Dancing with the Stars
3-5-3 contest entry20 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
Loved your poem and the picture. Great imagery on both. Great use of the form and message. I was entranced and wanted to be there.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Loved your poem and the picture. Great imagery on both. Great use of the form and message. I was entranced and wanted to be there.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thanks frogbook, glad you caughtThanks the mood.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, now this is what dancing with the stars should always mean. You paint a picture perfect scene, and your count is also perfect. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Yes, now this is what dancing with the stars should always mean. You paint a picture perfect scene, and your count is also perfect. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thanks, lancellot for the excellent review.
Comment from scd41
By interchanging words as used commonly, you have given an inkling of creativity. Instead of 'stars twinkle' and '' heart dances', your last two lines have left a lasting impression.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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By interchanging words as used commonly, you have given an inkling of creativity. Instead of 'stars twinkle' and '' heart dances', your last two lines have left a lasting impression.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thanks scd41 for the great review. I'm glad you caught the change up and it made an impression.
Comment from Eric1
Hi mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition, Wonderful words are more than a match for the beautiful artwork. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Hi mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition, Wonderful words are more than a match for the beautiful artwork. I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Eric - I really appreciate your review.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good photo and presentation for your poem.
-Good format.
-I like your choice of topic.
-The first line is an effective image with "Moonlit night".
-I like the second line with a double reference to dancing under the stars and with the stars (on the show!).
-Nice conclusion that ties in to the stars theme.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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-Good photo and presentation for your poem.
-Good format.
-I like your choice of topic.
-The first line is an effective image with "Moonlit night".
-I like the second line with a double reference to dancing under the stars and with the stars (on the show!).
-Nice conclusion that ties in to the stars theme.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thanks respa1 for the excellent review and I'm glad you picked up on the double meaning.
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You are welcome. Glad you appreciated the reference to the double meaning. That means you did a good job in writing about it!
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You are the only one who picked up on that! Good for you!
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I will admit my secret is watching the show:) But I still say "Kudos" to you for putting the reference in the title and the poem. The idea was in my head that you were writing about that! Thanks for the info, too:)
Comment from Linda Engel
A very romantic picture dancing in the moonlight. I've danced in the moonlight . It was soft, cozy, and breathtaking.
A good entry for the contest. Good luck
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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A very romantic picture dancing in the moonlight. I've danced in the moonlight . It was soft, cozy, and breathtaking.
A good entry for the contest. Good luck
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Linda for the excellent review and personal story - how nice you had that experience!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a solid 3-5-3 writing prompt entry. With very few words you are able to nicely describe the joy felt by two people dancing under the stars. Well done and good luck in the competition.
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This is a solid 3-5-3 writing prompt entry. With very few words you are able to nicely describe the joy felt by two people dancing under the stars. Well done and good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the good review and the 5 stars. It is appreciated!
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Pleasure :-)
Comment from robyn corum
I like this quite a lot - I love the double meaning of 'dancing with the stars' - or at least IIIIII see a double meaning! *smile* Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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I like this quite a lot - I love the double meaning of 'dancing with the stars' - or at least IIIIII see a double meaning! *smile* Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thanks, Robyn. Yes - that was a double meaning intended - you got it.
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
This is well presented and very expressive of life's precious moments. Great imagery. Thank you for sharing. Good luck and happy writing!
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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This is well presented and very expressive of life's precious moments. Great imagery. Thank you for sharing. Good luck and happy writing!
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thank you for kind review.
Comment from chelsiechristine
Since it is a short poem, having the title as one of the lines felt like a lack of substance. However, the last line is cute and I can relate.
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Since it is a short poem, having the title as one of the lines felt like a lack of substance. However, the last line is cute and I can relate.
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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I took your comments into consideration and changed the title to the first line Moonlit Night so as to give less of the poem away. I don't think I want a totally different title. That was a good observation though. Check it out now.
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Since you liked that oneeven less, I changed the title back to my original, Dancing with the Stars, which I preferred, since it has a double reference: Dancing with the Stars - the t.v. program; and Dancing with the stars (above in the sky.) Haiku and Senryu usually have the first line of the poem as the title so a line should be o.k. here in a 3-5-3.
