Wild and Free
Free verse40 total reviews
Comment from ellie6
A well imagined story of a woman's slow realisation and breaking away from a controlling relationship. It's a story of triumph. many women stay in such a relationship because they lack the courage to break away.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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A well imagined story of a woman's slow realisation and breaking away from a controlling relationship. It's a story of triumph. many women stay in such a relationship because they lack the courage to break away.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Thank you ellie for the excellent review and understanding comments.
Comment from papa55mike
That's a great break-up poem. Stick it to him. We need to find the love within ourselves and find someone that loves our inner self. The rhyme is terrific and I wish I had a six. In your author notes the Troggs not Thoggs.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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That's a great break-up poem. Stick it to him. We need to find the love within ourselves and find someone that loves our inner self. The rhyme is terrific and I wish I had a six. In your author notes the Troggs not Thoggs.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Thank you Mike, for the very supportive review and 6 star wish. Thank you SO much for picking up on that typo - I hadn't noticed it and don't know how I did it in the first place. Nominating you for reviewer.
Comment from meldarthx
I like the journey in which this piece takes us one. I also like how you've painted this picture before us; as we watch this woman break her chains and begin to find herself free. Its just the beginning that doesn't work for me "and cruel neglect" I feel there should be some sort of break before the next line. I could just be nickpicking; but that's only spot that doesn't flow for me.
Thank you for sharing :)
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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I like the journey in which this piece takes us one. I also like how you've painted this picture before us; as we watch this woman break her chains and begin to find herself free. Its just the beginning that doesn't work for me "and cruel neglect" I feel there should be some sort of break before the next line. I could just be nickpicking; but that's only spot that doesn't flow for me.
Thank you for sharing :)
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your review and honest feedback.
Comment from sbedian
This one had a loosely knit rhyming scheme, but it seemed to read well and made sense with the beat and tempo of it. I liked the theme, getting over heartbreak and moving on to find yourself and live your own life, it is a self empowerment poem and seemed to be directly from your own experience. Was it about you or someone else?
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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This one had a loosely knit rhyming scheme, but it seemed to read well and made sense with the beat and tempo of it. I liked the theme, getting over heartbreak and moving on to find yourself and live your own life, it is a self empowerment poem and seemed to be directly from your own experience. Was it about you or someone else?
Comment Written 23-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2015
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Thanks, sbedian, for the review and your reflections on it. No it was directly from my own experience, just a poem about a person finding themselves. I always use a stream of consciousness in writing poems (not the short ones).It is about creating, and I cannot usually repeat or recreate it from memory. I just follow the thoughts and or rhymes to where it leads me. Thanks for your interest.
Comment from Leineco
::applause::applause::
You wove the rhyme deftly, and told a tale
of woe turned around when the victim turned
the tables and grabbed the reins from the
torturers hands - and flew off on a magic
red carpet constructed of self-confidence
and authenticity :-)
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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::applause::applause::
You wove the rhyme deftly, and told a tale
of woe turned around when the victim turned
the tables and grabbed the reins from the
torturers hands - and flew off on a magic
red carpet constructed of self-confidence
and authenticity :-)
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you Leineco, for the applause and great review. I really appreciate your comments..
Comment from chelsiechristine
This a great story poem about overcoming a toxic situation and relationship. The flow and rhyme scheme was easy to read, nice job.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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This a great story poem about overcoming a toxic situation and relationship. The flow and rhyme scheme was easy to read, nice job.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you chelsiechristine for the excellent review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Wild and free, and the form seems to match the words as it plays and taunts in its own way. Controlled, but not. It breaks out and declares its freedom, both in structure and meaning. Excellent job with the rhyming weaving in and out of the lines. Very creative.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Wild and free, and the form seems to match the words as it plays and taunts in its own way. Controlled, but not. It breaks out and declares its freedom, both in structure and meaning. Excellent job with the rhyming weaving in and out of the lines. Very creative.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you w.j.debi for this wonderful and creative review. I'm glad you saw the wild and free in the structure and meaning.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a beautiful poem which has strength coming from within dear leslie! i don't quite get why ot is a free verse when it so obviously rhymes with every sentence or line.
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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this is a beautiful poem which has strength coming from within dear leslie! i don't quite get why ot is a free verse when it so obviously rhymes with every sentence or line.
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thanks, rebekka, for the review and comments. Not sure - I thought it may have been because there is no set rhyme scheme or meter. I'm not an English or poetry major, so don't know. Let me know if you do. I'll look up the term in a dictionary or poetry forms site.
Comment from LanceHill
Very well written. The flow was very smooth. You have touched on a subject too many go through. Mental abuse is just as bad affecting both male and female. This shows the strength to escape. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Very well written. The flow was very smooth. You have touched on a subject too many go through. Mental abuse is just as bad affecting both male and female. This shows the strength to escape. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Lance for your thoughtful review. And yes, you are correct, abuse is perpetuated by both sexes and equally damaging when done.
Comment from royowen
I love the song choice Lelie, I can't remember anything else they did that strikes, but that is a classic, one of the great hits that came out of Britain in the 60s. Loved your poetic thrust in this work, some great rhyming, priming, subliming that you produced, superbly done, most enjoyable, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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I love the song choice Lelie, I can't remember anything else they did that strikes, but that is a classic, one of the great hits that came out of Britain in the 60s. Loved your poetic thrust in this work, some great rhyming, priming, subliming that you produced, superbly done, most enjoyable, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2015
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Thank you Roy, I thought the song/video fit. I'm glad you liked the poem. Thanks for the excellent review.
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My pleasure Leslie
