Poems of Love and Spirit
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Making the Most of Moment"This book is about love, God's Love most of all.
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Comment from Number11
Love it! I like the flow and feel of the poem and I connect with the message, as I am sure most people will! I think this sort of rallying cry is said by most people in their private struggles and facing that nasty demon of confusion. Thanks for the poem! Beautiful
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Love it! I like the flow and feel of the poem and I connect with the message, as I am sure most people will! I think this sort of rallying cry is said by most people in their private struggles and facing that nasty demon of confusion. Thanks for the poem! Beautiful
Comment Written 02-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem and I'm glad to know you liked it. That means a lot to me.
With appreciation, Gb
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the poem epitomises the primacy of making the best use of the moment.
The work highlights how such a progressive disposition could bring about the best of innovations and resultant contentment.
The work constitutes a significant commentary on the importance of making hay while the sun shines.
Outstanding work! Bravo!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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The objective correlative of the poem epitomises the primacy of making the best use of the moment.
The work highlights how such a progressive disposition could bring about the best of innovations and resultant contentment.
The work constitutes a significant commentary on the importance of making hay while the sun shines.
Outstanding work! Bravo!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your marvelous review and for the six stars. I was absolutely stunned by your comments about it and I'm really glad that you liked it and I treasure all that you said.
With love and kindness,
Gb
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from barleygirl
I very much enjoy & subscribe to your message. After battling depression all my life, I've become an expert at starting each day with the intention of being upbeat. It doesn't come naturally for some of us. If that's the case, we may have to make this decision every morning. I like that you are helping others steeped in "bleak" to find another way to approach the moment. Your poem is well written & the alliteration in the first line is off the charts.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I very much enjoy & subscribe to your message. After battling depression all my life, I've become an expert at starting each day with the intention of being upbeat. It doesn't come naturally for some of us. If that's the case, we may have to make this decision every morning. I like that you are helping others steeped in "bleak" to find another way to approach the moment. Your poem is well written & the alliteration in the first line is off the charts.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for your kind review, I really appreciate it and regard it very helpful. Gb
Comment from Dean Kuch
You're absolutely right, gudbjorg. Why face the day at all if you're going to go through your entire day being grouchy, grumpy, and mean-spirited?
Greet everyone you meet with a smile and the light shines through.
Treat those you encounter along your day's journey with caring, compassion, and kindness.
Most importantly of all, let those in your life whom you cherish know beyond a doubt that you do, and do so every day.
After all, none of us are guaranteed a tomorrow. And even then, sometimes tomorrow is too late.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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You're absolutely right, gudbjorg. Why face the day at all if you're going to go through your entire day being grouchy, grumpy, and mean-spirited?
Greet everyone you meet with a smile and the light shines through.
Treat those you encounter along your day's journey with caring, compassion, and kindness.
Most importantly of all, let those in your life whom you cherish know beyond a doubt that you do, and do so every day.
After all, none of us are guaranteed a tomorrow. And even then, sometimes tomorrow is too late.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2016
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I greatly appreciate your fine words about my poem, that it's a good read and inspiration for the soul. I'm so thankful. Gb
Comment from Thal1959
A very well thought out and expressed work. Some rhymes, just reading the last words of each line, don't initially seem to be a good choice. But when read in context with the verses they end, become very good choices - a sign of a good poetic mind. The only debit, in my opinion, is that lines that are over 10 syllables long, (yours are 13-16) tend to test a reader to keep a beat going. This can be helped with the use of more commas to divide the long lines into two separate, relatively equal lines.
You employed this a few times...
"What more is there to be desired than life in happiness,
The World is still around you, but your spirit is clear and fresh.
Don't let this blessed moment pass your way, My dear,
for there are wondrous riches in the silence of a prayer!"
Here, the second verse, which is 15 syllables long, is evenly divided into 7 and 8 syllables by the comma. It makes it impossible not to keep the rhythm. Such a use of an additional comma would have kept the beat in all of the other lines, thus...
"What more is there to be desired(,) than life in happiness,
The World is still around you, but your spirit is clear and fresh.
Don't let this blessed moment(,) pass your way, My dear,
for there are wondrous riches(,) in the silence of a prayer!"
These are, of course, just my personal opinion. As the poet, feel free to accept or dismiss anything I have suggested. Thanks for a very good poem.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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A very well thought out and expressed work. Some rhymes, just reading the last words of each line, don't initially seem to be a good choice. But when read in context with the verses they end, become very good choices - a sign of a good poetic mind. The only debit, in my opinion, is that lines that are over 10 syllables long, (yours are 13-16) tend to test a reader to keep a beat going. This can be helped with the use of more commas to divide the long lines into two separate, relatively equal lines.
You employed this a few times...
"What more is there to be desired than life in happiness,
The World is still around you, but your spirit is clear and fresh.
Don't let this blessed moment pass your way, My dear,
for there are wondrous riches in the silence of a prayer!"
Here, the second verse, which is 15 syllables long, is evenly divided into 7 and 8 syllables by the comma. It makes it impossible not to keep the rhythm. Such a use of an additional comma would have kept the beat in all of the other lines, thus...
"What more is there to be desired(,) than life in happiness,
The World is still around you, but your spirit is clear and fresh.
Don't let this blessed moment(,) pass your way, My dear,
for there are wondrous riches(,) in the silence of a prayer!"
These are, of course, just my personal opinion. As the poet, feel free to accept or dismiss anything I have suggested. Thanks for a very good poem.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for such a helpful and combrehencive
Thank you so much for your comprehensive and helpful comments of my poem. I really appreciate all your helpful comments.
Gb.
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You're welcome.
Comment from crzypnter
Hi,
What a lovely and poignant poem you have penned here. In today's society where we are offen tore down, it becomes difficult at best to have that smile. Words we should all strive for. God bless
August
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Hi,
What a lovely and poignant poem you have penned here. In today's society where we are offen tore down, it becomes difficult at best to have that smile. Words we should all strive for. God bless
August
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for these encouraging words. I felt I needed to share this one if it could be of any help. A beautiful smile brightens the day and we never know how far it will go or how long it will be remembered.
Comment from Teri7
I really enjoyed this poem you have penned. You totally said the truth in this. I believe that too. Very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture! Thanks for sharing! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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I really enjoyed this poem you have penned. You totally said the truth in this. I believe that too. Very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture! Thanks for sharing! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much for these encouraging words. I felt I needed to share this one if it could be of any help. A beautiful smile brightens the day and we never know how far it will go or how long it will be remembered.
Comment from Alan K Pease
I feel the same way about writing poetry. It certainly clears the mind of things we seem to accumulate. Iceland, reading National Geographic it sounds like a fascinating place to visit. Me ex-wife was a horse woman involved in show jumping (not too seriously). I am a retired Oceanographer and love the sea around Nova Scotia and British Columbia.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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I feel the same way about writing poetry. It certainly clears the mind of things we seem to accumulate. Iceland, reading National Geographic it sounds like a fascinating place to visit. Me ex-wife was a horse woman involved in show jumping (not too seriously). I am a retired Oceanographer and love the sea around Nova Scotia and British Columbia.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2015
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Thank you Alan for your inspiring and helpful review. I really appreciate it. Yes, Iceland is getting popular more and more all the time. If you happened to visit let me send me a post. Gb
Comment from mlittleton
Very spiritual poem with many Christian references (life a vapor, and others). I like this a lot. It conveys passion, warmth, friendship. I think it could be published. You should seek that. Mark Littleton
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Very spiritual poem with many Christian references (life a vapor, and others). I like this a lot. It conveys passion, warmth, friendship. I think it could be published. You should seek that. Mark Littleton
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem and I'm encouraged by your idea about publishing it. Gb
Comment from P1
i really like your positive attitude and
you are right always try to start the day
with a smile rather than a frown though
sometimes it's difficult. great poem,
great picture and i enjoyed the read
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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i really like your positive attitude and
you are right always try to start the day
with a smile rather than a frown though
sometimes it's difficult. great poem,
great picture and i enjoyed the read
Comment Written 20-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your wonderful review, and I'm happy that it helped you, Staying positive isn't always easy but worth the fight and even though you have to smile through your tears. I'm glad you liked it and it was inspiring to you. Love Gb
