Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "A Diamond A Day"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from Pantygynt
Another brilliant lyric. You may not have acknowledged it as such but, like the other one I have recently reviewed, this one sings to me. There is one line thathat stands out, partly because of its alliteration and partly because of it incorporating the title and wholely because it contains the metaphor for the entire poem - or lyric. This is it: "Love is a diamond a day, Dear".
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Another brilliant lyric. You may not have acknowledged it as such but, like the other one I have recently reviewed, this one sings to me. There is one line thathat stands out, partly because of its alliteration and partly because of it incorporating the title and wholely because it contains the metaphor for the entire poem - or lyric. This is it: "Love is a diamond a day, Dear".
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
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Comment from giraffmang
Hi Brett,
This has a very lyrical quality to it and this helps the flow endlessly. It is easy to see your musical influences coming through and that is no bad thing.
Nicely penned
GMG
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Hi Brett,
This has a very lyrical quality to it and this helps the flow endlessly. It is easy to see your musical influences coming through and that is no bad thing.
Nicely penned
GMG
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
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This started out as Country lyrics. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from bard owl
This reminds me of an Eagle's song, "Lying Eyes". Unfortunately, some people just can't resist the pull of money. In your poem, it tragically pulls the heartstrings of two lovers. Your poem paints a very sad picture. Good imagery. It flows easily from beginning to end and I do love the poetry.
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This reminds me of an Eagle's song, "Lying Eyes". Unfortunately, some people just can't resist the pull of money. In your poem, it tragically pulls the heartstrings of two lovers. Your poem paints a very sad picture. Good imagery. It flows easily from beginning to end and I do love the poetry.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Brett,
~A Diamond A Day~ would I choose love or money? I would always choose love. I like your poem, I like the way it verses repeat. Is it a song? Well done!
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Hello Brett,
~A Diamond A Day~ would I choose love or money? I would always choose love. I like your poem, I like the way it verses repeat. Is it a song? Well done!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
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This started out as Country lyrics. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from EricBrady
The love of money is the root to all evil. So, it makes sense to choose love. This is a beautiful work, unfortunately money was chosen over a true love. Great look at a provocative choice that we sometimes have to make.
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The love of money is the root to all evil. So, it makes sense to choose love. This is a beautiful work, unfortunately money was chosen over a true love. Great look at a provocative choice that we sometimes have to make.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
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Comment from Bill Schott
This is an interesting poem about that 'Lyin' Eyes' situation that the Eagles sang about. I've always advised people to marry a rich octogenarian with a bad cough.
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This is an interesting poem about that 'Lyin' Eyes' situation that the Eagles sang about. I've always advised people to marry a rich octogenarian with a bad cough.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
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Money can not buy love. Glad you enjoyed this one. Appreciate your comments and support indeed.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a question of moral and ethics, are you ready to let go of love, the thing that makes the world go around, even though they say it is money, it is truly love but in tighter circles.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
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this is a question of moral and ethics, are you ready to let go of love, the thing that makes the world go around, even though they say it is money, it is truly love but in tighter circles.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
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Comment from judiverse
The voice in this is very effective. It allows the emotion to come through. Your ABCB rhyme works well. It sounds like the woman has chosen money over love. The rich guy's possessions aren't worth as much as the narrator's love. Really great line--"Love is a diamond a day." The narrator feels that the women may still be in love with him, although she's chosen the wealthy guy. Excellent work. It captures the heartache. judi
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The voice in this is very effective. It allows the emotion to come through. Your ABCB rhyme works well. It sounds like the woman has chosen money over love. The rich guy's possessions aren't worth as much as the narrator's love. Really great line--"Love is a diamond a day." The narrator feels that the women may still be in love with him, although she's chosen the wealthy guy. Excellent work. It captures the heartache. judi
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
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Too many times love loses out to money. Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much indeed.
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You're very welcome, Brett. judi
Comment from MelB
Good rhyme and flow to this piece. I'll pick love every time. Sounds like she chose money and spends her nights crying.
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Good rhyme and flow to this piece. I'll pick love every time. Sounds like she chose money and spends her nights crying.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
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That is the way it usually happens for those who chose money over love. Appreciate your comments.
Comment from Muffins
Heartbreaking poem. Each stanza carries a sorrow and a weight that only the truth and love can lightened. The narrator does not judgemental tone. In a way the narrator understands her choice but wonders if she realizes what she has given up in return.
I would like to make one suggestion. The last line in the third stanza feels like it dropped. Instead of:
His money can't buy you my loving
Nor can his silver and gold
You need more than four walls to hold you
When you're alone and the night is so long
replace the last line with: "When you're a lone and the night is cold."
It's falls better on the ear. The beats matches the previous lines in the stanza. Otherwise, a fantastic poem.
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Heartbreaking poem. Each stanza carries a sorrow and a weight that only the truth and love can lightened. The narrator does not judgemental tone. In a way the narrator understands her choice but wonders if she realizes what she has given up in return.
I would like to make one suggestion. The last line in the third stanza feels like it dropped. Instead of:
His money can't buy you my loving
Nor can his silver and gold
You need more than four walls to hold you
When you're alone and the night is so long
replace the last line with: "When you're a lone and the night is cold."
It's falls better on the ear. The beats matches the previous lines in the stanza. Otherwise, a fantastic poem.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support.
