Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "A Diamond A Day"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
Nice poem Brett but the bright green hurts these eyes.
My girlfriend and I had that conversation when we were 16. She said money was more important, I said love. We made our choices and they both worked out just fine. Till death did us part from our husbands. She learned to love him and my hubby always made a good living. Who Knew. LOL Nancy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Nice poem Brett but the bright green hurts these eyes.
My girlfriend and I had that conversation when we were 16. She said money was more important, I said love. We made our choices and they both worked out just fine. Till death did us part from our husbands. She learned to love him and my hubby always made a good living. Who Knew. LOL Nancy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Tough choice, but love should always win out. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Brett...
_ Good poem, and oh so true.
_ So many times the glitter is far more exciting, yet has no substance.
_ Gorgeous picture, by the way.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Hi, Brett...
_ Good poem, and oh so true.
_ So many times the glitter is far more exciting, yet has no substance.
_ Gorgeous picture, by the way.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is a really nice poem that I enjoyed reading. In my opinion the third verse needs work on as all of them rhymed but this one:
His money can't buy you my loving
Nor can his silver and gold
You need more than four walls to hold you
When you're alone and the night is so long
Line three could say something like: You need more than four walls around you.
Line four: But I'm near and you I'd gladly hold.
Most of your lines have 8 or 9 syllables except the 2nd one in the above verse
so you could say: and neither can his silver or gold
Kat
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Hi Brett,
This is a really nice poem that I enjoyed reading. In my opinion the third verse needs work on as all of them rhymed but this one:
His money can't buy you my loving
Nor can his silver and gold
You need more than four walls to hold you
When you're alone and the night is so long
Line three could say something like: You need more than four walls around you.
Line four: But I'm near and you I'd gladly hold.
Most of your lines have 8 or 9 syllables except the 2nd one in the above verse
so you could say: and neither can his silver or gold
Kat
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from Eric1
Well you know what the Beatles said Brett, 'Money can't buy you love', wonderfully penned poem that tells of a foresaken love , taken by the wonder of money.
Great rhyming and rhythm with a nice smooth flow make this one stand out my friend.
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Well you know what the Beatles said Brett, 'Money can't buy you love', wonderfully penned poem that tells of a foresaken love , taken by the wonder of money.
Great rhyming and rhythm with a nice smooth flow make this one stand out my friend.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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How many people chose money over love and spend their lives in misery? Appreciate your comments and support.
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You are very welcome my friend
Comment from newly-classical
I Love the rhythm and the use of the first stanza at the end. I didn't quite understand why the narrator said the mansion was
'A place (his former lover) would rather not go'
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I Love the rhythm and the use of the first stanza at the end. I didn't quite understand why the narrator said the mansion was
'A place (his former lover) would rather not go'
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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She has her lover's money but still is not contented. Why else would she still be crying at night? Way that situation usually goes, does it not? Appreciate your comments.
Comment from poetadeu
Oh, the wicked web we weave, how many times
I have heard someone say in my lifetime I
can not count. Money blinds never seeing the
fall. Over the cliff we go, but empty handed.
Tied only to the baggage we packed for the
fall.
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Oh, the wicked web we weave, how many times
I have heard someone say in my lifetime I
can not count. Money blinds never seeing the
fall. Over the cliff we go, but empty handed.
Tied only to the baggage we packed for the
fall.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
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Appreciate your comments and support indeed.
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It was a pleasure.::}Joyce
Comment from robina1978
Excellent picture that complements your poem perfectly. I think it rhymes all the way. Your main message is love can not be bought. Please, come back to me, now you are crying all day.
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Excellent picture that complements your poem perfectly. I think it rhymes all the way. Your main message is love can not be bought. Please, come back to me, now you are crying all day.
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Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much indeed.
