Have you danced?
His ways are not our ways.86 total reviews
Comment from I am Cat
Hello Roy,
This is a lovely lyrical poem... with some wonderful imagery
involved. I notice that you say it could be considered a Blank Verse poem,
but my understanding is that Blank Verse is written in iambic pentameter, and since this isn't written in that specific meter, then it would be considered a Blank Verse.
However, I find it much more appealing than most Blank Verse poetry, because it has more freedom to lilt and be more whimsical in its movements. Blank Verse, because of the iambs and having to have the stresses exactly in the correct places, really take away from the movements of whimsical speech patterns IMHO...
But perhaps that's just me. Some will say (especially the British) that iambic pentameter most mimics speech patterns... (but no one I know actually speaks in a sing song voice) So I don't know what they mean by that.... perhaps they mean it more in a 'performance' capacity?
I have no idea. For me, i prefer something like what you've written here. ;)
Well done Roy. I enjoyed it immensely. I would have clearly given this a six... and so, a VIRTUAL SIX STARS will have to do... as, by virtue of the fact that i have no more... I have to give it a five. :(
Well written,
Cat
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Hello Roy,
This is a lovely lyrical poem... with some wonderful imagery
involved. I notice that you say it could be considered a Blank Verse poem,
but my understanding is that Blank Verse is written in iambic pentameter, and since this isn't written in that specific meter, then it would be considered a Blank Verse.
However, I find it much more appealing than most Blank Verse poetry, because it has more freedom to lilt and be more whimsical in its movements. Blank Verse, because of the iambs and having to have the stresses exactly in the correct places, really take away from the movements of whimsical speech patterns IMHO...
But perhaps that's just me. Some will say (especially the British) that iambic pentameter most mimics speech patterns... (but no one I know actually speaks in a sing song voice) So I don't know what they mean by that.... perhaps they mean it more in a 'performance' capacity?
I have no idea. For me, i prefer something like what you've written here. ;)
Well done Roy. I enjoyed it immensely. I would have clearly given this a six... and so, a VIRTUAL SIX STARS will have to do... as, by virtue of the fact that i have no more... I have to give it a five. :(
Well written,
Cat
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks Cat, in the early days of my songwriting most of these songs where similar, some had odd rhyme her and there, but I was amazed how many didn't rhyme. Because of my propensity to write it thus! Some dear lady told me it wasn't a hymn because it didn't rhyme, sigh! But thanks for this lovely review and words, and your approval I appreciate it, blessings, Roy.
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Seems someone is always ready to tell us what our work is and isn't, aren't they? lol
Ah well... As long as WE know... I suppose it shouldn't make a difference.
My G'amma used to say, "I don't care what they call me, as long as they call me for dinner." (she might have had a point) ;)
Always a pleasure, Roy. ;)
Comment from Poetic Friend
This is one of the most beautiful poems that I read on Fanstory. I have been away from Fanstory for years, and it is nice to return to read poetry as yours,
The poem is uplifting, image-filled, and lively. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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This is one of the most beautiful poems that I read on Fanstory. I have been away from Fanstory for years, and it is nice to return to read poetry as yours,
The poem is uplifting, image-filled, and lively. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks, for the lovely words and delightful review, my appreciation, and welcome back, blessings, Roy.
Comment from artemis53
I was just thinking upon the looking at the face of God. The priests of the temple wore bells about their ankles when they entered the Tabernacle. It was to signal that they were still alive during their duties. Some did see His face and were taken immediately hence, the bells would no longer ring.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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I was just thinking upon the looking at the face of God. The priests of the temple wore bells about their ankles when they entered the Tabernacle. It was to signal that they were still alive during their duties. Some did see His face and were taken immediately hence, the bells would no longer ring.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks, scary huh!, for the lovely words and delightful review, my appreciation, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Glasstruth
Yes, this would make for a wonderfully poetic song, as most songwriters write much simpler stuff. Love these two lines:
"Have you ever put a harness on the wind,
and rode on the storm across the sky?"
Superb! Les
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Yes, this would make for a wonderfully poetic song, as most songwriters write much simpler stuff. Love these two lines:
"Have you ever put a harness on the wind,
and rode on the storm across the sky?"
Superb! Les
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks Les, for the lovely words and delightful review, my appreciation, blessings, Roy.
Comment from rspoet
Twenty years ago and the voice of Roy Owen
is just as loud and clear
Except for the missing rhyme
I would have said this was Roy
without ever seeing the name
Beautiful writing, my friend
Words that dance and soar
who could ask for more
It would be interesting to hear it sung
Very well done
the most I have left is a five
So I give it my top score
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Twenty years ago and the voice of Roy Owen
is just as loud and clear
Except for the missing rhyme
I would have said this was Roy
without ever seeing the name
Beautiful writing, my friend
Words that dance and soar
who could ask for more
It would be interesting to hear it sung
Very well done
the most I have left is a five
So I give it my top score
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks RS, for the lovely words and delightful review, my appreciation, and your approval is enough, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Kingsland
I like this piece of thoughts written as a song. It has much to put upon my plate to think on. You have written a piece of poetry that makes one think as well as being very entertaining. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... john
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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I like this piece of thoughts written as a song. It has much to put upon my plate to think on. You have written a piece of poetry that makes one think as well as being very entertaining. I enjoyed reading this excellent piece of poetic art... john
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks John, for the lovely words and delightful review, my appreciation, blessings, Roy.
Comment from livelylinda
Roy: lovely words to this song. All questions we must seek to understand the answers. But, they are all with God and His grace we desire. Linda
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Roy: lovely words to this song. All questions we must seek to understand the answers. But, they are all with God and His grace we desire. Linda
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks Linda, for the lovely words and delightful review, my appreciation, blessings, Roy.
Comment from judiverse
This is lovely, and the rhyme and meter work out perfectly. Interesting to frame your questions in a way that emphasize the wonders of the universe. The answer is that if one can imagine those wonders, he truly knows God. I like the imagery you create in this, as with "putting a harness on the wind." judi
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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This is lovely, and the rhyme and meter work out perfectly. Interesting to frame your questions in a way that emphasize the wonders of the universe. The answer is that if one can imagine those wonders, he truly knows God. I like the imagery you create in this, as with "putting a harness on the wind." judi
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks Judi, another fantastic review, blessings, Roy.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Ben Colder
Somewhere in my life of learning literature I was told when poetry refuses to sing, it is only words lost in the fog of rhyming wonder. It made sense to me. All from the heart. My blessings, Bro.
Still trying to get through this with my son. Sorry to be late responding.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Somewhere in my life of learning literature I was told when poetry refuses to sing, it is only words lost in the fog of rhyming wonder. It made sense to me. All from the heart. My blessings, Bro.
Still trying to get through this with my son. Sorry to be late responding.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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My eternal thanks bro, you must be suffering, thanks for the fantastic effort, my prayers are with you and yours, Ben, blessings, Roy.
Comment from gudbjorg
Beautifully written with a good flow, rhyme and rhythm. I would say a real masterpiece. Our limited, human perception of things can only be understood through the knowledge of God's Words, and our personal experiences. Thank you for sharing this. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Beautifully written with a good flow, rhyme and rhythm. I would say a real masterpiece. Our limited, human perception of things can only be understood through the knowledge of God's Words, and our personal experiences. Thank you for sharing this. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2015
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Thanks for the fantastic review, lovely words and outstanding rating, my gratitude, blessing, Roy.
