Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your repeats of "she believes in me" for emphasis and "strength" in these lyrics. I liked your taking on the persona of the male in this relationship. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Beautifully written Ine, what man wouldn't want a woman who loved and gave all the freedom needed or wanted and yet still believed in you, this woman would be a rare find indeed! Well done, great descriptive narrative, a theme of the perfect woman. Great language used, I really related to it, in open free style, it rings so well. Well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice week.

reply by royowen on 15-Sep-2015

Most welcome Ine

Comment from amada

Excellent

To write a song is such a talent. Since this is the first time I read one of yours it makes it a "hidden talent." Lots of great lines. My fave "as she knows, this will pass."

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice week.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

wow! I had no idea you also wrote songs! You multi-talented creature you!! You've been holding back on us! (Or at least on me while I've been gone!) hahahahaha!

I can hear this being sung sooo plainly -- weird how that works!

Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice week. I've done it a few times a while ago.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Good

Don't know of very many women who would wait patiently, or acceptingly, at home while their man is getting snookered in a bar then let them come home and make love to them. Nor would they see much of a future with a man like that.

The syllable count of the third line of the 2nd stanza, and the last line of the fifth stanza, are twice the length of the same lines of the rest of the stanzas. This throws the rhythm of the poem way off.

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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice week. It had no syllable counting.

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Robina, this is an excellent write with wonderful lyrics that would make a beautiful song I think, your words are so good with great use of description and imagery my friend.

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 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a nice week.