Christine. I enjoyed reading your excellent poem. Rhyming and content are interesting and poem flows well. The different post for our poems of Picture This are truly varied. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Hi Marilyn, Yes they have been a varied lot but all so interesting and Thanks you for your review on my take, so appreciated. I have enjoyed being part of the 'crew' and look forward to catching up on all the other ones too With a big Cheers to you Christine😃
Comment from tfawcus
What a very fine response to the picture challenge! You have managed to include so many of the features of the painting and brought a depth of meaning to them. What miseries sometimes lurk beneath the painted mask, the veneer we show to the world. You have also managed to suggest an element of voodoo - which was what first occurred to me when looking at the picture. This is a fine and thoughtful poem, well worthy of six stars. There is just one tiny speck in the last line to flick away before the contest deadline. It's a demon!
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What a very fine response to the picture challenge! You have managed to include so many of the features of the painting and brought a depth of meaning to them. What miseries sometimes lurk beneath the painted mask, the veneer we show to the world. You have also managed to suggest an element of voodoo - which was what first occurred to me when looking at the picture. This is a fine and thoughtful poem, well worthy of six stars. There is just one tiny speck in the last line to flick away before the contest deadline. It's a demon!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Wow tfawcus I am overwhelmed by your lovely lovely comments and your 6 stars given for this, so Thanks you so much. I did enjoy writing this and sometimes I think the image speaks the words and I am just the scribe. So your words make it all worth while . I will review the last line and fix the speck , so with a big smile and Cheers for your feedbcak it is truly appreciated Christine😃
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Christine,
I just love your poem. I haven't said that about any of the others. This poem struck a chord in me. Beautifully written.
Blessings,
Darlene
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Christine,
I just love your poem. I haven't said that about any of the others. This poem struck a chord in me. Beautifully written.
Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Hi Darlene you truly honour me woth you beautiful comments and I am so glad you loved it. I Loved writing this and I enjoy constructing my words so they flow and rhyme ( a bit old fashioned lol) What a great challenge and I am so glad I joined this and Can't wait to read all the entries. Hug and Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Joyce Long
This is very well done. "A Painted Smile" seems like an excellent title. The smile does seem to dominate the picture. A Painted Smile reveals the fact that most of us put on masks when we face the world. "My evening was fine. Thanks for asking," as we smile and cover up the fact that we had a huge fight with our boyfriend last night.
Very well done.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 11-9-15
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This is very well done. "A Painted Smile" seems like an excellent title. The smile does seem to dominate the picture. A Painted Smile reveals the fact that most of us put on masks when we face the world. "My evening was fine. Thanks for asking," as we smile and cover up the fact that we had a huge fight with our boyfriend last night.
Very well done.
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 11-9-15
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thank you Joyce for your great review for my poem and yes this is exactly what is done often a false comment when thectruth is not revealed. I am glad you stopped in to have a read and got my message from this Cheers for your kind words Christine😃
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, Chrissy, you did an excellent job writing this interpretation of the picture, great imagery presented here. I enjoyed reading it.
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this is an excellent write, Chrissy, you did an excellent job writing this interpretation of the picture, great imagery presented here. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thank you sweetwoodjax for your lovely review and comments for my poem I did enjoy writing this one too so I am looking forward to reading all the others also Glad you like my effort Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
What a beautiful poem inspired by my picture of Frida Khalo. It is interesting to read all the different interpretation's of the same picture. I like your poem and the rhyme and meter are solid. Good job!
PS. Are you using 'advance editor'? Let me know if you would like some help on how to upload the picture to your poem. The way you have it is fine, no worries.
Gypsy
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Hello :)
What a beautiful poem inspired by my picture of Frida Khalo. It is interesting to read all the different interpretation's of the same picture. I like your poem and the rhyme and meter are solid. Good job!
PS. Are you using 'advance editor'? Let me know if you would like some help on how to upload the picture to your poem. The way you have it is fine, no worries.
Gypsy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Hi Gypsy thanks for your lovely review of your image Frida Khalo and humble apologies to you for the way I have portrayed her with my image I just use my IPad for everything and sometimes I have just expanded the image and take a screen shot to use. it seemsxwhen the images are sent on email and I presss download I am not sure where they download too so I just do my best to do a screen shot imstead so hence the enlarged version to get rid of text that comes up on the side from messenger. I will spend some time on my lap top when I get a chance and see if I can do a better job on that. ( technology is not my speciality Although I can put together a fabulous power point presentation when I teach I am really very average at other stuff Just ask my kids LOL I have never tried advance editor so I will get back to you when I have a spare minute and see if I can have a lesson . Hope all that makes sense and hope I haven't done too badly . by the way great image forcthis challenge and can't wait to read all the others Cheers Christine😀
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Hello Christine, I wouldn't worry about it, it looks good. I can imagine how hard it would be using an Ipad. I have a kindle fire, I am not sure how different they are, but I always use the laptop for publishing. I am very picky with presentation. I am a very visual person. I love using PowerPoint! I was a teacher of office and computer skills, among other things, for ten years and I love to teach. What do you teach? Well, if you ever want help on how advance editor let me know. :)
Comment from Linda Engel
Very expressive, Christine. How many people do you know that wears that "painted smile" all the while knowing that they are hurting and suffering inside. They may feel they are brave in holding their head high but you wish their burdens be taken from their shoulders for a true smile to shine through. I really enjoyed this Good work.
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Very expressive, Christine. How many people do you know that wears that "painted smile" all the while knowing that they are hurting and suffering inside. They may feel they are brave in holding their head high but you wish their burdens be taken from their shoulders for a true smile to shine through. I really enjoyed this Good work.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thanks Linda for your great review and rating for my take on this challenge. I am sure there are many out there who feel like this, and this image just made me wonder about who was behind this mask so I am glad you enjoyed my poem . Cheers Christine😀.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Christine - a good interpretation of the picture in good heptameter throughout. Questions asked, then advice given to this woman. Tiny typo 'facade' not 'fasade', and line three stanza 3 theY've - add the Y. But this is well written, descriptive and an interesting read. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x
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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Hi Christine - a good interpretation of the picture in good heptameter throughout. Questions asked, then advice given to this woman. Tiny typo 'facade' not 'fasade', and line three stanza 3 theY've - add the Y. But this is well written, descriptive and an interesting read. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
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Thanks Dorothy for your review and helpful comments I will attend to these now and appreciate your picking them up. I must admit I did this at 11pm last night as I have a busy day today ( it is 6am now in Australia) I did wonder about facade and grateful for your correction. I enjoyed writing this so Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Mark Valentine
Great take on the picture. I love the structure and internal rhymes, and the fact that you tell such a complete message with a beginning (wondering what lies behind the facade), a middle (answering that question) and an end (exhorting her to lose the mask). You can tell that a lot of thought went into this one.
A couple of minor SPAG notes/questions:
In the fourth line, did you mean "you" instead of "your"? ("never set you free")
Two spelling notes (though these might just be American spellings) "Facade" instead of "fasade", and "elixir" instead of "elixer".
None of that detracts at all from this wonderful poem however.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Great take on the picture. I love the structure and internal rhymes, and the fact that you tell such a complete message with a beginning (wondering what lies behind the facade), a middle (answering that question) and an end (exhorting her to lose the mask). You can tell that a lot of thought went into this one.
A couple of minor SPAG notes/questions:
In the fourth line, did you mean "you" instead of "your"? ("never set you free")
Two spelling notes (though these might just be American spellings) "Facade" instead of "fasade", and "elixir" instead of "elixer".
None of that detracts at all from this wonderful poem however.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Hi Mark ,wow thank you so much for your wonderful review and six stars for my poem for this challenge I did enjoy writing this and this image just seemed to produce this feeling of dispair so out it came ( Also appreciate your spag pick up and yes it was you instead of your. as always spellling a challenge sometimes I wondered about facade also so glad you allowed for these with your review 😀 ) I seem to have a rhyming scheme in my head when I write particular poems not the best at free style lol ? look forward to reading everyone elses entry With Cheers Christine 😃😃😃
Comment from Joy Graham
Well done, Christine :) This isn't an easy image to work with. It's from the Mexican celebration of the dead, I believe. I like that you interpreted it as a painted smile. You have nice lilting lines and nice aabb rhymes.
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Well done, Christine :) This isn't an easy image to work with. It's from the Mexican celebration of the dead, I believe. I like that you interpreted it as a painted smile. You have nice lilting lines and nice aabb rhymes.
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2015
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Thanks Joy I had no idea where this came from (other than Gypsy lol) so just looked at it and produced my interpretation which ended up with this one I hoped the rhyming scheme worked and glad you thought it a 5 starer . it will be interesting to see what everyone comes up with Glad you had a read Cheers Christine😃
