Yes I Hear You Knocking
But do I let you in28 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Glad to see you back and I have one 6* left so I can give it to you!
-Good writing, as usual, but sorry for whatever may have gone wrong.
-Each stanza tells the reader another piece of the story.
-Good examples of this, strictly from the poetic sense, are:
* "All my doubts and fears
Find now they're coming true" You don't leave doubt in the reader's mind right from the beginning.
* "Know it would be easy
To fallback in your arms" I think as you go through the poem, you are showing the reader what is going on in your mind.
-The last two stanzas sum things up about the quandary you are probably in.
-I hope you are able to work things out for whatever is the right decision for you.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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-Glad to see you back and I have one 6* left so I can give it to you!
-Good writing, as usual, but sorry for whatever may have gone wrong.
-Each stanza tells the reader another piece of the story.
-Good examples of this, strictly from the poetic sense, are:
* "All my doubts and fears
Find now they're coming true" You don't leave doubt in the reader's mind right from the beginning.
* "Know it would be easy
To fallback in your arms" I think as you go through the poem, you are showing the reader what is going on in your mind.
-The last two stanzas sum things up about the quandary you are probably in.
-I hope you are able to work things out for whatever is the right decision for you.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank you so very much for the shining 6 respa...At the same time also sorry it took so long to respond..I have been away for a while with only smart phone and my big fingers do not work very well on a screen the size of a playing card lol Also this was just a figment of my imagination so I am am lucky I do not have to make that decision lol
TK
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You are very welcome for the 6* and the review. No problem for taking a while for the response; however, you had many of us bamboozled, as we are putting all those wishes, etc. out there, and it was all in your imagination. I guess we have learned:) Hope you are going to be writing more now.
Comment from Sasha
This is brilliantly written and, sadly, one that a few of us can relate to. Personally, I tend to be gun-shy and think I would not let him in. If he left the first time, I doubt I would trust he wouldn't do it again. Marvelous job with this one. I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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This is brilliantly written and, sadly, one that a few of us can relate to. Personally, I tend to be gun-shy and think I would not let him in. If he left the first time, I doubt I would trust he wouldn't do it again. Marvelous job with this one. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much SG I have been away for a while is the reason I am late replying Hope to be able to keep up now that things have settled a bit
TK
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Hi there TK,
Good to read your fine work again. This poem really tells it like it is. Some people do play games in love They find a new love, or at least a new interest and leave without any thought. About how much it will hurt the one they are leaving. Then here they come back, knocking on your door to pick up where they left off. I agree, accept with caution.
Good read, :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Hi there TK,
Good to read your fine work again. This poem really tells it like it is. Some people do play games in love They find a new love, or at least a new interest and leave without any thought. About how much it will hurt the one they are leaving. Then here they come back, knocking on your door to pick up where they left off. I agree, accept with caution.
Good read, :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank you so very much Carolyn...I have been away for a while is the reason it took so long for the reply...Hope I can get back on tract now that things have settled down some
TK
Comment from angelface2
Hey TK. Very nice poem and boy I can relate. You must read my new post, 'As Life Goes On'. Reminds me of him coming knocking at my door. Of course, I let him in, but still said goodbye. He hasn't been back. that has been awhile. Love can be heartbreaking, huh, my friend? Good job. Loved it. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Hey TK. Very nice poem and boy I can relate. You must read my new post, 'As Life Goes On'. Reminds me of him coming knocking at my door. Of course, I let him in, but still said goodbye. He hasn't been back. that has been awhile. Love can be heartbreaking, huh, my friend? Good job. Loved it. Miss Sally
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank yo so very much Miss Sally for the glowing 6 I appreciate it very much...I have been away for a while is the reason it has taken this long for my reply..Now that things are settled down a bit I will be able to get back to writing and reviewing once again
TK
Comment from Jay Squires
Good choice of a title for your excellent poem, tarnished. It hearkens back to the past, and anyone who knows the lyrics would agree your title was well chosen.
Enjoyed reading your poem. Maybe you can leave the security chain attached just to get a peek at him.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Good choice of a title for your excellent poem, tarnished. It hearkens back to the past, and anyone who knows the lyrics would agree your title was well chosen.
Enjoyed reading your poem. Maybe you can leave the security chain attached just to get a peek at him.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank you very much Jay...I like that idea about the security chain..There might even be a poem in that I Keep My Chain On lol
tk
Comment from lancellot
Ah, yes the old lover who returns when things are bad or they're down on their luck. Are they playing us or is it our own weakness that allows it. Nicely made and great theme.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Ah, yes the old lover who returns when things are bad or they're down on their luck. Are they playing us or is it our own weakness that allows it. Nicely made and great theme.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thank you very much Lancellot...I have been away for a while is the reason I am late replying Sorry hope to be back to normal again now..
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Seriously doubt if the person knocking is worth letting in a second time. Probably found grass not greener on the other side of the hill as they supposed it would be. Would not let them in either. Just asking for more heartache if you do.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Seriously doubt if the person knocking is worth letting in a second time. Probably found grass not greener on the other side of the hill as they supposed it would be. Would not let them in either. Just asking for more heartache if you do.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thanks much Brett I have been away for a while and unable to read review or reply except on my smart phone..Being it is smarter than I found it rather difficult to navigate to where I wanted to go. lol
tk
Comment from kiwijenny
Yikes yikes yikes ...don't open that door
What do they say..you know the famous they...
Once bitten twice shy
No don't pgod bless
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Yikes yikes yikes ...don't open that door
What do they say..you know the famous they...
Once bitten twice shy
No don't pgod bless
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2015
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Thanks much Kiwi You are correct once bitten their fault twice bitten your fault ...I have been away for a while is the reason I am so Late in replying so please forgive..
TK
