Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "My Magic Stone"Dawn of Chaos
33 total reviews
Comment from quashdog
This whole piece read like surrealism, almost like an ecstasy high. It is a real funky piece, very different from many of the more traditional pieces I come across here and being different from the crowd is what makes an author or poet authentic.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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This whole piece read like surrealism, almost like an ecstasy high. It is a real funky piece, very different from many of the more traditional pieces I come across here and being different from the crowd is what makes an author or poet authentic.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2015
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Wow. Now that's a mouth full but I do like the intent and thank you for all said and given.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Good. I find this rather hard to read. All those little words so close togather. Your topic is excellent and I understand what you are trying to convey to the reader; I just found all those words jumbled togather hard to read.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Good. I find this rather hard to read. All those little words so close togather. Your topic is excellent and I understand what you are trying to convey to the reader; I just found all those words jumbled togather hard to read.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2015
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Thanking you for your insights about the bundled thoughts. At least some of the intent of this message was obtained. Too, generous rate and I will consider your comments. Your statements always welcomed.
Comment from Nosha17
I'm guessing you mean that a friend can cure more ills than a tablet that is made from chemicals, due to the lack of care. Interesting thoughts and well chosen words to convey them. Couple of things, line 6, are splitting. Line 12, when we diagnose. Line 32, shining bright. Line 44, sorrow's land. Enjoyable read, faye
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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I'm guessing you mean that a friend can cure more ills than a tablet that is made from chemicals, due to the lack of care. Interesting thoughts and well chosen words to convey them. Couple of things, line 6, are splitting. Line 12, when we diagnose. Line 32, shining bright. Line 44, sorrow's land. Enjoyable read, faye
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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Great heads up. Thanking you for your patience and interests in this work plus generous rate and pleasing comments
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Great work with strings of breath taking pace. Very descriptive thoughts. Yes, healing is in the hand of the Holy God, more effective than the science. Nicely conceived poem.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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Great work with strings of breath taking pace. Very descriptive thoughts. Yes, healing is in the hand of the Holy God, more effective than the science. Nicely conceived poem.
ola thomas
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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Thanking you for your interests and kind statements about this work
Comment from madhatter1977
I thought this was interesting as I need to take pills and you've just reminded me. You could break this up into smaller and more manageable chunks I think. I spotted a typo here:
"Shield shinning bright," - should be shining?
Otherwise I thought it was very good though I'd disagree that all medicine is helpful. Sometimes it is only a plaster. Very good and thoughtful nevertheless.
Best wishes,
Pete
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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I thought this was interesting as I need to take pills and you've just reminded me. You could break this up into smaller and more manageable chunks I think. I spotted a typo here:
"Shield shinning bright," - should be shining?
Otherwise I thought it was very good though I'd disagree that all medicine is helpful. Sometimes it is only a plaster. Very good and thoughtful nevertheless.
Best wishes,
Pete
Comment Written 28-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2015
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The sense of efforts intended not a sure cure. Glad the work touched your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and pleasing comments
Comment from Selina Stambi
A rhapsody to the healing power of medication, written in a grand, bombastic style.
... and then science. Of course!
Nicely done, TPAC - though a large 'pill' to swallow in a single dose!
Sonali
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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A rhapsody to the healing power of medication, written in a grand, bombastic style.
... and then science. Of course!
Nicely done, TPAC - though a large 'pill' to swallow in a single dose!
Sonali
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Yeah, boringly long. Events forty years to this visual. Glad you found some delight. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from gwendolyn21
Great poem. It has a story in it, to show the expressions of the protagonist in the story. A job well done, it's very fun to read. :)
Keep up the good work, I hope to see your wonderful poem in the future.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Great poem. It has a story in it, to show the expressions of the protagonist in the story. A job well done, it's very fun to read. :)
Keep up the good work, I hope to see your wonderful poem in the future.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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I'm fighting myself with my deliver of written expressions. I like the fall. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In notes "as" should be "is". Poem reads like one long paragraph. Needs to separated into stanzas some how. Would make it easier to digest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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In notes "as" should be "is". Poem reads like one long paragraph. Needs to separated into stanzas some how. Would make it easier to digest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Will consider input and see if a poetic side can evolve from various spotted views. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating thoughts.
Comment from c_lucas
Most prescriptions are poisonous in nature. Sometimes, they are more deadly than the illness. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Most prescriptions are poisonous in nature. Sometimes, they are more deadly than the illness. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Not all hold this view. I myself am amazed some feel it is good. I average two stars. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed response.
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You're welcome, TPAC. Charlie
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello TPAC
Here I am sitting trying to think of a pill that may be the remedy to ones aliment it; reminds me when you call your Dr. and he/she tells you take an aspirin and call me tomorrow.
To tell you the truth you got me what is this pill?
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Hello TPAC
Here I am sitting trying to think of a pill that may be the remedy to ones aliment it; reminds me when you call your Dr. and he/she tells you take an aspirin and call me tomorrow.
To tell you the truth you got me what is this pill?
Gert
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
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Hope. Thanking you for generous rate and interesting in appeal comments.
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You are welcome TRAC
Gert
