Act of Endurance
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Comment from Ricky1024
"Mr Sun" was was well written with great theme and imagery.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Ricky.....
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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"Mr Sun" was was well written with great theme and imagery.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Ricky.....
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Now grammar stands my greatest obstacles, searching constant for flaws in my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching words.
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Me too.
TPAC.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Cheryl9359
I really like your poem. I like how you describe the sun and all the ways it touches you. A really nice poem, and nice picture too.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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I really like your poem. I like how you describe the sun and all the ways it touches you. A really nice poem, and nice picture too.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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I thank you for your touching thoughts, inspiring your words to me, pleasing in their conveyance about this work intents. Glad it was interesting to you. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from Joyce Long
What a wonderful tribute to Mr. Sun. I really enjoy the day more when the sun is out and moving across the sky. Winter is not my time of year. But, I live where we have the four seasons, so miss the sun many days. Sometimes I'm not ready for Mr. Sun to creep into my room, but I'm pleased that he does. Your writing is very well done.
Joyce 01-25-16
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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What a wonderful tribute to Mr. Sun. I really enjoy the day more when the sun is out and moving across the sky. Winter is not my time of year. But, I live where we have the four seasons, so miss the sun many days. Sometimes I'm not ready for Mr. Sun to creep into my room, but I'm pleased that he does. Your writing is very well done.
Joyce 01-25-16
Comment Written 25-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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Thanking you for your tender statements about this write. Glad some aspects of this write was found appealing to you. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from petalangela
I am most definitely not an expert or even slightly any good with grammar . Hiwever, I do think there are mixed tenses in this. I have not marked it down because basically I liked the piece very much
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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I am most definitely not an expert or even slightly any good with grammar . Hiwever, I do think there are mixed tenses in this. I have not marked it down because basically I liked the piece very much
Comment Written 15-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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You are probably right about the tenses, I will revise but appreciate even with such snags you found this work interesting. Thanks for over generous rate and captivating comments of honesty.
Comment from Nosha17
The sun has such an important role to play in our lives, whether it be in our physical or mental wellbeing. You have captured the essence of the sun's effect in our lives well. Good use of rhyming and imagery. Two things, line 1, radiates sun around us. Line 11, the rest is in the past, so to keep consistency, leapt. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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The sun has such an important role to play in our lives, whether it be in our physical or mental wellbeing. You have captured the essence of the sun's effect in our lives well. Good use of rhyming and imagery. Two things, line 1, radiates sun around us. Line 11, the rest is in the past, so to keep consistency, leapt. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 15-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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Truly inspiring words and ignored slapping me at least. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Serendipity!
This is great. I like how you put such imagination into such a common thing as the sun shining. Mr. Sun was perSUNafied in such a way that he seemed like a friendly, inquisitive puppy seeking out his pal, but so much more capable of sharing glory..
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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This is great. I like how you put such imagination into such a common thing as the sun shining. Mr. Sun was perSUNafied in such a way that he seemed like a friendly, inquisitive puppy seeking out his pal, but so much more capable of sharing glory..
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2015
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My buddy holds such love for me. I have seen many big men fall under the sun. Thanking you for generous rate and thoughts.
