Short Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "haiku (butterfly gently ripples)"A Collection Of Short Form Poetry
17 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Congratulations on your win. I like the message, the artwork, and the short, sweet poem. It is amazing that you said so much in 6 words. Good job.
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Congratulations on your win. I like the message, the artwork, and the short, sweet poem. It is amazing that you said so much in 6 words. Good job.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2015
Comment from Lovinia
Hello Mystery Poet
How superb. Brilliant presentation ... of course this haiku stands alone and paints its own perfect image, a moment frozen in time.
The AHA takes me through the universe and back again, all in one moment. It must be a stay-up-late, and flit through the night butterfly. I like a butterfly that goes against the grain. :)) Serenity, tranquility, a fantastical place. This will be difficult to beat, though I haven't read the others yet. Wishing you the best of luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
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Hello Mystery Poet
How superb. Brilliant presentation ... of course this haiku stands alone and paints its own perfect image, a moment frozen in time.
The AHA takes me through the universe and back again, all in one moment. It must be a stay-up-late, and flit through the night butterfly. I like a butterfly that goes against the grain. :)) Serenity, tranquility, a fantastical place. This will be difficult to beat, though I haven't read the others yet. Wishing you the best of luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
Comment Written 13-Sep-2015
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi. Nice entry with the words bringing the picture to life. I wasn't thrilled about the 'liquid' part as a description for the moon nor the effect the butterfly has. I understood it though that the butterfly ripples the moons reflection upon the water. Cheers.
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Hi. Nice entry with the words bringing the picture to life. I wasn't thrilled about the 'liquid' part as a description for the moon nor the effect the butterfly has. I understood it though that the butterfly ripples the moons reflection upon the water. Cheers.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is such an exquisitely serene haiku - it's easy to imagine, and very beautiful. The artwork you chose to accompany this is gorgeous as well, although not even needed, the words so evocative. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
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This is such an exquisitely serene haiku - it's easy to imagine, and very beautiful. The artwork you chose to accompany this is gorgeous as well, although not even needed, the words so evocative. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from Jean Lutz
AHA moment indeed! It is the time of year when we will be blessed by the Harvest moon. Almost like it is intended to recharge us for winter days ahead. Six words put to grand use. I wish you well with your entry.
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AHA moment indeed! It is the time of year when we will be blessed by the Harvest moon. Almost like it is intended to recharge us for winter days ahead. Six words put to grand use. I wish you well with your entry.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from w.j.debi
There is a sense of serenity in these six simple words. It is tricky to convey deep emotion in such a short phrase, but you did it. The overall presentation is stunning. This is something that could be hung on wall. Best of luck in the contest.
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There is a sense of serenity in these six simple words. It is tricky to convey deep emotion in such a short phrase, but you did it. The overall presentation is stunning. This is something that could be hung on wall. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from robyn corum
Now THIS is a fabulous entry into this contest. These six word contests are near impossible to do -- okay, for me, anyway. Therefore, I am all the more impressed when someone does it WELL. KUDOS!
I'm hoping you know about the website dedicated to these. I feel this one has a good chance of making the grade!
http://www.sixwordmemoirs.com/
Good luck in both!
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Now THIS is a fabulous entry into this contest. These six word contests are near impossible to do -- okay, for me, anyway. Therefore, I am all the more impressed when someone does it WELL. KUDOS!
I'm hoping you know about the website dedicated to these. I feel this one has a good chance of making the grade!
http://www.sixwordmemoirs.com/
Good luck in both!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
I like yours best in the contest. The picture is beautiful and it goes well with the poem. You give a lovely image that could go without the picture and still be as effective. It is romantic and elegant. It is hard to carry a message across with six words and you did it magnificently.
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Hello :)
I like yours best in the contest. The picture is beautiful and it goes well with the poem. You give a lovely image that could go without the picture and still be as effective. It is romantic and elegant. It is hard to carry a message across with six words and you did it magnificently.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from Sis Cat
Beautiful and vivid. I enjoy the light butterfly touch of your words and imagery. They were effective in painting s picture and a mood. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
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Beautiful and vivid. I enjoy the light butterfly touch of your words and imagery. They were effective in painting s picture and a mood. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh my, six word poem indeed. I was expecting a simple six word phrase or a clever collection of words with a loose theme. This is a quality composition. You would not have to explain that this was for a six word competition.
Exceptional haiku that would place highly in a haiku contest. The winner in my opinion.
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Oh my, six word poem indeed. I was expecting a simple six word phrase or a clever collection of words with a loose theme. This is a quality composition. You would not have to explain that this was for a six word competition.
Exceptional haiku that would place highly in a haiku contest. The winner in my opinion.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2015
