Torment and Choices
A man torn between addiction and family54 total reviews
Comment from ellie6
A sad poem about what might have been. Addiction is a curse, It wrecks homes and tears families apart. Many a brilliant mind is flawed by addiction, leaving a lasting legacy to those in its wake.
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A sad poem about what might have been. Addiction is a curse, It wrecks homes and tears families apart. Many a brilliant mind is flawed by addiction, leaving a lasting legacy to those in its wake.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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He was a brilliant poet, but just couldn't break through addiction to make it work. He wrote a letter to me before he died asking me to carry the torch and do what he wasn't able to. I was pretty young with small children and dismissed as my father being gloomy. A few years ago, I found the letter, and decided to do what he asked. Thanks for reading and reviewing,
Rhonda
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi Davisr. After reading your poem a couple of times over, I didn't quite get the addiction part. You almost met him; your father; an artists heart. How? I guess, I was expecting more in terms of more description.
What I liked most about your poem was that is seems as if you give the reader the power to choose any addiction since any leads to, 'tempest blown' 'poor choices made' and yes, a life torn. Take care and this was an interesting write. Cheers.
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Hi Davisr. After reading your poem a couple of times over, I didn't quite get the addiction part. You almost met him; your father; an artists heart. How? I guess, I was expecting more in terms of more description.
What I liked most about your poem was that is seems as if you give the reader the power to choose any addiction since any leads to, 'tempest blown' 'poor choices made' and yes, a life torn. Take care and this was an interesting write. Cheers.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Benjamin, for your review. If you had lived with a parent who was an alcoholic, you would have understood the key word, almost. I am ordinarily a prose writer, and description is part of what I spend countless words going over. Poetry is for the hidden meaning, and for deeper understanding. My father was a poet and an alcoholic. He caused pain to himself and to the people he loved. He died with my sister and I by his side. He was in the hospital and safe from many harms that could have befallen him considering his life style. Never-the-less, he died from alcoholism after a binge. I love him and I honor his memory, but I still hurt. Does that answer your questions? If not, I could go on for countless, heart wrenching hours. Thanks again for trying to understand. I hope you have never been affected by the long tendrils of addiction.
Rhonda
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Hi Rhonda. Sorry for my late reply and thank you for your descriptive counter reply and for your encouraging hopes. The only addiction I have now is thankfully is writing and reviewing on Fanstory.
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Ah, an addiction I share as well!
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Rhonda, and so sad. What demons can do to someone, whether alcohol, drugs, or what have you. I'm sorry that this touched your life.
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Another fine poem, Rhonda, and so sad. What demons can do to someone, whether alcohol, drugs, or what have you. I'm sorry that this touched your life.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for the 6 stars, my friend! And here I didn't believe you. Yes, addiction can be an ugly monster. My father was my greatest supporter, but he lived in hell, and I didn't see him but now and then because of it. I have to believe he's in a better place, you know what I mean? Thanks again,
Rhonda
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Okay, okay, you caught me in a lie!
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You're very welcome, even though you basically called me a no-account lying sack, well, words to that effect, anyhow. Yeah, I've seen it time after time, someone not living up to their potential, or well.
Comment from forestport12
So powerful and honest with your heart on the line. You deserve to know the word choices are excellent and thought provoking revealing that mix of joy and sadness. Stan. P.S Did you know my wife is from San Antonio area, and I live there for so many years. Cibolo/Marion, TX.....
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So powerful and honest with your heart on the line. You deserve to know the word choices are excellent and thought provoking revealing that mix of joy and sadness. Stan. P.S Did you know my wife is from San Antonio area, and I live there for so many years. Cibolo/Marion, TX.....
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Wow, what a sweet and generous review. That's excellent that your wife is from my birth city. It is a beautiful place! I haven't lived there since I was a child, but it has forever shaped who I am! Are you still a Texan? I am in the Dallas area now, much colder that SA, but still Texas!!!
Thanks again,
Rhonda
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I lived in Arlington. I graduated from Arlington Baptist College. The last 20 years we have spent in my hometown near Syracuse, NY....
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Oh, wow, I graduated from UTA, twice! BS and MEd. Small world!
