To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Legacy"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
Loved this piece, man. Simply loved it.
The three distinct phrases show the changes on life as age and time intrude.
The last of which is incredibly poignant.
Great entry and deserves to do very well.
G
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Hi Mikey,
Loved this piece, man. Simply loved it.
The three distinct phrases show the changes on life as age and time intrude.
The last of which is incredibly poignant.
Great entry and deserves to do very well.
G
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Sorry to be so behind with replies. Delighted with your response to this. I hope your predictions are correct. Free verse is my style really. The rest of it is all stuff I learned here. :)
Loving all the stars. Thanks a lot. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
I enjoy all of your work, but I think you are at your best with free verse. You are saying exactly what you want to say here and I can relate to it fully. I love your natural use of poetic devices here. It makes your piece flow beautifully. Exceptional. This should contend. Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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I enjoy all of your work, but I think you are at your best with free verse. You are saying exactly what you want to say here and I can relate to it fully. I love your natural use of poetic devices here. It makes your piece flow beautifully. Exceptional. This should contend. Good luck.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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I'll cross my fingers. Delighted you enjoyed and with all the stars. Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Always enjoy reading your writings although I do not review many of them. It is obvious that you are a very skilled writer, and I do learn new approaches from writers like you. This well written poem depicts someone looking back over their life and wondering what kind of impression they made on others. It also shows them wondering if their life mattered. I do enjoy Free Style as it does not confine the poetry so much.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Always enjoy reading your writings although I do not review many of them. It is obvious that you are a very skilled writer, and I do learn new approaches from writers like you. This well written poem depicts someone looking back over their life and wondering what kind of impression they made on others. It also shows them wondering if their life mattered. I do enjoy Free Style as it does not confine the poetry so much.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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That's great to hear. You're on the money with your insights here. I'm a free verse poet at heart. I must admit though that learning all the more formal stuff has improved my freestyle since I've been here. Glad you liked this. Thanks, mikey
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent, Mikey. You have climbed the ladder to middle age, still pondering what life is all about and what is left to come. Aren't we all a bit like that? A wonderful contest entry, good luck! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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That was excellent, Mikey. You have climbed the ladder to middle age, still pondering what life is all about and what is left to come. Aren't we all a bit like that? A wonderful contest entry, good luck! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2015
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Hi. I'm so pleased you liked this one. Free verse is my natural style really, so I snuck by and submitted this. I think you're right, it is a universal thing. Middle age, huh? I'll take it! mikey
Comment from Eric1
Hi Micheal, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, A truly wonderful message in so few words, Time waits for no man, I loved the way you took us on a journey of a lifetime, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
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Hi Micheal, this is a really good entry for this particular competition, A truly wonderful message in so few words, Time waits for no man, I loved the way you took us on a journey of a lifetime, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
Comment from Tootsie55
G'day buddy. We have not talked in a long, long time. Strong poem this. Really cuts to the bone with the emotions expressed. Then the fact he is still a youngster. Was this something you wrote a long time ago? Well done. We are putting up Louise's very last chapter of our trip stories in a day or so. I hope you will find the time to have a look at Tootsie55. After the last chapter I will set it up for a Complete book review then we will close her account.
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G'day buddy. We have not talked in a long, long time. Strong poem this. Really cuts to the bone with the emotions expressed. Then the fact he is still a youngster. Was this something you wrote a long time ago? Well done. We are putting up Louise's very last chapter of our trip stories in a day or so. I hope you will find the time to have a look at Tootsie55. After the last chapter I will set it up for a Complete book review then we will close her account.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
Comment from country ranch writer
he older we get we find time has passed us by at times it is like if we blink we are another year older and deeper in debt with no end in sight
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he older we get we find time has passed us by at times it is like if we blink we are another year older and deeper in debt with no end in sight
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
-time is but an elusive butterfly and the way you described and expressed it in your writing was very distinct and clear. It's as if though an epitaph was written by your subconscious: "I wash no more for a hurry eludes me these days it occurs but bones demure with false disdain I applaud a beating heart and point out breathing with optimism my smile is loose and quickly closes behind wise and thoughtful lips...".
-Good use of enjambment in your writing which is the running on of a thought and concept from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Superb imagery that is substantially expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
-I enjoyed your writing of the Legacy and wish you good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Mikey;
-time is but an elusive butterfly and the way you described and expressed it in your writing was very distinct and clear. It's as if though an epitaph was written by your subconscious: "I wash no more for a hurry eludes me these days it occurs but bones demure with false disdain I applaud a beating heart and point out breathing with optimism my smile is loose and quickly closes behind wise and thoughtful lips...".
-Good use of enjambment in your writing which is the running on of a thought and concept from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Superb imagery that is substantially expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
-I enjoyed your writing of the Legacy and wish you good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: your life must have been fast paced roller coaster when you were young. Now, you are learning to smile and relax on your swing in the garden. Maybe, pick up a plant and help it grow! Spend time enjoying life go by with some one special. Appreciate your talents and gifts as you are talented, Michael. Thanks for not being in every contest! I promise I will read more of your Sound and Vision stories soon. I've been on family time, dear Michael. I think you are appreciating time too. I like your butterflies flying and dreams. Graffiti- only read who you are not negative words. Keep positive and take time to swing!
(This is Brooke's favorite poem...The Swing!)
flylikeaneagle
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Michael: your life must have been fast paced roller coaster when you were young. Now, you are learning to smile and relax on your swing in the garden. Maybe, pick up a plant and help it grow! Spend time enjoying life go by with some one special. Appreciate your talents and gifts as you are talented, Michael. Thanks for not being in every contest! I promise I will read more of your Sound and Vision stories soon. I've been on family time, dear Michael. I think you are appreciating time too. I like your butterflies flying and dreams. Graffiti- only read who you are not negative words. Keep positive and take time to swing!
(This is Brooke's favorite poem...The Swing!)
flylikeaneagle
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
