Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

s the world turns so is the great challenges of science making it self known to man kind in many shapes and forms some in pill form and some in other forms best not become depend on jut one thing could be disterious

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015

Yeah. I might drop ten aspirins a year. Thanking you for generous rate and comforting remarks

reply by country ranch writer on 19-Sep-2015

s m i l e

Comment from P1

Excellent

this is the first of your series i have
reviewed but i will try and go back and
read more. i like what you are doing here
and find your words very clear and interesting
thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015

Not all share that view on all my works and I do admit pits. Thanking you for your generous rate and pleasing to me comments.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I think this is a marvelous tribute, in a rather frantic and frenetic fashion, to some drug, maybe aspirin, that has done what it was made to do. I noted these for your consideration. Nice poem.

13 Combative fighter in conflicts for (the) times our heads ache() from worries

39 sold a tiny (compact)feature

43 which torment() us in pounds.

47 (It's) our sound sleep

53 Items in pills hold() many keys

71 Or does the pill answer() any doubts

74 Nor does the pill utter() any intents

Happy day.


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 Comment Written 19-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015

Glad you found interests in this work. Thanking you for sound shout out and generous rate. Will a address those pits.