Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 281 "When Your Love Is"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
I know you like a challenge, but you've outdone yourself with a sonnet in the acrostic form plus mono-verse rhymes! Fortunately, I have a six to award you labors and your sentiments about "loving couples". Thanks for sharing what I assume is a family photo. Big hugs and happy weekend when it arrives- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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I know you like a challenge, but you've outdone yourself with a sonnet in the acrostic form plus mono-verse rhymes! Fortunately, I have a six to award you labors and your sentiments about "loving couples". Thanks for sharing what I assume is a family photo. Big hugs and happy weekend when it arrives- Joan
Comment Written 21-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2015
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Thank you Joan. Yes, it is a family photo. The young coupke is my daughter Aisha with hubby Jeremy.the older coupke is my brother, Richard and wife, Corrine with their grandson, Landon. Thanks for this awesome review and those wonderful stars.
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I guessed that might be your brother Richard--there is a family resemblance. Thanks for the scorecard. Smiles- Joan
Comment from I am Cat
You must go through one stage to get to the other
that's a fact.
but for the older couple to understand the
gift of the union, they must has once been that older
couple as well. :)
So they take each other to make it all a perfect
circle.
well said, Tom...
Cat
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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You must go through one stage to get to the other
that's a fact.
but for the older couple to understand the
gift of the union, they must has once been that older
couple as well. :)
So they take each other to make it all a perfect
circle.
well said, Tom...
Cat
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you Cat. Yes, spoken like one who knows.
Comment from robina1978
Nice photo, is that you and your family? This a truly excellent entry for the Acrostic contest. You must be so terribly good to be able to write it as a Sonnet. Best wishes for the contest. You might have a winner.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Nice photo, is that you and your family? This a truly excellent entry for the Acrostic contest. You must be so terribly good to be able to write it as a Sonnet. Best wishes for the contest. You might have a winner.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you Ine. Yes, the young couple is my daughter, Aisha, and her husband, Jeremy. The other couple is my brother, Richard, and his wife, Corrine, with their grandson, Logan.
Comment from rod007
A very real and true message of the endurance of love and the fact that it lasts till death and perhaps beyond. But it must also be said that more often than not it does not run through the course of time but breaks and tears away. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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A very real and true message of the endurance of love and the fact that it lasts till death and perhaps beyond. But it must also be said that more often than not it does not run through the course of time but breaks and tears away. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Thank you rod. Yes, it is sad that sometimes it does break.
Comment from Pantygynt
Am I right this is trochaic tetrameter? I can't see what else it could be called except that the last foot on each line is missing its final unstressed syllable.
it is an interesting meter and one that seems to fit the subject and the isea of an acrostic. it seemsa to me that any acrostic poem needs to start on an emphasized syllable if only to emphasize the importance of that syllable with its acrostic start.
It feels strange, probably becausit isan't often found in sonnet form, but it is most effective. There is even a saomewhat subtle volta at line 9.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Am I right this is trochaic tetrameter? I can't see what else it could be called except that the last foot on each line is missing its final unstressed syllable.
it is an interesting meter and one that seems to fit the subject and the isea of an acrostic. it seemsa to me that any acrostic poem needs to start on an emphasized syllable if only to emphasize the importance of that syllable with its acrostic start.
It feels strange, probably becausit isan't often found in sonnet form, but it is most effective. There is even a saomewhat subtle volta at line 9.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. I'd call it more of a mixed meter as the odd count allows for flexibility.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Interesting, playful and wisdom all in one poem. The form makes it interesting and playful. The content is speaking of wisdom and experience about life and love.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Interesting, playful and wisdom all in one poem. The form makes it interesting and playful. The content is speaking of wisdom and experience about life and love.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Sandra. You made you smile.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great love poem in acrostic form. Good mono rhyme in each stanza as well. I wish you all the best in the contest.
~~Teresa~~
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Great love poem in acrostic form. Good mono rhyme in each stanza as well. I wish you all the best in the contest.
~~Teresa~~
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you Teresa. I appreciate that.
