Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

A solid write. It has a fun and mystical approach. A read you can get lost in with imagination. I can see this as part of a kids story book. Well done and thanks.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015

Thank you for reviewing this poem. I appreciate all the stars and the nice comments. Reading books is my thing not writing them. I got all the mythical beings from books I've read.

dragonpoet

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

wings and voices ma(k)e a lot

The griffin flew right (alongside)

return light where light forgets to shine - lovely concluding line. Light up the darkness!

Hi dragonpoet,

An interesting mix of fairytale, folklore and mythical tales.

Lots of eye-popping action. :)

Nicely done.

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015

Thank you for such a favorable review and the editing aids. I made the corrections.

Joan

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

With our fertile imaginations we can dream of stepping into a land of fantasy and the creatures to meet there are infinite possibilities. I enjoyed the descriptions of the creatures you met, good use of rhyming and imagery, most enjoyable read. faye

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015

Thanks for your nice comments and all the stars. I am glad you enjoyed it.

Joan

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Hi Joan;
-I took it upon myself to help promote this poem and uplift its readings to others for I felt it was definitely in need of having been read by more than just a few.
-Is extremely well written And it took a lot of courage of yourself to share Your feelings and emotions.
-The imagery is metaphorically written and exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout your writing.
-Even with mixed meter of pentameter and tetrameter the cadence, timing and tempo was so helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and easy.
-Each of your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the rhythm to flow smoothly and what was also helpful was the fact that neither of your rhyming words were forced nor labored.
-I found this fantasy piece of work to be an excellent story within a poem.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Joan.
Alex

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2015

Thank you for your raves, Alex. It took a while to write. I guess it was time well spent. I always worry about my meter taking away from a poem. I am glad you thought the mixed meter worked.

Joan

reply by krys123 on 14-Sep-2015

You are very welcome Joan

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

I loved the line 'I smiled widely and I yes, yes, yessed.' to then rhyme with
blessed. It conjured up a vivid picture in my mind.
Also like the telepathic dragon who nods because he can read minds.
This is cute. :)

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015

Thanks. I thought it was time for a little bit of fun,

Joan

Comment from robyn corum

Good

I agreed (to?) leave my new found friends

And (returned?) light where light forgets to shin

Great imagination and fun at work here!

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2015

Thanks for the review I will check the errors.

dragonpoet