Short Form Poetry
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Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Good evening..I enjoyed watching the attached picture and your words brought out this even more alive. Thank you for sharing this. The colors indeed sear the horizon. Good intonation with this. I can literally hear the sear as the sun sets especially when I feel my own eyes shut with this. the seals of the sun and of the eyes look and feel the same way. Great job and cheers.
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Good evening..I enjoyed watching the attached picture and your words brought out this even more alive. Thank you for sharing this. The colors indeed sear the horizon. Good intonation with this. I can literally hear the sear as the sun sets especially when I feel my own eyes shut with this. the seals of the sun and of the eyes look and feel the same way. Great job and cheers.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo that complements your wee poem very well. Garish colours flash as red sun sears the horizon. Then the Satori line. Best wishes for the prompt.
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An excellent photo that complements your wee poem very well. Garish colours flash as red sun sears the horizon. Then the Satori line. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This sunset haiku meets all the requirements of the contest as to form and syllable count. It is presented spectactularly. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
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This sunset haiku meets all the requirements of the contest as to form and syllable count. It is presented spectactularly. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
Comment from humpwhistle
Hmmm, I don't think I'd get the true meaning you're trying
to convey without the descriptor line--which is not part of the haiku.
I think you're expecting me to make to big a leap.
Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
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Hmmm, I don't think I'd get the true meaning you're trying
to convey without the descriptor line--which is not part of the haiku.
I think you're expecting me to make to big a leap.
Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
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Yes, you're right. I think that's why I hedged with the descriptor if I'm honest with myself. Thanks for pointing that out. I changed it up to make it more clear. Good call.
Comment from Nosha17
A very dramatic sunset, amazing what effects the sun can have on our landscape. Excellent choice of words and illustration. Good luck in the contest. faye
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A very dramatic sunset, amazing what effects the sun can have on our landscape. Excellent choice of words and illustration. Good luck in the contest. faye
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
