Her Path
some burdens are worse than others...21 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Dawn,
Very well written piece. Great tone set in the piece and the beastly revelation comes in suitably dark in the tale of lust and need.
Very nicely done.
G
Hi Dawn,
Very well written piece. Great tone set in the piece and the beastly revelation comes in suitably dark in the tale of lust and need.
Very nicely done.
G
Comment Written 27-Oct-2015
Comment from justafan
I love this, woman!!! sitting here re-reading with the music playing. I love Celtic music btw. :)
You rock, sista. Another fine piece from you.
Ya sista from another mista,
Missy
I love this, woman!!! sitting here re-reading with the music playing. I love Celtic music btw. :)
You rock, sista. Another fine piece from you.
Ya sista from another mista,
Missy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from Ulla
This a fine poem and very well written. I'm impressed and enjoyed the read. It has all the sentiments of this time of the Halloween. All best, Ulla
This a fine poem and very well written. I'm impressed and enjoyed the read. It has all the sentiments of this time of the Halloween. All best, Ulla
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for the pleasure of another fine poem. An obsession of lust and violence for the masses, and even us claimed-to-be innocents are thoroughly entertained with the sights, sounds, and the metallic taste. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
Thanks for the pleasure of another fine poem. An obsession of lust and violence for the masses, and even us claimed-to-be innocents are thoroughly entertained with the sights, sounds, and the metallic taste. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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What a great review! Thanks very much!
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is an excellent poem for the Halloween season. The way you started it out, Dawn, I expected it to be a lusty-albeit normal-situation. But no! You made it really creepy with the werewolf angle. Well done, my friend.
:) Bev
This is an excellent poem for the Halloween season. The way you started it out, Dawn, I expected it to be a lusty-albeit normal-situation. But no! You made it really creepy with the werewolf angle. Well done, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The pain was sharp, though over soon -
her path so freely altered!
The curse of werewolf evermore
her fate, because she faltered.
a dark and rather eerie poem, Dawn -
albeit beautifully written, with a
smooth flow to the words, and both
rhythm and rhyme throughout.
Most impressive.
Margaret
The pain was sharp, though over soon -
her path so freely altered!
The curse of werewolf evermore
her fate, because she faltered.
a dark and rather eerie poem, Dawn -
albeit beautifully written, with a
smooth flow to the words, and both
rhythm and rhyme throughout.
Most impressive.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from Ricky1024
As I enjoyed your piece specially the ending about the date with a vampire I think of my piece of rope actually today called consuming living human blood I'll post it in a contest to try to win $100 gift certificate it's actually more based on vampires and werewolves with the werewolf will be involved in the end so thank you gone Joe and your great piece and has a top-ranked code on fan story will know it deserves it six stars every time I review of course like nominate you for a reviewer of the month so I don't have to have her achieved its very hard to do that she know so you have a wonderful day and as always Ricky 10:24
As I enjoyed your piece specially the ending about the date with a vampire I think of my piece of rope actually today called consuming living human blood I'll post it in a contest to try to win $100 gift certificate it's actually more based on vampires and werewolves with the werewolf will be involved in the end so thank you gone Joe and your great piece and has a top-ranked code on fan story will know it deserves it six stars every time I review of course like nominate you for a reviewer of the month so I don't have to have her achieved its very hard to do that she know so you have a wonderful day and as always Ricky 10:24
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent, work, Dawn. Very awesomely presented and composed...
In many ways, it is cautionary poetic warning us to not to permit wanton lust to take control of our emotions. In addition, most women--and you can try to deny it all you want but I know this to be true--like "bad boys". Rebellious, mysterious, perhaps even a bit sinister. It really doesn't matter how you act attitude-wise if you have six pack abs to go along with whatever else you're packin'...a-hem...
Having said this, I suppose your female...protagonist.. now wishes she'd been a bit more cautious as to whom she was allowing to hike up her skirt in dark alleyways.
What was the song by the popular 80's group, Duran Duran?
Thanks so much for contributing.
~Dean
Excellent, work, Dawn. Very awesomely presented and composed...
In many ways, it is cautionary poetic warning us to not to permit wanton lust to take control of our emotions. In addition, most women--and you can try to deny it all you want but I know this to be true--like "bad boys". Rebellious, mysterious, perhaps even a bit sinister. It really doesn't matter how you act attitude-wise if you have six pack abs to go along with whatever else you're packin'...a-hem...
Having said this, I suppose your female...protagonist.. now wishes she'd been a bit more cautious as to whom she was allowing to hike up her skirt in dark alleyways.
What was the song by the popular 80's group, Duran Duran?
Thanks so much for contributing.
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from MacMhuirich
This is wonderful. Your rhyme and flow take the reader unsuspectingly through the work till that nice twist at the end and the fatal bite. This is a good addition to Deans work. Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
John
This is wonderful. Your rhyme and flow take the reader unsuspectingly through the work till that nice twist at the end and the fatal bite. This is a good addition to Deans work. Thank you for sharing.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015
Comment from barkingdog
This is a fantastic addition to Dean's 'Shifting Shadows, ...'.
Your rhyming quatrains relay a fatal event for this one-night stand. He passion for him allowed the fatal bite that turned her into a werewolf.
:) ellen
This is a fantastic addition to Dean's 'Shifting Shadows, ...'.
Your rhyming quatrains relay a fatal event for this one-night stand. He passion for him allowed the fatal bite that turned her into a werewolf.
:) ellen
Comment Written 26-Oct-2015