Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "There's A Bar"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
27 total reviews
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello Brett, I share in this somber tale of a dead love six feet under. The bar is a good setting to start the tale and reflect on the tales told. Good flow, short and sweet. I'm wondering about this line, "and I could tell her about you." I didn't get this. Cheers.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Hello Brett, I share in this somber tale of a dead love six feet under. The bar is a good setting to start the tale and reflect on the tales told. Good flow, short and sweet. I'm wondering about this line, "and I could tell her about you." I didn't get this. Cheers.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2015
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Is it possible he has two women in his life? Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Chrissy710
Brett this is a great poem flows well and although you call it free verse it had a nice meter and rhyme. Well constructed I like the layout with short lines also and the image suits. Quite a country and western feel to this one. Nice Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Brett this is a great poem flows well and although you call it free verse it had a nice meter and rhyme. Well constructed I like the layout with short lines also and the image suits. Quite a country and western feel to this one. Nice Cheers Christine
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thanks. This is one of my Country song lyrics. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from salvatour
very true love is a very delicate and strong feeling which at times can lead someone astray especially after a break up good work
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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very true love is a very delicate and strong feeling which at times can lead someone astray especially after a break up good work
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thanks. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from seaglass
If only bars could talk and thankfully the bar tender doesn't...This is nicely rhymed and the short lines sets the mood of rambling thoughts of a man pining for love lost.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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If only bars could talk and thankfully the bar tender doesn't...This is nicely rhymed and the short lines sets the mood of rambling thoughts of a man pining for love lost.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Brett...
_ If them walls in the bar could talk. Whooeee!
_ I owned a bar in the 70s. Interesting, and many times heard TMI. (*<*)
_ Loving and losing, unfortunately happens far too often.
_ You told the story well, showing through your words his distress.
_ Well done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Hi, Brett...
_ If them walls in the bar could talk. Whooeee!
_ I owned a bar in the 70s. Interesting, and many times heard TMI. (*<*)
_ Loving and losing, unfortunately happens far too often.
_ You told the story well, showing through your words his distress.
_ Well done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Nosha17
I guess, many a lonesome person has hung onto the bar for comfort when someone has deserted them for another. Well chosen words, rhyme and imagery. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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I guess, many a lonesome person has hung onto the bar for comfort when someone has deserted them for another. Well chosen words, rhyme and imagery. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I don't think drinking away your pain works but I do know writing about it does. It's like a cold Iced tea drink on a summer day. LOL It took a while but it worked for me. Hang in there.
:<) Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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I don't think drinking away your pain works but I do know writing about it does. It's like a cold Iced tea drink on a summer day. LOL It took a while but it worked for me. Hang in there.
:<) Nancy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Dutchie
Such a melancholic poem, Brett. I'm sure many of us have been there.
Nice flow and some unforced rhyme. Love the repeating of Nothing fancy in the first and last couplet. It works very well!!! Fia
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Such a melancholic poem, Brett. I'm sure many of us have been there.
Nice flow and some unforced rhyme. Love the repeating of Nothing fancy in the first and last couplet. It works very well!!! Fia
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Drinking away your pain
There's A Bar
by Brett Matthew West
I like your poem about a love affair gone wrong and a broken heart. Who is the person mentioned in the end? ....And I could tell Her about you..... Was he married?
Good job and for your question, yes my heart was broken a couple of times.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Drinking away your pain
There's A Bar
by Brett Matthew West
I like your poem about a love affair gone wrong and a broken heart. Who is the person mentioned in the end? ....And I could tell Her about you..... Was he married?
Good job and for your question, yes my heart was broken a couple of times.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem holds that grain of truth that anyone who has gone through a depressing breakup can attest to. The bar time slowly sneaks in to be more than a past time. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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This poem holds that grain of truth that anyone who has gone through a depressing breakup can attest to. The bar time slowly sneaks in to be more than a past time. Nice poem.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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So true. Glad you enjoyed this one.
