Shifting Shadows. Poems of Darkness
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Poor Crow"A collection of dark poetry
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Comment from krys123
Rspoet;
-Besides your picture, which was very complementary, relative and appropriate for your poem, your authors notes was also helpful in determining the crux of your writing. Besides that your picture was a beginning omen for what I was about to read. An excellent choice.
-Your occasional rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm the flow smoothly.
-The rhythms cadence, timing and tempo also helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
-Your fantastic imagery was horrifically, in some cases, and exquisitely expressive and vividly and masterfully descriptive throughout. And near the end of your second section hours and tensely immense in the bloodcurdling dining of the Raven.
-Both parts of your of your writing was meticulously written to involve the reader and identify with the Raven's though he was himself the Raven. Your use of metaphorical imagery was very astute I was amazed by how well it was written to involve evil through the Raven's actions. I also thought that the Raven was not aware of its evil intent bore more likely and shrewdly used the parts of his intentional ravishing to make a nest of his own.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this wonderful poem and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Rspoet;
-Besides your picture, which was very complementary, relative and appropriate for your poem, your authors notes was also helpful in determining the crux of your writing. Besides that your picture was a beginning omen for what I was about to read. An excellent choice.
-Your occasional rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm the flow smoothly.
-The rhythms cadence, timing and tempo also helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
-Your fantastic imagery was horrifically, in some cases, and exquisitely expressive and vividly and masterfully descriptive throughout. And near the end of your second section hours and tensely immense in the bloodcurdling dining of the Raven.
-Both parts of your of your writing was meticulously written to involve the reader and identify with the Raven's though he was himself the Raven. Your use of metaphorical imagery was very astute I was amazed by how well it was written to involve evil through the Raven's actions. I also thought that the Raven was not aware of its evil intent bore more likely and shrewdly used the parts of his intentional ravishing to make a nest of his own.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this wonderful poem and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for the splendid review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the Poe-Kuch poem and the imagery, dark as it was. I've never written dark before, but this one was for Dean. I truly appreciated your mentioning so many aspects of the poem that you liked. It is always encouraging to get such positive feedback from people you respect. Now, I think I must go back to the light side. Thanks again for the six stars!
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Rspoet; You are so very welcome my friend and thank you for the positive feedback.
Alex
Comment from Louise Michelle
That's right, RS, the crow got a bad rap. However, he does have a rather ominous caw, don't you think?
This is very nicely done. You've conjured up some really vivid images. A perfect read for this cloudy day. Lou
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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That's right, RS, the crow got a bad rap. However, he does have a rather ominous caw, don't you think?
This is very nicely done. You've conjured up some really vivid images. A perfect read for this cloudy day. Lou
Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Lou, for the wonderful review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the Poe-Kuch poem. I've never written dark before, but this one was for Dean. The crow sounds ominous be-caws he gets so little respect. I appreciate your positive comments very much. Wishing you a "sunny day."
Comment from Ricky1024
"Ever more" and yes poet well crafted and thoroughly enjoyed as I plucked each feather out....
"ever more"
Ricky 1024.
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"Ever more" and yes poet well crafted and thoroughly enjoyed as I plucked each feather out....
"ever more"
Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Ricky, for the wonderful review and the exceptional rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the Poe-Kuch poem. I've never written dark before, but this one was for Dean. Be careful plucking out those feathers. Crows and Ravens take a dim view of losing their feathers. I appreciate your positive comments and the six stars very much.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The crow and the raven have indeed both been the objects of suspicion. well done.
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. The crow and the raven have indeed both been the objects of suspicion. well done.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Tomes, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the Poe-Kuch poem. I've never written dark before, but this one was for Dean. I appreciate your positive comments very much.
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My pleasure.
Comment from LanceHill
This was a very interesting read. The description after the poem brought it all together. The flow made for an enjoyable read. In the following "What crow or craven
could possibly resist?" did you mean Raven? Thanks for sharing. God bless.
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This was a very interesting read. The description after the poem brought it all together. The flow made for an enjoyable read. In the following "What crow or craven
could possibly resist?" did you mean Raven? Thanks for sharing. God bless.
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Lance, for the excellent review and the excellent rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the Poe-Kuch poem. I've never written dark before, but this one was for Dean. Craven is a play on words: one of its meanings is dastardly or fearful entity. And of course, embedded in the word is "raven." I appreciate your positive comments very much.
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Thanks for the clarification. I didn't realize that was the meaning. Great job.
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The first meaning is cowardly. I took mine from an older form,
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Ok. I had seen the cowardly description when I looked it up. Thanks again.
Comment from snooker155
A good old fashioned style poem. There is argument amongst ornithologists that birds such as crows and ravens are not oscine that this relates to songbirds only but I hadn't heard this word before so I researched it. Thank you for a wonderful poem and for improving my vocabulary. WELL DONE!
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A good old fashioned style poem. There is argument amongst ornithologists that birds such as crows and ravens are not oscine that this relates to songbirds only but I hadn't heard this word before so I researched it. Thank you for a wonderful poem and for improving my vocabulary. WELL DONE!
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Comment Written 05-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2015
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Thank you, snooker, for the review and rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. The four star rating is a bit inconsistent with your comments - wonderful and well done. Usually, four stars implies there are things that need to be addressed. Since you did not mention any problems, I would appreciate it if you would let me know what you found wrong with the poem. The word "oscine," is mentioned in the author notes. The crow actually does sing during mating rituals, even though it's known for its "caw," but in this poem it is used to contrast with the crows silence in the poem. Thanks for stopping by to read and review.
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It is just my opinion and not a criticism. I just think it didn't merit five or six stars I thought you were just trying to be that little bit too clever with your choice of words but since you have explained to me your side we'll agree to disagree. Thank you for your time. Please don't be offended. You otherwise write well.
