Act of Endurance
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Comment from charlene7190
Wow, I had to re-read your poem and some things REALLY hit home for me as well. If I try to rush through this, it becomes confusing but if I just stop and listen to what you are saying, it's pretty profound.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Wow, I had to re-read your poem and some things REALLY hit home for me as well. If I try to rush through this, it becomes confusing but if I just stop and listen to what you are saying, it's pretty profound.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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So rushing makes confusion while patience yields a reward. Thanking you for insight and generous rate plus welcomed thoughts.
Comment from tollyfaye
It feels like you are all over the place, and it is hard to make sense out of. And that is ok with poetry, but your punctuation is all over the place, Slob and God are capitalized, sometimes you use dashes, sometimes you use colons, sometimes just commas. Throws off the flow quite a bit.
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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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It feels like you are all over the place, and it is hard to make sense out of. And that is ok with poetry, but your punctuation is all over the place, Slob and God are capitalized, sometimes you use dashes, sometimes you use colons, sometimes just commas. Throws off the flow quite a bit.
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2016
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Yeah still learning fundamentals of written expression, and most writes under revisions. Thanking you for generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. It is always easy to.make promises. Sometimes prevent a person to keep.the promise other times they never intended to kept the promises.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
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A very well-written poem. It is always easy to.make promises. Sometimes prevent a person to keep.the promise other times they never intended to kept the promises.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
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Yeah, good old promises: they do scar. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
i totaly wish i had a six for you but it would not have helped for this is a ten to me i love the write and the pictutre that certainly goes well with the write hope to see more of your writing
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
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i totaly wish i had a six for you but it would not have helped for this is a ten to me i love the write and the pictutre that certainly goes well with the write hope to see more of your writing
Comment Written 30-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2016
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Visit my profile and enjoy. I have problems in my writes, all seemingly touching in their appeal: but not grammatically correct. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Nika2016
Intensely disturbing ..bordering madness...Someone believes a love was true...then deception arose...Words of serial killing combined with religiosity and God show a twisted mind.
Most likely the love object was totally unaware of his love. This is the infatuation gone wrong..dangerous mind...
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Intensely disturbing ..bordering madness...Someone believes a love was true...then deception arose...Words of serial killing combined with religiosity and God show a twisted mind.
Most likely the love object was totally unaware of his love. This is the infatuation gone wrong..dangerous mind...
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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Agreed not pleasing thoughts but yielding madness of current living realities: I trapped in. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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trapped in? how?....needing help?
Go to your local behavioral health center?
Best wishes for gaining assistance and peace...
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This isn't something I could read without giving each stanza serious thought. I like that. You don't get right to the point. Very interesting.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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This isn't something I could read without giving each stanza serious thought. I like that. You don't get right to the point. Very interesting.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2016
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I see points made be seen but deliever of those views perhaps pits. I am learning and as I become set revisions. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances.
Comment from pharp
You have outlined your thoughts quite well. I found this to be a mind opening poem. As for me I put my trust in no man. Continue to write from your heart and thanks for sharing. Pharp
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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You have outlined your thoughts quite well. I found this to be a mind opening poem. As for me I put my trust in no man. Continue to write from your heart and thanks for sharing. Pharp
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Good choice, fact being we are deceived as quoted by the Text, I found out what made the prophet belly sour: bad not able to assist in certain situations. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from Ricky1024
Thanks for the kind thoughts on this amazing poem
Adjective Content was wonderful as well as Objective Content and....
Based on theme as well as imagery..
And on a scale of one to one hundred...
100.
RICKY1024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Thanks for the kind thoughts on this amazing poem
Adjective Content was wonderful as well as Objective Content and....
Based on theme as well as imagery..
And on a scale of one to one hundred...
100.
RICKY1024
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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My name should be endurance, for someone that does nothing: I have confronted many things. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Lannell912
I appreciated your anger truth is not gentle many will be absent in the final fight from the sounds of it I think you will be there make sure to point them in the right direction they await a leader don't let your frustration get you off track don't let their ignorance make you unhumble the writing is Murder By poetry if they can read in between the lines but such things should be put in simple form so they could see even if they're blind may your words stand for truth let everything else fall at your feet for God is with you all I ask is you pray4 me
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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I appreciated your anger truth is not gentle many will be absent in the final fight from the sounds of it I think you will be there make sure to point them in the right direction they await a leader don't let your frustration get you off track don't let their ignorance make you unhumble the writing is Murder By poetry if they can read in between the lines but such things should be put in simple form so they could see even if they're blind may your words stand for truth let everything else fall at your feet for God is with you all I ask is you pray4 me
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Wow. Made me to go back and read this. Glad you for joy in this work. Strong statements. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging inspiratio nal thoughts.
Comment from fionageorge
Wow, what a thought provoking poem you have written here. I had to read it slowly to really get the messages about the Promises. The confusion between what is truth, and what is seen as truth by those who purport to believe in the various versions of a promise, and the truth. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Wow, what a thought provoking poem you have written here. I had to read it slowly to really get the messages about the Promises. The confusion between what is truth, and what is seen as truth by those who purport to believe in the various versions of a promise, and the truth. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Glad this write held some interests to you. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statements.
