Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello,
This is an outstanding poem for your granddaughter. I think it is adorable and I'm sure your baby appreciates the effort and beauty of the poem you wrote in her honor. I love the picture, your granddaughter is beautiful. Good job!
gypsy

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi Gypsy. Thank you for your great review and lovely words, Amali is gorgeous and such fun to around we have great times together and she is a special child to me . thanks for your never ending lovely support much appreciated Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

Beats anything that Hallmark could come up with. I love these personal poems and the stories behind them. Your grandaughter is lucky to have such a caring grandmother. I particularly love cheer # 1.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi Mark . Thanks so much for your great review and delightful comments. Yes I like a personal touch and Amali is such a lovely child and will always have much love. Appreciate you having a read of this Cheers to you Christine😃

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

I like the love through this poem and the ten cheers.

You have a abcb rhyme scheme except for the second stanza with doesn't rhyme at all unless you are counting face and babe as a slant rhyme. The the rhyme scheme there would be abac.

You're grandaughter must love he poem.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Hi dragonpoet. thanks for your kind review and I hadn't even notice the two words not actually rhyming so thanks for letting me know this . I will probably keep it as it was written in Jan before I commenced FS and have learnt a lot since joining, and have made changes to other poems under advice given. But this was just a share poem and I will keep it as is. I would feel a bit uneasy changing the words now and Amali love it as is, but appreciate you comments with a big Cheers Christine😃

reply by dragonpoet on 28-Sep-2015

No problem.

Joan

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Writer in this work expresses themselves in poetic structuring in lines composition. Surprising me at the end with a delightful conclusion. The work course in my opinion could be strengthened at points to double that end bang. Your thing, do what you want to do.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thank you TPAC for reading my poem and for your review and comments. I will have to leave it as is because that is how I wrote it for Amali so appreciate your suggestions just wanted to share this one Cheers Christine😃

reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thank you TPAC for reading my poem and for your review and comments. I will have to leave it as is because that is how I wrote it for Amali so appreciate your suggestions just wanted to share this one Cheers Christine😃

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

Very lovely. I was attracted to the poem by the title 'Double Figures', very ingenious. I love the enchanting words you engaged in this poem to show how passionate you are about Amali. I like the lines from one to ten stating different positive thoughts for the little, Oh sorry! for the big girl. I join you to say HAPPY BIRTHDAY, AMALI

ola thomas

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Ola for reading this and giving me a review with your lovely comments, yes big girl now pre teenage year she is a real sweetie and I enjoy her quirky fun nature very much a bit special Cheers Christine 😀

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

Amazing what we remember from our childhood. Even an innocent remark like that can stay with us forever. I'm glad your granddaughter appreciates your lovely sentiments. :)

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks Tessa for your review and lovely comments. That is something I will never forget and my grandaughter thought it was great I said that to her. Yes you are right amazing what we do remember Cheers Christine😃

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Good

The third line of the second stanza does not make much sense. Seems like there is a typo in "oun" as well. (Needs clarification). Notes interesting. Sure she appreciated this.

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks so much Brett appreciate your eagle eye with that one I hope it now makes sense. Interesting enough I read my poems several times as a rule but sometime still miss a typo so it's good that we have poeple like you to keep us in line lol Cheers again Christine😄