Comment from Patti R.

Good

There is good imagery in your haiku.
The syllable count is perfect.
I just couldn't find the "aha" in the satori,
what am I missing?
There seems to be more of a disconnect than a connect in the overall poem.
Good luck in the contest.

Patti


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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2015

Well ... the crocus winking is "supposed" to signify that it has burst through the ice foreshadowing Spring. :))
Very clear to me. Hahaha! I know the feeling reading some of these. HUH???? Very difficult to get one that just nails it the way it is in our heads. Glad you liked the imagery. I worked on that. :))

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

You have written a very good 3-5-3 poem here. It made me feel chilly here while I was reading it. Very good wording. Great imagery. Good luck in the contest. hugs, Teri

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2015

Pleased you enjoyed this. Thank you so much.