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Comment from Glasstruth
What a wonderful way to remember your wife's mother. A poem says as much as a picture, or maybe even more. Superb enjambment. Reads real smoothly. Wonderfully written. Les
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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What a wonderful way to remember your wife's mother. A poem says as much as a picture, or maybe even more. Superb enjambment. Reads real smoothly. Wonderfully written. Les
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Thank you Les, for this wonderful review.
Comment from I am Cat
Wow, it's always amazing to me how there can be an argument against where the person who is already dead and already stated what they wanted done with their ashes/body/whatever.... wanted... and then, someone, inevitably wants to argue AFTER they are gone. Really? Why?
What does it matter to them?
It's a beautiful poem, Tom, and a beautiful plaque and collage that you made... It's obvious that you cared deeply for your mother in law... I'm sure that brings peace to your wife's heart. :)
these verses, especially were heart touching...
For here it was she often went,
A place she was at peace, content,
To walk a daily path around.
It's here where she was often found --
A certain clue to what it meant
To her life.
(this is just lovely... to know where she wanted to be... a place where you had gone before...)
So here is where she asked to be.
She stated this with certainty
To me, her first and oldest child.
So I am truly reconciled
To honor this, the last decree
Of her life.
(lovely... just beautiful ... )
I stand here on this favored shore
With ashes strewn forevermore.
Forever remembered
Forever missed.
(I think this is really a moving testament to a woman truly loved)
Well done...
Cat
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Wow, it's always amazing to me how there can be an argument against where the person who is already dead and already stated what they wanted done with their ashes/body/whatever.... wanted... and then, someone, inevitably wants to argue AFTER they are gone. Really? Why?
What does it matter to them?
It's a beautiful poem, Tom, and a beautiful plaque and collage that you made... It's obvious that you cared deeply for your mother in law... I'm sure that brings peace to your wife's heart. :)
these verses, especially were heart touching...
For here it was she often went,
A place she was at peace, content,
To walk a daily path around.
It's here where she was often found --
A certain clue to what it meant
To her life.
(this is just lovely... to know where she wanted to be... a place where you had gone before...)
So here is where she asked to be.
She stated this with certainty
To me, her first and oldest child.
So I am truly reconciled
To honor this, the last decree
Of her life.
(lovely... just beautiful ... )
I stand here on this favored shore
With ashes strewn forevermore.
Forever remembered
Forever missed.
(I think this is really a moving testament to a woman truly loved)
Well done...
Cat
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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Thank you Cat. You words are touching.
Comment from ravenblack
I really like your quintains - never seen them used much before. They really fit as rhythmically they seem to skip like a free spirit, each refrain an anchor ( to her life/of her life) that preserves solemnity , saying "I was here". Beautiful poem and thank you for sharing the pictures. I am sorry for your loss and happy that you were able to give her the resting place that she truly wanted.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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I really like your quintains - never seen them used much before. They really fit as rhythmically they seem to skip like a free spirit, each refrain an anchor ( to her life/of her life) that preserves solemnity , saying "I was here". Beautiful poem and thank you for sharing the pictures. I am sorry for your loss and happy that you were able to give her the resting place that she truly wanted.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Thank you Ravenblack. Great thoughts and encouragement.
Comment from Pantygynt
I wouildn't want to be part of an argument like that. I happy for you and your wife that she got at least part of the action. I thought the poem a very suitable memorial with the refrain chiming in of the end of each of the quintains - an interesting word this. There seems to be some difference of opinion as to whether it should be quintain or quintrain and the dictionaries aren't interested. Whatever its name it is a very pleasant form
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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I wouildn't want to be part of an argument like that. I happy for you and your wife that she got at least part of the action. I thought the poem a very suitable memorial with the refrain chiming in of the end of each of the quintains - an interesting word this. There seems to be some difference of opinion as to whether it should be quintain or quintrain and the dictionaries aren't interested. Whatever its name it is a very pleasant form
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. It should be quintrain, similar to quatrain. Probably a typo on my part. I check.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
The wonderful thing about ashes is that they can be divided and spread in numerous places, keeping most family members happy. I'm sure your mother-in-law would be delighted with this wonderful poem in her memory.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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The wonderful thing about ashes is that they can be divided and spread in numerous places, keeping most family members happy. I'm sure your mother-in-law would be delighted with this wonderful poem in her memory.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Thank you. Yes. I hope that she would be pleased.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That's very sweet Tom. Rest in peace Elizabeth. I would like for my ashes to be in the Colorado or Lake Meade. I guess I should tell my kids that. LOL The stone Plaque was an excellent idea. :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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That's very sweet Tom. Rest in peace Elizabeth. I would like for my ashes to be in the Colorado or Lake Meade. I guess I should tell my kids that. LOL The stone Plaque was an excellent idea. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you Nancy. Yes, you definitely should.
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, my sincere condolences on your loss.
This is the most moving poems I've read in a long time. I'm not sure why it touched me as deeply as it did, but I suspect it is because hidden with the beautiful language, the bit of family dynamic, the gorgeous rhyme and meter, is devotion and love so strong it can't be missed, even by a stranger, even if it isn't declared aloud...
Simply beautiful.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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First, my sincere condolences on your loss.
This is the most moving poems I've read in a long time. I'm not sure why it touched me as deeply as it did, but I suspect it is because hidden with the beautiful language, the bit of family dynamic, the gorgeous rhyme and meter, is devotion and love so strong it can't be missed, even by a stranger, even if it isn't declared aloud...
Simply beautiful.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you so very much dawn. That was a very touching review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Joan E.
Your collage is quite artful and I am glad some of your mother-in-law's ashes were scattered where she desired. My mother was also born in 1913 but died in 1994 and never expressed a preference about her ashes, which sit in an urn at my niece's home. Your rhymes and echo of the words on the stone plaque are very effective. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Your collage is quite artful and I am glad some of your mother-in-law's ashes were scattered where she desired. My mother was also born in 1913 but died in 1994 and never expressed a preference about her ashes, which sit in an urn at my niece's home. Your rhymes and echo of the words on the stone plaque are very effective. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you Joan. I really appreciate your comments.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A very well done memorial poem for a departed soul. Nice that you honoured her last wish, I think that was the greatest honour you could give to her. I love the enchanting words and phrases employed to achieve the poem.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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A very well done memorial poem for a departed soul. Nice that you honoured her last wish, I think that was the greatest honour you could give to her. I love the enchanting words and phrases employed to achieve the poem.
ola thomas
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you Ola, how nice of you to say.
Comment from robina1978
An excellent collage by you, complements your poem perfectly. I am sorry the family of your mother-in-law quarrelled about where her ashes should be spread. Good that you did what the deceased wishes were. My condolences on your loss.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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An excellent collage by you, complements your poem perfectly. I am sorry the family of your mother-in-law quarrelled about where her ashes should be spread. Good that you did what the deceased wishes were. My condolences on your loss.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much Ine, for your kind words and thoughts.
