Christine's Poems
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Comment from Patricia Dsouza
Your writing is remarkable and refined. I value the way you progress and flow throughout. You have remarkably brilliant skills. I am glad it has been recognized too!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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Your writing is remarkable and refined. I value the way you progress and flow throughout. You have remarkably brilliant skills. I am glad it has been recognized too!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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THank you very much Patricia for your really lovely comments. That means a lot to me so they are very much appreciated. I enjoy writing and try to have a rhythm and rhyme so I am pleased you thought so . Cheers to you Christine😃😃
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Congratulations on the win!
-Well written poem that takes a humorous look at your flaws, a number of which many have experienced:
We say, I know I just had my glasses, keys, etc. How can we find the glasses when we don't have them to find with! When the car is misplaced in the parking lot, at least we have beepers now!
-Now, forgetting your kids, that's another thing!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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-Congratulations on the win!
-Well written poem that takes a humorous look at your flaws, a number of which many have experienced:
We say, I know I just had my glasses, keys, etc. How can we find the glasses when we don't have them to find with! When the car is misplaced in the parking lot, at least we have beepers now!
-Now, forgetting your kids, that's another thing!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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Thank you respa1 for your congratulations and review, and just to let you know the kids have forgiven me lol we often laugh about it . I would drive them to school but sometimes they would walk home ( it wasn't far anyway ) and say You said you would pick me up ! but all good. )However key still an issue at times Ha ha .At least I am aware of this fault and do try to remember most things. Cheers for your feedback and support Cheers Christine😃
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You are welcome for the congratulations and review. Thanks for sharing in your reply.
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Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Chrissy, I've always had a bad memory too and the older I get, the worse it gets.
This was so much fun to read. I liked all the stanzas. Thank you for putting a big smile on my face. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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Hi Chrissy, I've always had a bad memory too and the older I get, the worse it gets.
This was so much fun to read. I liked all the stanzas. Thank you for putting a big smile on my face. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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Thank you Lou for having a read and I am glad I am not the only one our there lol so keep smiling and I don't expect to improve ha ha With Cheers for a great day Christine😃
Comment from MacMhuirich
I love your funny poem. Nice rhyme and form to bring a smile to my face as it reminds me so much of my good lady, she has found her car keys and glasses in the fridge on occasion. I got her a diary like you to take notes, but she can't find it.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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I love your funny poem. Nice rhyme and form to bring a smile to my face as it reminds me so much of my good lady, she has found her car keys and glasses in the fridge on occasion. I got her a diary like you to take notes, but she can't find it.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2015
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Hi John Thanks for your comments and great review much appreciated, Yes it can be a bother at times I guess I am alway thinking ahead so get behind a lot lol will not improve I don't think so just have to slow down ha ha . I love writing funny poems so glad you liked this one Cheers Christine😀
Comment from TPAC
Another attribute of hell memory stated to be the dead status and enforced principality governing its residence. We all suffer that blank in this existence. Too, things at once upon our minds. This write made me think.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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Another attribute of hell memory stated to be the dead status and enforced principality governing its residence. We all suffer that blank in this existence. Too, things at once upon our minds. This write made me think.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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Hi TPAC thankd for reading my poem and giving me a review much appreciated and yes the old memory has it's moments for sure lol Cheers
Comment from mvbrooks
fun, whimsical poem that seems at first to be asking for "forgiveness" for being forgetful and ends with asking others to just accept the forgetfulness. Most have done one or more of the "lost and seek" incidents you describe, making it easy for the reader to relate to the poem. The rhyme scheme is consistent and adds to the lightheartedness of the poem.
Suggestion -- reread for "flow" -- there are times the cadence seems a bit off.
"Then wonder where they are,
For cannot read and get quite mad "
--seems you need to add "I" after "for" for clarity (For I cannot...). Otherwise the reader pauses to determine if the line refers to the narrator or to the missing item.
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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fun, whimsical poem that seems at first to be asking for "forgiveness" for being forgetful and ends with asking others to just accept the forgetfulness. Most have done one or more of the "lost and seek" incidents you describe, making it easy for the reader to relate to the poem. The rhyme scheme is consistent and adds to the lightheartedness of the poem.
Suggestion -- reread for "flow" -- there are times the cadence seems a bit off.
"Then wonder where they are,
For cannot read and get quite mad "
--seems you need to add "I" after "for" for clarity (For I cannot...). Otherwise the reader pauses to determine if the line refers to the narrator or to the missing item.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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Thank you mybrooks for reading and reviewing my poem and for your suggestions al very much appreciated Cheers
Comment from RahulChadha
This is a very beautifully and perfectly written poetry, nicely shaped and put into words. Nice vocabulary used as well. I am not that good at writing reviews but I loved it.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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This is a very beautifully and perfectly written poetry, nicely shaped and put into words. Nice vocabulary used as well. I am not that good at writing reviews but I loved it.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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Thank you RahulChadha for your lovely review and rating .I am glad you loved it I had fun writing it for this contest and all true lol and your review is perfect thank you Cheers
Comment from seaglass
I have this problem too. It's call air-headedness in my world. I left each of my children at sometime or other. I like to think it's that Im so intelligent that my brin is crowded. This rhyme mixed with humor is delightful.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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I have this problem too. It's call air-headedness in my world. I left each of my children at sometime or other. I like to think it's that Im so intelligent that my brin is crowded. This rhyme mixed with humor is delightful.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015
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Hi seaglass yes at time air headedness could fit me as well, although I would like to think I am a bit more intelligent as well lol
I think at times the busy brain just does not take thing in so it is always interesting and I can laugh about my memory. Cheers for you great review
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. I have always had a bad memory too. I did not have anything to blame it on until I got older. Now, I tell them I am a old woman. Get used to my bad memory. Great work.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I have always had a bad memory too. I did not have anything to blame it on until I got older. Now, I tell them I am a old woman. Get used to my bad memory. Great work.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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Hi nelliesellie , thank you so much for your review and comments. It seems I am not the only one out there lol, It was an easy subject to write about had a bit of fun so appreciate your time too Cheers
Comment from Judvan2
I loved your poem.it's funny an soo true. If yours started when you were very young just think how many more poems are to come. Nice form,covers all the daily life experiences.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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I loved your poem.it's funny an soo true. If yours started when you were very young just think how many more poems are to come. Nice form,covers all the daily life experiences.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2015
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thank you very much Judvan2 .and ues always seem to have had a bad memory mainly short term things, but at least I know about it ha ha. always ready to have a laugh at my expense lol Cheers
