The Truth of It
A dedication32 total reviews
Comment from anabellapongasi
I'm so sorry for your loss. This is a very beautifully written emotional poem which expresses deep love and sense of loss.
I like the comforting words of the concluding lines:
We have God's promise that this life is not the end.
We rest in the truth of that promise.
Blessings,
Anabella
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I'm so sorry for your loss. This is a very beautifully written emotional poem which expresses deep love and sense of loss.
I like the comforting words of the concluding lines:
We have God's promise that this life is not the end.
We rest in the truth of that promise.
Blessings,
Anabella
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
Comment from MissMerri
I really like what you've done with this. It is a grieving poem, full of emotion and expressions of love. I felt the emotion keenly. I thought it was very beautifully written, thoughtful, contemplative and yet poetic more than prose-ish. There was only one typo that I noticed: "the friend, the son, the person,you were, I feel ..." There needs to be a space after person, and no comma. Nice expression, and very touching.
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I really like what you've done with this. It is a grieving poem, full of emotion and expressions of love. I felt the emotion keenly. I thought it was very beautifully written, thoughtful, contemplative and yet poetic more than prose-ish. There was only one typo that I noticed: "the friend, the son, the person,you were, I feel ..." There needs to be a space after person, and no comma. Nice expression, and very touching.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2015
Comment from TPAC
You go. This work very toughing with heart felt tendencies warming and gripping in emotions peeling back to reveal certainties -an excellent read.
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You go. This work very toughing with heart felt tendencies warming and gripping in emotions peeling back to reveal certainties -an excellent read.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
Comment from Naham Mills
I love the way your writing evokes strong emotions in the reader.
It makes me think that you have endured hard times and felt as though
your pain was too strong for any human to endure.
You sound like an amazing compassionate friend.
Your heart must be huge (i.e. If I could have loved you more, I would have. If I could have saved you from the lightning strikes of worry and quiet desperation, I would have) = great with evoking emotions for those who can relate to the "vibe" present in your work
BEAUTIFULLY DONE
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I love the way your writing evokes strong emotions in the reader.
It makes me think that you have endured hard times and felt as though
your pain was too strong for any human to endure.
You sound like an amazing compassionate friend.
Your heart must be huge (i.e. If I could have loved you more, I would have. If I could have saved you from the lightning strikes of worry and quiet desperation, I would have) = great with evoking emotions for those who can relate to the "vibe" present in your work
BEAUTIFULLY DONE
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Loanna
_ So sorry to hear about your friend's son.
_ This was such a lovely dedication to him.
_ Indeed, his life did matter--he had purpose.
_ Thoughts and prayers are with you all at this time.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Hi, Loanna
_ So sorry to hear about your friend's son.
_ This was such a lovely dedication to him.
_ Indeed, his life did matter--he had purpose.
_ Thoughts and prayers are with you all at this time.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
Comment from misscookie
I'm sorry about the lost of your friend
nothing can fill the void in your heart or soul. But your friends love will ease your pain in time. I lost my nephew many years ago I miss him words can't express. I find peace knowing he is in no more pan and at last his body is at rest.
Cookie
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I'm sorry about the lost of your friend
nothing can fill the void in your heart or soul. But your friends love will ease your pain in time. I lost my nephew many years ago I miss him words can't express. I find peace knowing he is in no more pan and at last his body is at rest.
Cookie
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Makes you wonder if he contracted the disease by choice of his own actions? Nice tribute to him sure he would appreciate in either case.
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Makes you wonder if he contracted the disease by choice of his own actions? Nice tribute to him sure he would appreciate in either case.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
Comment from TomyKan
Your grief comes through clearly in this story about losing your Godson, but your faith seems to be sustaining you. I loved some of your turn of phrases, i.e. "the lightning strikes of worry and quiet desperation". Well done.
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Your grief comes through clearly in this story about losing your Godson, but your faith seems to be sustaining you. I loved some of your turn of phrases, i.e. "the lightning strikes of worry and quiet desperation". Well done.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
Comment from gamay
Hello Maa'm,
It is sad poem.
We can't say no if god want us .
Only God knows our life.
Have a nice day to you,
gamay
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Hello Maa'm,
It is sad poem.
We can't say no if god want us .
Only God knows our life.
Have a nice day to you,
gamay
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
What a beautifully written tribute to your Godson! Your heart showed through in your words. Loss is so very hard. The right words they never seem to come. Without God's help, I would not have made it through till today. Your poem is beautiful and so very warm and touching. Good luck to you and God Bless!
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What a beautifully written tribute to your Godson! Your heart showed through in your words. Loss is so very hard. The right words they never seem to come. Without God's help, I would not have made it through till today. Your poem is beautiful and so very warm and touching. Good luck to you and God Bless!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
