A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Waves of Longing"Assorted poems of love
33 total reviews
Comment from scongrove
Bravo Missy! :)
Your words go perfect with the picture. Makes me think of times back when I missed someone so much, it was torture for me. I went years thinking about this person until it almost drove me crazy. Thank goodness that is out of my system. Love can be wonderful, but it can also be the most painful experience. Thanks for sharing.
Shana :)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Bravo Missy! :)
Your words go perfect with the picture. Makes me think of times back when I missed someone so much, it was torture for me. I went years thinking about this person until it almost drove me crazy. Thank goodness that is out of my system. Love can be wonderful, but it can also be the most painful experience. Thanks for sharing.
Shana :)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Truer words never spoken, Shana. Torture is right!!
Thank you for taking your valuable time and reading and reviewing this for me :) I appreciate it so much!
Missy :)
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You're welcome! :)
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi justafan, what a great analogy between the waves crashing on the shoreline and the shoreline of your ragged heart. A lovely passionate piece created from this image . I really loved the 2nd last stanza 'your love that was for me ,a sleepy cove , with tides of love lapping gently on the shore' how beautiful. Well crafted words that told of a lost love. So nice to read all these challenge posts . well done Cheers Christineð???
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Hi justafan, what a great analogy between the waves crashing on the shoreline and the shoreline of your ragged heart. A lovely passionate piece created from this image . I really loved the 2nd last stanza 'your love that was for me ,a sleepy cove , with tides of love lapping gently on the shore' how beautiful. Well crafted words that told of a lost love. So nice to read all these challenge posts . well done Cheers Christineð???
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Hi, Christine! What a lovely review you have left me :) thanks a bunch! I am delighted to be included in this fine and ever growing group of wonderful writers.
Always,
Missy
Comment from mfowler
An excellent response to the picture. You've made it your own and taken it into the realm of romance and lost love where you do some of your best writing. I really liked the pruned away style you've shown here. You leave out so many of those 'fluff' words which draw away from the clarity of the message and ultimately the meaning. Great use of metaphor here. I especially enjoyed:
Your love was that for me
a sleepy cove
with tides of love
lapping gently on the shore
I've repackaged the poem in my way to make it even tighter, but it wouldn't matter if your left it as is. Well done on this.
I hear them
the waves crashing on the rocky shore
Sounds
akin to the emotions
you left within me
Pounding unceasingly
making no headway
Tearing at the shoreline
of my ragged heart
Will the tide ever turn?
Will peace ever find me?
Your love was that for me
a sleepy cove
with tides of love
lapping gently on the shore
Return me
to that idyllic place
ease my suffering
I beg you
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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An excellent response to the picture. You've made it your own and taken it into the realm of romance and lost love where you do some of your best writing. I really liked the pruned away style you've shown here. You leave out so many of those 'fluff' words which draw away from the clarity of the message and ultimately the meaning. Great use of metaphor here. I especially enjoyed:
Your love was that for me
a sleepy cove
with tides of love
lapping gently on the shore
I've repackaged the poem in my way to make it even tighter, but it wouldn't matter if your left it as is. Well done on this.
I hear them
the waves crashing on the rocky shore
Sounds
akin to the emotions
you left within me
Pounding unceasingly
making no headway
Tearing at the shoreline
of my ragged heart
Will the tide ever turn?
Will peace ever find me?
Your love was that for me
a sleepy cove
with tides of love
lapping gently on the shore
Return me
to that idyllic place
ease my suffering
I beg you
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Hi, Mr. Fowler :) nice to see you back! Thanks for the encouraging review. You know I always hold my breath waiting for yours...lol. I always strive to make you proud, Teach. All your crit I take seriously.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, you've been where I have been, seen what I have seen, felt what I have felt and this masterful poem speaks directly to the tearing emotions that accompany such a loss... sigh...
Misty, this is how poetry is supposed to be, isn't it? Especially romantic poetry, IMO - full of passion, sorrowful or joyful, desperate longing, overwhelming pleasure. Lovely!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Oh, you've been where I have been, seen what I have seen, felt what I have felt and this masterful poem speaks directly to the tearing emotions that accompany such a loss... sigh...
Misty, this is how poetry is supposed to be, isn't it? Especially romantic poetry, IMO - full of passion, sorrowful or joyful, desperate longing, overwhelming pleasure. Lovely!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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YOU, my darling know exactly what I need to hear...lol. Thanks sug, for the uplifting review, as always!!
XO
Missy
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Missy,
I knew you would find a love poem in this picture. As always I just love your poem.
Idyllic peace and places are where we all wish to be. Great job my friend.
Many Blessings,
Darlene
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Missy,
I knew you would find a love poem in this picture. As always I just love your poem.
Idyllic peace and places are where we all wish to be. Great job my friend.
Many Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2015
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Thank you, precious for all your continued support of me. I don't know if I would still be here in FS without the always encouraging words from you, sweetie.
Missy
Comment from lightink
You worked with the emotional layer of the stormy imagery: the passionate low and high tides of a pendulum relationship! Furious feelings ragging the soul. Intense imagery with beautiful presentation!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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You worked with the emotional layer of the stormy imagery: the passionate low and high tides of a pendulum relationship! Furious feelings ragging the soul. Intense imagery with beautiful presentation!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Hugs... Lighting!!!
There are so many talented writers in this group... I feel blessed just to be here.
Missy :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Return me
to that idyllic place
ease my suffering ...I beg you!"...........Believe me when I tell you this, Missy. I certainly would if I could.
As for the tide ever turning, well... we can only hope that one day, the moon is aligned with the stars in our eyes, and when the sun peeks o'er the horizon, that we have our sights set on happiness and our head in the clouds.
Is that too much to ask for?
A beautifully written free verse. It is a profusely poignant poetic piece, abundantly replete with vivid imagery.
Excellent...
With admiration & respect
~Dean ;}
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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"Return me
to that idyllic place
ease my suffering ...I beg you!"...........Believe me when I tell you this, Missy. I certainly would if I could.
As for the tide ever turning, well... we can only hope that one day, the moon is aligned with the stars in our eyes, and when the sun peeks o'er the horizon, that we have our sights set on happiness and our head in the clouds.
Is that too much to ask for?
A beautifully written free verse. It is a profusely poignant poetic piece, abundantly replete with vivid imagery.
Excellent...
With admiration & respect
~Dean ;}
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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I sure hope it's OK to want to give us a hug for this lovely review, Dean.
Thank you!
Missy
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It's perfect, Missy. You're very welcome, as always.
~Dean :}
Comment from LanceHill
Very nice poem of love lost. The flow was a pleasant read. The only change I would suggest would be a little darker lettering. Thank you for sharing. God bless.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Very nice poem of love lost. The flow was a pleasant read. The only change I would suggest would be a little darker lettering. Thank you for sharing. God bless.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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I will do as you suggest Lance :)
Thank you for reading and reviewing my humble piece.
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment from mvbrooks
Interesting take on the picture--a love lost, but one the narrator wants to retrieve. The dichotomy of the "cove's" description, at first sadness reflected in the phrase "tearing at the shoreline of my broken heart" contrasted to the happiness felt when the other person was present "tides of love lapping gently on the shore." Poem effectively evokes the emotions of loss and confusion felt by the person left behind and the longing for times past.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Interesting take on the picture--a love lost, but one the narrator wants to retrieve. The dichotomy of the "cove's" description, at first sadness reflected in the phrase "tearing at the shoreline of my broken heart" contrasted to the happiness felt when the other person was present "tides of love lapping gently on the shore." Poem effectively evokes the emotions of loss and confusion felt by the person left behind and the longing for times past.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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I just love this review ...thank you :)
It has an almost poetic feel to it! I am honored to read and be the recipient of such a lovely review.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Missy. This is definitely one of your best offerings in poetry. I love your images and the stanza that really caught my eye was this one:
"Your love was that for me
a sleepy cove
with tides of love
lapping gently on the shore" (superb writing)
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Hi, Missy. This is definitely one of your best offerings in poetry. I love your images and the stanza that really caught my eye was this one:
"Your love was that for me
a sleepy cove
with tides of love
lapping gently on the shore" (superb writing)
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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~Wink~
Thanks for the big hug of a review, Bob. I have missed your reviews lately :)
Missy
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Remember, Missy..I cannot possibly review everything posted...not all of yours either. If you ever have one that you really really need my review on..let me know..otherwise I do them when I have time.. sorry. thought you knew that....now in my case, I only post once every 10to 12 days...LOL..That compared to what....are you doing one or two every other day? see what I mean? :) Bob
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Also....I don't review aanything by anybody for 2 cents payment. Sorry. bob
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I wish I did post every 2 or 3 days...lol.
Perhaps my lil offerings are not up to your level. I will refrain from asking you to extend yourself to my page...You're obviously a very busy man. Your time best spent on those that can afford the front page in FanStory all the time. I wish you all the best.
Missy
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Missy...that is not true. The site works on the basis of using mermber dollars to post our work....stsands to reason I am going to read the ones that pay something.....anything......above tweo cents which not many people do by the way because they want reviews. I have been more than fair with reviewing your work and will continue to do so. Bob
