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Stories of the Dreamtime

Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Desert Rose"
Aboriginal myths and legends.

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Comment from aryr
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I loved this, despite the cruelty that happened along the way. It was a great story of true love and that the Desert Rose Tree helped the lovers and provided an ongoing reminder. It was sad that Jabiru first knew his time, his life was done and that he died after telling the story. Very well done, thanks again for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    I have three Desert Rose trees growing in my garden. They are very slow. However, in Singapore they are in a controlled environment and grow to 30 ft! Thank you sister. XXK.
reply by aryr on 22-Aug-2018
    Wow if they grow so slow maybe I could get a little one and then just plant it somewhere before I die lol
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
    One of ours is three years old and only a foot high. Plenty of time. Don't water it too much; after all it is a desert tree.
Comment from Taffspride
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What a wonderful story Kay, and you tell it so well. Keeping the dialect added so much to he authenticity of the tale.

I love reading or hearing the lgends and folk tales of any country. This one particularly struck a chord because my husband recently bought a desert rose, now I can't wait to lt him read this. It will make the plant more special.

Thank you for sharing it with us.

Iechyd da

Ann


 Comment Written 09-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
    Hello Ann, We have a Desert Rose, they are very, very slow growing and don't like a lot of water. So pleased you enjoyed, let me know how it grows; ours is pink and red. Blessings, Kay XX
Comment from Alan K Pease
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Excellent story of Majnun and Leila, their love and separation at the hands of their elders and reunited once again in the arms of the Desert Rose Tree. Lovely story Aussie at your best in the myths of Afghanistan and the world around.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
    Hi Alan, Thanks so much for reading, glad you liked it. How about putting pen to paper? Love, Kay XX
Comment from Eigle Rull
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Oh, this was a well written, very interesting story, my friend. I really enjoyed reading it. I'm so glad that the couple were finally allowed to come together in love. It is a sad but sweet story, my friend. Best wishes to you.

ALWAYS with respect,

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
    Hi Eigle, Thanks so much, glad you liked it! I do like writing legends. Blessings, K.
Comment from Writingfundimension
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Such a lovely story, Kay. I am always impressed with anyone who can keep a consistency with syntax, as you have here. The two lovers do have a happy ending of sorts. Hopefully those folks in the 'audience' were satisfied.

Well done, my friend.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Hi Bev, Thanks so much my friend. Love, Kay.
reply by Writingfundimension on 04-Oct-2015
    My pleasure, Kay. XX Bev
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
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Kaye,
What a wonderful love story. I was hooked from the moment I started reading. I can't wait for more. This is a fabulous book you are writing. Kudos on a job well down.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    G'day Mom, Thanks so much; up to chapt 15 now. Just letting Americans have a peep at our culture. Cheers, K.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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That was one of your best, Kay, it was sad, romantic, cruel, sweet, happy, sad, it had every emotion going with all that happened to those two unfortunate lovers. It is so nice to know they are together for all eternity. You told this beautifully, my lovely friend, and using their dialect made it even better, if that was possible. SUPERB!!! :) Sandra xsxs

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Hey! I am bowled over by your review. It takes so long to translate into indigenous tongue. Love you girl! XXX
reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 05-Oct-2015
    You are so welcome, my dear friend. This story was riveting, I so wanted them to be together. I am packing and cleaning up today, but will pop in later. Off to the sun tomorrow!! :) xxxxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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What a lovely story Kay. I love the Aboriginal dialect in your story. Great imagery. I felt like I was there watching the old man tell the story. Even followed him while he was skipping stones. LOL Well done My friend. Love folk lore. Nancy xxx

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    Hi Nancy, it took me some time to write it in our type of English, not sure you would appreciate it. But you did! Thanks so much my friend. XXX Love, K.
Comment from Sasha
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This is a marvelous story and so beautifully written. Terrific dialect too, very hard to do. I enjoyed this story and got a kick out of Jabiru falling asleep in the middle and having to start all over again. Great work with this Dreamtime story of two lovers finally entwined forever. I enjoyed this one very juch.

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 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    G'day across the seas! Yep, took me ages to translate and then, I wasn't sure if you guys would like or understand it. You did! Thanks so much my friend. XX K.
Comment from artemis53
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Kate, you tell such beautiful stories of your land and people and I'm always amazed by them. I still have the story of your 'selkies' in my head. it is wonderful to know that the old stories are still passed on.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2015
    G'day mate! The Selkies still run around in my head, I have often thought of writing a sequel. Glad you liked my latest write. Blessings, Kay.XX