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Comment from Megalips
Lance,
I'm sorry I'm so late to read this...haven't been around much. This is absolutely amazing, and I want to congratulate you on winning your second Butterfly contest in a row. Soon they will have to name the contest after you!!! I have to tell you something. Of all the people I've watched in my short tenure here, you have blown up the most...the way you write...this is just really incredible. Your last Butterfly story was really good, but doesn't compare to this. There are a lot of people talking about agreeing or not with legalizing prostitution (on your reviews), and I think I know your opinion on that, but you have the freedom to say this is just a story, and that's the opinion of the protagonist...it doesn't mean the story has to be a political statement. They should know that.
Anyway, the first person narrative is just killer, Lance...really pulls me in and makes me empathize with the main character. You got some help, I see, with a few grammatical issues that you corrected, and that sharpened this up. But I'm telling you, the writing style you've developed is crazy good. The details on what your main character is thinking, the differences between men and women, the humor, the story line shrouded with erotica...it's really masterfully put together. I'm really impressed with how you assumed a woman's identity as the author, and you really do seem to 'get it'...understand how we think. I did notice in the first paragraph where Sylvia admits that she envies wives and girlfriends...so that is a subtle suggestion she may not be as happy or satisfied with her situation as she later leads us to believe. That is very 'OK' with me as a reader because it suggests an inner struggle which you have to believe is going on with her. First person limits your ability to tell the reader everything. The reader has an obligation to read between the lines. It's an amazing piece. You have figured out what the voting crowd wants, and you've delivered, but you still do that with a style of your own and you're not afraid to be explicit...you just make it work.
Meg
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Lance,
I'm sorry I'm so late to read this...haven't been around much. This is absolutely amazing, and I want to congratulate you on winning your second Butterfly contest in a row. Soon they will have to name the contest after you!!! I have to tell you something. Of all the people I've watched in my short tenure here, you have blown up the most...the way you write...this is just really incredible. Your last Butterfly story was really good, but doesn't compare to this. There are a lot of people talking about agreeing or not with legalizing prostitution (on your reviews), and I think I know your opinion on that, but you have the freedom to say this is just a story, and that's the opinion of the protagonist...it doesn't mean the story has to be a political statement. They should know that.
Anyway, the first person narrative is just killer, Lance...really pulls me in and makes me empathize with the main character. You got some help, I see, with a few grammatical issues that you corrected, and that sharpened this up. But I'm telling you, the writing style you've developed is crazy good. The details on what your main character is thinking, the differences between men and women, the humor, the story line shrouded with erotica...it's really masterfully put together. I'm really impressed with how you assumed a woman's identity as the author, and you really do seem to 'get it'...understand how we think. I did notice in the first paragraph where Sylvia admits that she envies wives and girlfriends...so that is a subtle suggestion she may not be as happy or satisfied with her situation as she later leads us to believe. That is very 'OK' with me as a reader because it suggests an inner struggle which you have to believe is going on with her. First person limits your ability to tell the reader everything. The reader has an obligation to read between the lines. It's an amazing piece. You have figured out what the voting crowd wants, and you've delivered, but you still do that with a style of your own and you're not afraid to be explicit...you just make it work.
Meg
Comment Written 13-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much, Meg. I like the Butterfly contests. They give us an excuse to cut loose, without the fuddy-duddies getting offended.
Comment from pbroussard209
Great story and to be honest I have always felt sorry for women who make their living this way. It is dangerous, even for those on the higher level. Sex makes people unpredictable. It is our most basic, animalistic instinct. Sylvia is right in that men and women view it differently, to men it is just sex, but for a woman it is much more. A scorned woman, is a dangerous woman, and to legalize prostitution could make the job all that more dangerous.
I will have to disagree with you on keeping your man satisfied will keep him from straying. I know a lot of women who will do anything their husband wants to in the sack, but the men still want more. the Idea of getting away with it is the thrill they are really seeking. The same goes for women too.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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Great story and to be honest I have always felt sorry for women who make their living this way. It is dangerous, even for those on the higher level. Sex makes people unpredictable. It is our most basic, animalistic instinct. Sylvia is right in that men and women view it differently, to men it is just sex, but for a woman it is much more. A scorned woman, is a dangerous woman, and to legalize prostitution could make the job all that more dangerous.
I will have to disagree with you on keeping your man satisfied will keep him from straying. I know a lot of women who will do anything their husband wants to in the sack, but the men still want more. the Idea of getting away with it is the thrill they are really seeking. The same goes for women too.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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Thank you. Yes, you're right, giving a person everything they want will not keep them from being a dog.
Some countries have legalized prostitution for men and women. Australia, Canada, the UK, Denmark and they seem do okay. More women are assaulted and killed here in the US. Weird at it.
Always good to here what you see in things. Hope your days are going good.
Comment from justafan
It is...more than just a story. I found this very compelling.
I do however disagree with your characters take on how cum tastes. I find it wonderful. At times, it varies on what is going on in my partner's body. What he has eaten, if he is getting ill? I know him and can tell the differences.
Wonderful entry to this contest :)
Always,
Missy
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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It is...more than just a story. I found this very compelling.
I do however disagree with your characters take on how cum tastes. I find it wonderful. At times, it varies on what is going on in my partner's body. What he has eaten, if he is getting ill? I know him and can tell the differences.
Wonderful entry to this contest :)
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much. Now that is what I call an attentive woman. I have to inquire about that with the wife. I wonder what she'll say.
I appreciate the great review.
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Comment from wordspinner314
This is a great read! It not only has sex, but it has real sex. That impressed me. It also has quite a bit of sarcastic humor thrown in with real-life situations, adding dimension to the piece. Well done!
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This is a great read! It not only has sex, but it has real sex. That impressed me. It also has quite a bit of sarcastic humor thrown in with real-life situations, adding dimension to the piece. Well done!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2015
Comment from alvina224224
I can only confirm what others have obviously. This is a good piece of erotica, and with a specific message. Most erotica is written for effect. This is written with a purpose. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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I can only confirm what others have obviously. This is a good piece of erotica, and with a specific message. Most erotica is written for effect. This is written with a purpose. Congratulations.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from Barry1000
The writing almost surely rates five stars and who doesn't love some great erotic text to liven up a boring day? I think the concept of interweaving some political or philosophical ideas in with a good story is probably a splendid way to tell a story and make a point about some hot topic at the same time. I'm not so sure that this piece accomplishes the purpose believably. While I tend to believe that prostitution shouldn't be criminalized or constitute such a taboo subject within our uptight society, I don't quite see a proponent of liberalization engaging with a politician in the shower while performing oral sex. The pros and cons have been known to take many pages or hours of intense debate and reducing them to this one scenario is a bit much for me. I like the image of the hooker who appears to truly love and respect her customer and I believe that it can happen, but it doesn't argue for legalization effectively. I've worked with sex workers and have a close friend of many years who was a porn star and prostitute and I can tell you that such a conversation, if it ever happened would not look like this or likely lead to a politician exposing himself by advocating for a paid lover and her cause. I suppose word limits might have led to condensing this into such a brief space, however I advise separating the hot action from the hot debate and being more realistic about the possibilities for change.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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The writing almost surely rates five stars and who doesn't love some great erotic text to liven up a boring day? I think the concept of interweaving some political or philosophical ideas in with a good story is probably a splendid way to tell a story and make a point about some hot topic at the same time. I'm not so sure that this piece accomplishes the purpose believably. While I tend to believe that prostitution shouldn't be criminalized or constitute such a taboo subject within our uptight society, I don't quite see a proponent of liberalization engaging with a politician in the shower while performing oral sex. The pros and cons have been known to take many pages or hours of intense debate and reducing them to this one scenario is a bit much for me. I like the image of the hooker who appears to truly love and respect her customer and I believe that it can happen, but it doesn't argue for legalization effectively. I've worked with sex workers and have a close friend of many years who was a porn star and prostitute and I can tell you that such a conversation, if it ever happened would not look like this or likely lead to a politician exposing himself by advocating for a paid lover and her cause. I suppose word limits might have led to condensing this into such a brief space, however I advise separating the hot action from the hot debate and being more realistic about the possibilities for change.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you. You make excellent points.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Lancellot, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, a truly wonderful story where the erotic scenes have been written beautifully and sensitively, Great well drawn characters with excellent dialogue, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Hi Lancellot, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, a truly wonderful story where the erotic scenes have been written beautifully and sensitively, Great well drawn characters with excellent dialogue, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Wow! Your story is awesome! I like how sexy it is and how it goes beyond sex. You described John and Sylvia so well that I feel like I know them. You also have given Sylvia a depth of character that most erotica writers don't even think about it. I want Sylvia to win the freedom she needs and the acceptance in society that she deserves. Well done! You got my vote
check out this sentence....
He pulls back and gazes into my eyes. "Is there something on your mind?"[ He's] knows me so well.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Hello :)
Wow! Your story is awesome! I like how sexy it is and how it goes beyond sex. You described John and Sylvia so well that I feel like I know them. You also have given Sylvia a depth of character that most erotica writers don't even think about it. I want Sylvia to win the freedom she needs and the acceptance in society that she deserves. Well done! You got my vote
check out this sentence....
He pulls back and gazes into my eyes. "Is there something on your mind?"[ He's] knows me so well.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much. Your support is greatly appreciated.
Comment from PrincessinPurple
This is off to a good start. It seems like it could be a start of a novel. It does give the reader something to think about.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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This is off to a good start. It seems like it could be a start of a novel. It does give the reader something to think about.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much. The contest series of yours is a great place to let it all hang out. We owe you.
Lance
Comment from singmore
This is very engaging, and not just because of the sexiness, though that helps. The build up to what she wants, hinted at the very start, is skilled. Whether or not one is open to the message, espouses it already, or detests it, the message is well presented and makes a valuable statement to accompany the draw-in of the piece.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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This is very engaging, and not just because of the sexiness, though that helps. The build up to what she wants, hinted at the very start, is skilled. Whether or not one is open to the message, espouses it already, or detests it, the message is well presented and makes a valuable statement to accompany the draw-in of the piece.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much.
