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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Though I Walk"poems inspired by Psalm 23
19 total reviews
Comment from Taffspride
Every time I feel that I am alone, that no-one cares, I take a few minutes and pray.
Your lovely refrain says it all. He is always there for us. did He not say "Ask and you shall receive."
Thank you for sharing these thought provoking words.
Iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Every time I feel that I am alone, that no-one cares, I take a few minutes and pray.
Your lovely refrain says it all. He is always there for us. did He not say "Ask and you shall receive."
Thank you for sharing these thought provoking words.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review and your insights on the topic. You are so right that prayer will bring the answers and the comfort needed. He is always there. God bless. Debi
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Debi,
I like the format of taking two quatrains, spacing the first and last line as a separate and repeating line...it read well and made a good vehicle to deliver your excellent message, which is a wonderful expression from your soul.
I'll have to check out the site...thanks!
Hope all is well,
Bill
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Hi Debi,
I like the format of taking two quatrains, spacing the first and last line as a separate and repeating line...it read well and made a good vehicle to deliver your excellent message, which is a wonderful expression from your soul.
I'll have to check out the site...thanks!
Hope all is well,
Bill
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Hi Bill. Thank you for the comments about the poetry form and how it works with the message. I appreciate the kind comments about the message, too. Debi
Comment from dmt1967
This poem reminded me of two songs. The first was, 'You'll never walk alone.' And 'footprints in the sand.' The poem was very well written and I liked the picture a lot. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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This poem reminded me of two songs. The first was, 'You'll never walk alone.' And 'footprints in the sand.' The poem was very well written and I liked the picture a lot. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review and the kind comments about the writing. I love both of those songs. I am complimented that you would think of them after reading my verse.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done my friend. You followed the rules of the poem.I think the message is very uplifting and spiritual.
Thanks for explaining the format. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Well done my friend. You followed the rules of the poem.I think the message is very uplifting and spiritual.
Thanks for explaining the format. Nancy
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review, Nancy. I am pleased you enjoyed it, and I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from jmdg1954
An Octain Refrain is an eight line poem composed of the refrain line, two tercets (three line stanzas), and the refrain line with a rhyme scheme... This confused the heck out of me. But your poem certainly did not.
But without a doubt, if I reach out
in my time of need, the manna's there.
Oh, rejoice my soul, the feast is grand:
Nicely done. John
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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An Octain Refrain is an eight line poem composed of the refrain line, two tercets (three line stanzas), and the refrain line with a rhyme scheme... This confused the heck out of me. But your poem certainly did not.
But without a doubt, if I reach out
in my time of need, the manna's there.
Oh, rejoice my soul, the feast is grand:
Nicely done. John
Comment Written 24-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 26-Aug-2015
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Hi John,
I am happy you enjoyed the poem. Hey, you can always ignore the notes about form, etc. Those are for the people that say line two should rhyme with line three when they don't know which form was used. If you just like it because you like it, that's even better in my book.
Debi
Comment from krys123
Debi;
-written so beautifully and so rhythmically that the reading is very clear, fluid and easy. A very strong inspirational and enlightening piece of poetry that is spiritually
full of self improving faith and hope.
-Prayer; a strong proponent to bring one faith and hope and closeness to our Lord which is the topic of the essence of this poem in a well-written one at that.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Debi;
-written so beautifully and so rhythmically that the reading is very clear, fluid and easy. A very strong inspirational and enlightening piece of poetry that is spiritually
full of self improving faith and hope.
-Prayer; a strong proponent to bring one faith and hope and closeness to our Lord which is the topic of the essence of this poem in a well-written one at that.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review Alex. I am delighted you felt it was inspiration and easy to read. I appreciate the detailed review and you mentioning the them of prayer and faith, which is what I was intending. Thank you so much. Debi
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You are so very welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from MsPetra
You said a lot with these words.
You held true to form. Well done on that regard.
What you said in these words is the truth.
At times just getting through the day can be like trudging through the desert on a hot day. When we truly need it God supplies what we need to get us through.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to future offerings from you.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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You said a lot with these words.
You held true to form. Well done on that regard.
What you said in these words is the truth.
At times just getting through the day can be like trudging through the desert on a hot day. When we truly need it God supplies what we need to get us through.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to future offerings from you.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review and generous stars. I appreciate the analysis of both the form and the theme. Thank you for your insights and encouragement.
Comment from LeslieP5
I've gotta say that these form and meter are new to me and I am not familiar with all the technical terms so I am not a good one to comment on the usage of those. But I can pick up the feel of the poem and the internal repetition in a line and the matching final line, etc. As for the theme of the poem it is well stated ?though I walk alone, God hears my prayer."
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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I've gotta say that these form and meter are new to me and I am not familiar with all the technical terms so I am not a good one to comment on the usage of those. But I can pick up the feel of the poem and the internal repetition in a line and the matching final line, etc. As for the theme of the poem it is well stated ?though I walk alone, God hears my prayer."
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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I appreciate the insights on the theme and am delighted that you liked it. Forget the technique, just enjoy. It's kind of like getting all the technical terms of a dance. If you don't know them, it doesn't really matter. You can still enjoy watching.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi W.J. Debi, Yeah, explanation is great, but the poem is much better. It reminds us of the biblical lesson of Mana from Heaven. Respectfully, I just hope you'll never find yourself trekking through this desert. Cheers.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Hi W.J. Debi, Yeah, explanation is great, but the poem is much better. It reminds us of the biblical lesson of Mana from Heaven. Respectfully, I just hope you'll never find yourself trekking through this desert. Cheers.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Hi Benjamin Valencia,
I am happy you liked the poem. The explanation is just for those who like to delve into the technique and certainly not for everyone. You can skip that part. I did have the Israelites and the Manna from Heaven in mind when I was writing this. I am so glad that you got it. You are the first to mention it so am am delighted. Thank you!
Debi
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi ...
I know absolutely nothing about poetry beyond "Jack and Jill went Up The Hill:. I'm almost exclusively a novelist. Poetry is as foreign to me as the truth is to politicians. But I know good writing when I see it.
Though one may walk alone, if he is a person of faith is never totally alone ... only on body, but not in spirit. You did a marvelous job of pointing this out in your poem. Regardless of technical merit, about which I know nothing, this wa s a smooth, easy and uplifting read. Thank you!
wishing you the very best ...
Alan
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Hi ...
I know absolutely nothing about poetry beyond "Jack and Jill went Up The Hill:. I'm almost exclusively a novelist. Poetry is as foreign to me as the truth is to politicians. But I know good writing when I see it.
Though one may walk alone, if he is a person of faith is never totally alone ... only on body, but not in spirit. You did a marvelous job of pointing this out in your poem. Regardless of technical merit, about which I know nothing, this wa s a smooth, easy and uplifting read. Thank you!
wishing you the very best ...
Alan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful insights on the theme. You got exactly where I was going.
If find it hard to believe that with name of "ProSongwriter" that you know nothing of music. Songwriters are the poets of the modern day. If you write lyrics, you know more than you think. Though you may not know the technical terms, I bet you are a natural.
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You are welcome. However, poetry, per se, and song lyrics most often are not congruent. There are rhymes, of course, but the formatting to get to those rhymes is so different. Less than 20% of poems written translate to decent song lyrics.
Again, you are most welcome. It was my pleasure to read!
