Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Twins"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Twins, may have a purpose and it may have a message, but neither is clear to me and I need a bit of help understanding what I'm reading.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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This poem, Twins, may have a purpose and it may have a message, but neither is clear to me and I need a bit of help understanding what I'm reading.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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I feel you, finding myself captured in such uncertainties of not knowing, surprising the generous rate for a baffling conveyance. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Earl Corp
You have written a good free verse poem. I think you have mislabeled this piece. According to the label it says this is a War and history poem. You also say it's a chapter from a book. And your notes make it seem to be a science essay.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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You have written a good free verse poem. I think you have mislabeled this piece. According to the label it says this is a War and history poem. You also say it's a chapter from a book. And your notes make it seem to be a science essay.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Good points made, meriting the tragic as history, given view of an endeavor yielding endurance. Glad aspects of the write were pleasing, and thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, now that is certainly an interesting way of looking at all of the shopping that goes on especially at this time of year...the cash-register sounds, the shoppers of fine jewelry and else, the tall ceilings and sprawling spaces...and the two viewpoints through which it is all viewed. And that's where I'm torn...those 'twins' could be the towers themselves, but it could also be 'twins' alike in appearance only because one is a 'have' and one a 'have-not' in the societal hierarchy....either way gives the write a different feel. Enjoyed the thought-provocation in trying to figure it out! :) :)
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Well, now that is certainly an interesting way of looking at all of the shopping that goes on especially at this time of year...the cash-register sounds, the shoppers of fine jewelry and else, the tall ceilings and sprawling spaces...and the two viewpoints through which it is all viewed. And that's where I'm torn...those 'twins' could be the towers themselves, but it could also be 'twins' alike in appearance only because one is a 'have' and one a 'have-not' in the societal hierarchy....either way gives the write a different feel. Enjoyed the thought-provocation in trying to figure it out! :) :)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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I take different perspectives when I read too, entering various views open the full statement conveyed by writer in my opinion. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Lisa Heath
This is a good poem about moms being active with their children in the USA.
In times of war and peace moms have to take care where they children and why as well, though. Especially with some of the evil in today's world! Lisa Heath
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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This is a good poem about moms being active with their children in the USA.
In times of war and peace moms have to take care where they children and why as well, though. Especially with some of the evil in today's world! Lisa Heath
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Well you certainly hold a separate view of this particular write, finding your responss very compelling seen through your insights. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from meeshu
I am crazy about your stuff TPAC. first, the reader is forced to read slowly and really digest. I catch myself reading the poetry to fast, it's not fair to the artist. and secondly, your use of nonsense (the very good kind) interspersed in your message is so unique. outstanding, a 6six6 in my book................meeshu
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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I am crazy about your stuff TPAC. first, the reader is forced to read slowly and really digest. I catch myself reading the poetry to fast, it's not fair to the artist. and secondly, your use of nonsense (the very good kind) interspersed in your message is so unique. outstanding, a 6six6 in my book................meeshu
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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I'm an idiots it help a lot. Glad again aspects in this revision was found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. I find the picture you have chosen to go with your poem interesting. I understand the title is twins and there are two identical entities in the picture. Are they any other things that connect this illustration to the poem for you? I am curious about the thought process.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Thank you for sharing. I find the picture you have chosen to go with your poem interesting. I understand the title is twins and there are two identical entities in the picture. Are they any other things that connect this illustration to the poem for you? I am curious about the thought process.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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No simply a picture to present for this write picked, detailing two similar structures, plus living home I could view twin towars of 9-11. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Anntonette
I love how each stanza balances out one another by having the same amount of lines. The stanza and font are well organized!
The first stanza made me wanting to keep reading on.
Well done!
- Anntonette J
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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I love how each stanza balances out one another by having the same amount of lines. The stanza and font are well organized!
The first stanza made me wanting to keep reading on.
Well done!
- Anntonette J
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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It' been a long time coming to hear those thoughts, feeling pits still lurk in my writes. Glad aspects of this work were appealing to your interests. Thanking you.
Comment from way2gokevs
Great words, with thought for those who read, for the message is clear for all to see, that the greed of man will slowly devour the life we lead.
Fan art scary but compliments the words you have written.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers.
Kev
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Great words, with thought for those who read, for the message is clear for all to see, that the greed of man will slowly devour the life we lead.
Fan art scary but compliments the words you have written.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers.
Kev
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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I agree about the art, trying to work on my grammar flaws top priority. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Zue65
Just what do you mean by the statement in your author's notes that in America, they eat their young. Is this related to the Satanic Ritual Sacrifice where members eat babies and sacrifice them to the devil.The picture looks like Moloch, the god of the Illuminati.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Just what do you mean by the statement in your author's notes that in America, they eat their young. Is this related to the Satanic Ritual Sacrifice where members eat babies and sacrifice them to the devil.The picture looks like Moloch, the god of the Illuminati.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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I wish good old days, reference was from an album should check it out different from the 70'. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from beizanten
A well written beginning. You have painted a fine background. A good second stanza. A better written third stanza. Every stanza is well written. You have done great, keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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A well written beginning. You have painted a fine background. A good second stanza. A better written third stanza. Every stanza is well written. You have done great, keep up the great work!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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My fight with line structuring is my greatest affliction in my writes, perhaps other unknown flaws as well. Glad some aspects contained in this work was found appealing to interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
