Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "The Dark Lady's Soul"A collection of dark poetry
45 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi Respa, I think this beautiful poem is more of a sad poem than scary, but that doesn't detract from the tale, the reader is left to make up their own mind and put their own interpretation on why the dark lady roams the night, excellent rhyming, rhythm and flow with good meter throughout.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Hi Respa, I think this beautiful poem is more of a sad poem than scary, but that doesn't detract from the tale, the reader is left to make up their own mind and put their own interpretation on why the dark lady roams the night, excellent rhyming, rhythm and flow with good meter throughout.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I couldn't do a scary poem if I tried. That is why I came up with the tale of the dark lady. She is the first thing that came to mind. I appreciate you commenting on the reader being left to make up their own mind, and your comments on the technical aspects, as well.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Unspoken94
Excellent rhyme and pace to this poem.
I especially like the spirit of the never-endingness
of the plight of this character. This is more of a
sad feeling in this poem than a scary one and I
am refreshed that this can happen in this
category. -Bill
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Excellent rhyme and pace to this poem.
I especially like the spirit of the never-endingness
of the plight of this character. This is more of a
sad feeling in this poem than a scary one and I
am refreshed that this can happen in this
category. -Bill
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you liked the spirit of the dark lady's plight, and also that you appreciated it for not being scary. This was out of the box for me. I wanted to be a part of Dean's book, but I couldn't be scary if I tried.
Comment from rspoet
A very beautiful and mysterious poem with words that seem to jump off the page. I like how much of the dark lady and her plight are left open to interpretation. It could be that she's enduring some sort of punishment, but perhaps she's also just lost and trying to find her way through an unknown path but just hasn't quite found it yet. Continuing on with her journey could be a story of perseverance, though I also wonder if she might be happier if she simply embraced the beauty of the moonlit night since that seems to be who she is. Either way, a very beautiful and thought provoking poem!
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A very beautiful and mysterious poem with words that seem to jump off the page. I like how much of the dark lady and her plight are left open to interpretation. It could be that she's enduring some sort of punishment, but perhaps she's also just lost and trying to find her way through an unknown path but just hasn't quite found it yet. Continuing on with her journey could be a story of perseverance, though I also wonder if she might be happier if she simply embraced the beauty of the moonlit night since that seems to be who she is. Either way, a very beautiful and thought provoking poem!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the exceptional rating, but more than that is the beauty of these comments. It is obvious you put a lot of time and thought into this, and I also find your review quite poetic. I am also glad that you get that "her plight is left open to interpretation."
Comment from Nosha17
A dark poem, but not scary, more melancholic and sad. Good descriptions, excellent imagery and rhyming. Excellent visuals. Faye
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A dark poem, but not scary, more melancholic and sad. Good descriptions, excellent imagery and rhyming. Excellent visuals. Faye
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I couldn't do a scary poem if I tried. I am glad you appreciated the poetic elements in the piece.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello I know that Dean indeed, will like your story about the dark lady who as you said in this stanza
No one had seen her dark spirit in light
A phantom, a vision, or ghost was she
Nor did they know of the depth of her plight
Would fate ever consent to set her free?
Gert
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Hello I know that Dean indeed, will like your story about the dark lady who as you said in this stanza
No one had seen her dark spirit in light
A phantom, a vision, or ghost was she
Nor did they know of the depth of her plight
Would fate ever consent to set her free?
Gert
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. It means a lot that you think Dean will like the story. I appreciate you sharing the stanza that stood out for you.
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You are so welcome respa 1
Gert
Comment from Word Doctor Carson Volk
Delightfully dark poem. I love this type of work, it fascinates me. It seems to have so many different meanings distinct to the individual reader.
A perfect addition to the book!
Thank you for sharing, I quite enjoyed this piece.
With gratitude and respect,
Your friend and colleague,
Word Doctor Carson Volk
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Delightfully dark poem. I love this type of work, it fascinates me. It seems to have so many different meanings distinct to the individual reader.
A perfect addition to the book!
Thank you for sharing, I quite enjoyed this piece.
With gratitude and respect,
Your friend and colleague,
Word Doctor Carson Volk
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you found the piece to your liking, especially "different meanings "distinct to the individual reader."
Comment from ericawrites
This is a well written poem, telling a story which has been told for centuries. In Ireland, the mythical woman is the banshee, who is said to "follow" certain families and can be heard wailing when a member of the family dies.
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This is a well written poem, telling a story which has been told for centuries. In Ireland, the mythical woman is the banshee, who is said to "follow" certain families and can be heard wailing when a member of the family dies.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you appreciated the poem and story, and thank you for sharing the Irish legend of the banshee.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
As poetry this is great, but I'm left wondering why and what. Was she jilted, murdered or abused. Why is this lost soul wandering the earth? I'm left with wonder and what legend lies behind her roaming. And in that niggling question, I'm not satisfied. I really think this should be longer to explain because without it, all I have is technical appreciation. It's good, but I'd like more.
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As poetry this is great, but I'm left wondering why and what. Was she jilted, murdered or abused. Why is this lost soul wandering the earth? I'm left with wonder and what legend lies behind her roaming. And in that niggling question, I'm not satisfied. I really think this should be longer to explain because without it, all I have is technical appreciation. It's good, but I'd like more.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. In the author notes, I indicated her travails are unknown, and because they have been passed down from generation to generation, as many legends and folklore are, the spirit and soul of figures like the dark lady continue to roam in the darkness because they remain unsettled. I am glad you appreciated the poetry.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Well written poetry and a good presentation to go along with the poem. The lady in the ebony gown is still around today to roam the grounds.
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Well written poetry and a good presentation to go along with the poem. The lady in the ebony gown is still around today to roam the grounds.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you liked the poem and presentation and appreciate the "lady in the ebony gown."
Comment from ravenblack
You have written a very good template for the dark lady that shows up in countless urban legends. Here in Chicago, we have Ressurection Mary, a dark lady who lore has it hitches rides home, home being Resurrection cemetery. An excellent addition to the book of shifting shadows.
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You have written a very good template for the dark lady that shows up in countless urban legends. Here in Chicago, we have Ressurection Mary, a dark lady who lore has it hitches rides home, home being Resurrection cemetery. An excellent addition to the book of shifting shadows.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2015
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Thank you so much for the excellent rating and sharing your thoughts. I am glad you appreciated the poem and thank you for sharing a legend based in Chicago. I am also glad you find the poem a good addition to Dean's book.
