Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 319 "Striving Upward"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Striving Upward" is excellent encouragement for the striver. It has a catchy rhythm and unusual rhyme pattern. You are the premier poetry historian of Fan Story. I enjoy your history notes and appreciate the education. You have resurrected another excellent form
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Hi, Treischel,
"Striving Upward" is excellent encouragement for the striver. It has a catchy rhythm and unusual rhyme pattern. You are the premier poetry historian of Fan Story. I enjoy your history notes and appreciate the education. You have resurrected another excellent form
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you Preston. I do enjoy turning up a new firm, I am pleased that you liked it.
Comment from Nosha17
Life is an uphill struggle, the trials are sent to form our characters-we must never give up. Excellent message, good use of rhyming. Most enjoyable. faye
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Life is an uphill struggle, the trials are sent to form our characters-we must never give up. Excellent message, good use of rhyming. Most enjoyable. faye
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you Faye.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I've never seen or heard of this form. I like it though! Your poem is very lyrical. Keep striving upward.
``teresa~~
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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I've never seen or heard of this form. I like it though! Your poem is very lyrical. Keep striving upward.
``teresa~~
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you Teresa.will do, as I know you will too.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is yet another lovely form which you've introduced that I had never heard of before now, Tom. It's almost senryu-like in it's composition. Yours is particular inspiration and conveys a positive message...never give up, no matter how difficult the struggle may seem.
I really enjoyed this, and I seriously doubt it is as simple as it appears. You just make it look easy, LOL.
Well done!
Always with respect
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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This is yet another lovely form which you've introduced that I had never heard of before now, Tom. It's almost senryu-like in it's composition. Yours is particular inspiration and conveys a positive message...never give up, no matter how difficult the struggle may seem.
I really enjoyed this, and I seriously doubt it is as simple as it appears. You just make it look easy, LOL.
Well done!
Always with respect
~Dean
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you Dean, I am delighted that you like it so well. Yes, it is Haiku like.
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You're more than welcome, Tom. It's a great form and you do it very proud.
~Dean
Comment from artemis53
Love it. I always enjoy nature trails that challenge you. Besides the physical demands there is a mental stamina that is always rewarded by the wondrous views you see along the way.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Love it. I always enjoy nature trails that challenge you. Besides the physical demands there is a mental stamina that is always rewarded by the wondrous views you see along the way.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you Artemis. I know this one would be right in your wheelhouse.
Comment from twinklepoems
Thank you for introducing me to another poetryas form (especially a short one!) This was a lovely 'Lai" with a good message to never give up. Good rhyming and a lovely picture!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you for introducing me to another poetryas form (especially a short one!) This was a lovely 'Lai" with a good message to never give up. Good rhyming and a lovely picture!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you twinklepoems. You brightened my night, with you comments and shining stars.
Comment from I am Cat
I was just about to ask about the beautiful photo when I noticed this:
This poem was taken by author himself on October 13, 2015
;)
ummm.... ok.
It is a beautiful photo AND poem. I enjoyed both very much.
Cat
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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I was just about to ask about the beautiful photo when I noticed this:
This poem was taken by author himself on October 13, 2015
;)
ummm.... ok.
It is a beautiful photo AND poem. I enjoyed both very much.
Cat
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Um, oops. Thought I fixed that. I guess both are true.
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indeed they are. ;)
Comment from Pantygynt
This is lovely, almost like a motto, a guide to a successful life. Of course our own "lay" as in "The lay of the ancient mariner" has expanded on the form somewhat - if th the old sailor is anything to go by.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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This is lovely, almost like a motto, a guide to a successful life. Of course our own "lay" as in "The lay of the ancient mariner" has expanded on the form somewhat - if th the old sailor is anything to go by.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Later versions broke away from the 5-5-2 format to just be long, long, short. I also had a hard time distinguishing between a Lia and a Virelai. The literature is confusing as different eopke say different things.
Comment from His Grayness
The work is lovely and the poetry lesson itself is worth ten stars. I always thank this gifted author for sharing his deep knowledge to help some of less educated to gather new skills! Blessings and thanks! HIs Grayness: Vance
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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The work is lovely and the poetry lesson itself is worth ten stars. I always thank this gifted author for sharing his deep knowledge to help some of less educated to gather new skills! Blessings and thanks! HIs Grayness: Vance
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Thank you Vance. I always am pleased to know that people appreciate the notes.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Great poetry and an interesting form. Our whole lives are a uphill battle to grow up, get through school. Then you go through it again with your own children etc. In your notes you say this poem (photo) was taken....
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Great poetry and an interesting form. Our whole lives are a uphill battle to grow up, get through school. Then you go through it again with your own children etc. In your notes you say this poem (photo) was taken....
Comment Written 24-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2015
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Thank you Sandra. Pops! Glad you caught that.
