Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "The Dark Lady's Soul"A collection of dark poetry
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is indeed a great dark poem that Dean would be proud of himself. Well done indeed.
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is indeed a great dark poem that Dean would be proud of himself. Well done indeed.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you liked the poem of the dark lady for Dean's book.
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Indeed.
Comment from Ekim777
This is an ambitious work; a detailed definition of our souls. She is a feminine being coming alive in the darkness. Even in men she represents the feminine and mother of life , death and things eternal.
Her presence became known to us in early legends and in poems like the one we are writing about now.
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This is an ambitious work; a detailed definition of our souls. She is a feminine being coming alive in the darkness. Even in men she represents the feminine and mother of life , death and things eternal.
Her presence became known to us in early legends and in poems like the one we are writing about now.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for this exceptional rating and sharing such insightful observations. It is obvious you got a lot from the poem, and that is a good thing. Everything is very much appreciated.
Comment from papa55mike
This is friggin' awesome. I love the art work and the video. It takes the poem to a different level. You can feel her eyes on you the whole time you read the poem. I wish I had a six for you. Have a great Sunday and God bless.
mike
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This is friggin' awesome. I love the art work and the video. It takes the poem to a different level. You can feel her eyes on you the whole time you read the poem. I wish I had a six for you. Have a great Sunday and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you liked the poem, picture, and video.
Comment from Zue65
I admired this poem because despite the dark subject or dark theme of the poem, it still emerged as light, tempered down theme which is not really scary. The pictures were magnificent and they amplified your message well. God bless.
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I admired this poem because despite the dark subject or dark theme of the poem, it still emerged as light, tempered down theme which is not really scary. The pictures were magnificent and they amplified your message well. God bless.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you liked the poem, especially since it wasn't really scary. This was out of the box for me, so I couldn't make it really scary. I am glad you liked the pictures, too.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A poem worthy of Dean, my friend, and a good retelling of the story of the woman in black in poetic form. I also noticed you have taken Dean's graphics for the poem, which I find intriguing.
Great job,
Rhonda
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A poem worthy of Dean, my friend, and a good retelling of the story of the woman in black in poetic form. I also noticed you have taken Dean's graphics for the poem, which I find intriguing.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts about the dark lady. I am so glad you found it "worthy of Dean," and that you liked the graphics.
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It was worthy in other ways as well.
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Thank you so much for that. I just meant that your comments were very meaningful and meant a lot. To be thought of in terms of an excellent writer like Dean is an added bonus.
Comment from Pantygynt
You have have given yourself a free rein on the matter of meter but maintain your rhyme schem throughout. There are many different rhythms here but my guess is that you thought less about naming them than you did about adopting them if they worked, and they do. The shift from iambic (well you do start that way) to trochaic rhythm and other shifts along the the way are delightfully unsettling - a case of form matching conmtent in this grim poem about the supernatural.
The thing is that it works and works well.
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You have have given yourself a free rein on the matter of meter but maintain your rhyme schem throughout. There are many different rhythms here but my guess is that you thought less about naming them than you did about adopting them if they worked, and they do. The shift from iambic (well you do start that way) to trochaic rhythm and other shifts along the the way are delightfully unsettling - a case of form matching conmtent in this grim poem about the supernatural.
The thing is that it works and works well.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing your observations. I really appreciate the time you took with the poem and I am glad you thought it all worked.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very sonnet-like, repa1, and the story this poem tells of a dark, forlorn lady roaming the woods, lost and looking for a way home, is frightening. While the meter is not iambic, as you alluded to in your author's notes, it detracts absolutely nothing from the rhyming and rhythm of the piece.
Your use of strong verbs and descriptive adjectives quite easily enhances the overall gist and despondency of the poem. You've obviously chosen your words carefully, as this terror tale in poetry truly hits home.
Bravo, my friend, and thank you for yet another stunning addition to Shifting Shadows.
With gratitude
~Dean
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Very sonnet-like, repa1, and the story this poem tells of a dark, forlorn lady roaming the woods, lost and looking for a way home, is frightening. While the meter is not iambic, as you alluded to in your author's notes, it detracts absolutely nothing from the rhyming and rhythm of the piece.
Your use of strong verbs and descriptive adjectives quite easily enhances the overall gist and despondency of the poem. You've obviously chosen your words carefully, as this terror tale in poetry truly hits home.
Bravo, my friend, and thank you for yet another stunning addition to Shifting Shadows.
With gratitude
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Dean, it's respa1 who has written about this "dark, forlorn lady roaming the woods." The exceptional rating and wonderful comments are truly appreciated, as I came out of my box to the darker side, too! I am thrilled that I got descriptions from you like "frightening," "despondency," and "terror tale", as who would have ever thought I could do this? It just goes to show that with the right kind of incentive, anything is possible. I am happy to be a part of "Shifting Shadows". ~Respa1
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Hahaha, I know, and I thought I had edited my review in time to reflect this.
Apparently not...
I apologize for mixing up the user names. They are so very close, and I was not yet fully awake, I suppose.
That still take nothing away from your accomplishment, as I know you don't "do dark" often, if at all before now.
It was an exceptional poem, and I am deeply grateful to your for having submitted it.
Again, so sorry for the mix up. Hopefully all is well now.
Always with respect
~Dean :}
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All was well, anyway, because your review meant everything. I am thrilled you liked it. The dark lady was the first thing that popped into my mind, and I really enjoyed writing it. Maybe I will try another in the future, as it was fun, and it was my first time "on the dark side!" Thanks again for the opportunity to do this and share it on FS and in your book.
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The pleasure was all mine, my friend. I appreciate your contribution very much.
Writing of darkness doesn't mean that you're a dark person. It only means that you see the beauty on both sides of the spectrum, that's all.
In reality, I'm about as dark as Mickey Mouse, LOL...
~Dean ;}
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I am glad you appreciate the contribution. As long as beauty accompanies the dark, it's okay. After all, even Darth Vader has a touching moment in "Star Wars"! Now, you have opened yourself up to a new challenge: a poem that would make Mickey Mouse, or other similar Disney character proud! That could be interesting after you finish this book project! (heh, heh)
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Well, I was working on one about how drastically Disneyland would change if I owned it. I sure wouldn't be the same place, I can tell you that much, heh-heh...
~Dean ;}
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Dean, they already have the Tower of Terror there, and no, I did not go in it!! Okay, after you do this changed Disneyland poem--who knows what in the world that would be like, but I have a feeling you are going to tell us (heh,heh), you still have the challenge of a poem about a Mickey Mouse like character, no evil ones or changing perfectly nice characters we know and love into zombies:)
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Drat! Well, there goes my Mickey Louse character idea...
Heh-heh-heh...
Comment from royowen
Beautifully composed, this narrative is most elegant in its inclination, matchless in depth and mysterious in perception. Who is this darkly shadowed lady, myth or reality? A wraithlike creature. A legend? Beautifully composed in eloquent language, the meter is even and flowing, the sonnet and ballad like, in abab rhyming with aa couplet works well, blessings, Roy
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Beautifully composed, this narrative is most elegant in its inclination, matchless in depth and mysterious in perception. Who is this darkly shadowed lady, myth or reality? A wraithlike creature. A legend? Beautifully composed in eloquent language, the meter is even and flowing, the sonnet and ballad like, in abab rhyming with aa couplet works well, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing such in depth observations. I can't say enough and am so appreciative of the praise you have for my poem. It is very different for me to write, but I think it was all due to the dark lady who inspired me, along with Dean!
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Very well done,
Comment from Glasstruth
The only people that seem to believe in ghosts are the ones who've seen them. They're lost souls that have not moved on. Nice flow, rhythm, and the rhyming is smooth. Reads well. Thanks for sharing. Les
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The only people that seem to believe in ghosts are the ones who've seen them. They're lost souls that have not moved on. Nice flow, rhythm, and the rhyming is smooth. Reads well. Thanks for sharing. Les
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I think the dark lady has seen ghosts, but not her writer. The dark lady is a lost, wandering soul.
Comment from CobiDawn
Gorgeous yet dark imagery in the telling of the poem /story as well as the pictures chosen to represent the dark lady. I can imagine what she looks like and how she feels and lovely rhyme scheme.
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Gorgeous yet dark imagery in the telling of the poem /story as well as the pictures chosen to represent the dark lady. I can imagine what she looks like and how she feels and lovely rhyme scheme.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you appreciated the dark imagery and pictures. The dark lady and I are glad you liked her story.
