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Comment from Selina Stambi
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Time waits for none, fast fleeting time.
Chime every hour, sweet sounding chime ... lovely!

Hurrah for Tony, Tom - yes, thanks to him I get to learn about (yet another) new poetic form from you!

Love the grandeur of the opening line.

Been away for ages. Glad to be back and reading your poetry.

Sonali :)

because Tony (led) me to find and research this

 Comment Written 04-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
    Hi Sonali. You've changed your name. That threw me a bit. So glad you liked my poem. You'll notice that Tony had't released his yet.
reply by Selina Stambi on 04-Aug-2015
    Changed my profile name to a play on my real name. I'm using the same name on Facebook. Are you on FB?
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
    yes I am, but I don't go there very much anymore.
reply by Selina Stambi on 04-Aug-2015
    You can create a writer page (as part of your Facebook page) to promote your writing. I opened an account just for that. I'll look you up and send you a friend request.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
    Ok, im under Thomas George Reischel
Comment from rod007
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As the saying goes---time waits for no one. It's relentless eternal march can't be stopped. Just imagine the things we could do if that clock did not tick. But then that's an impossible dream or is it? Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
    Thank you rod. Good question.
Comment from LIJ Red
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Five stars for choosing a style and sticking to it. As far as I can tell, you have written
a fully functional shadow sonnet, and I applaud your effort and labor, hoping it was fun. I do not think, however, that I shall ever try to write a shadow sonnet...

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
    Thank you LIJ Red. I understand perfectly.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello Treischel

~Time~is a very interesting sonnet, a shadow sonnet. You are very good at writing sonnets. Time, so much can be written about time. It is true sometimes it goes fast and sometimes slow, usually when we don't want something to end. Good job!

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
    Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose.
Comment from Pantygynt
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I don't think your widow's cruise of sonnet forms will ever run dry! I really like this one with the shadow effect.

The first two stanzas are descriptive of time, how it can be differently perceived under different circumstances. This treatment leads eventually to a sentence pper line, but this is completely upset in the third stanza where some excellent enjambement is the order of the day. This hard to achieve within the "shadow" form, but it is there very plainly as we are told how to keep track of time.

A reprise of the second line opens the final couplet that somes up the whole thing.

It is easy to see why iambics are not a requirement withe these. The shadow word occuring at both beginning and end of the line virtually rul it out.

An excellent construction.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Thank you Pantygynt. You are spot on. It wasn't and easy form, and took a lot of creativity to carry it off. Tony said he was still struggling with his. His lead brought my to another site where I uncovered a dozen more Sonnet formats, that I guess you'll see in the future. Plus, i just invented two new ones myself. Just haven't written them yet, but have laid out the outlines.
reply by Pantygynt on 02-Aug-2015
    I am so pleased and thanks for the nominsation.
Comment from Eric1
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Hi Tom, I really like this well written sonnet, it is a type I have never come across before, but I think it works extremely well, thank you for sharing your talent my friend.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Thank you Eric. It seems that Sonnets are extremely flexible a format.
reply by Eric1 on 02-Aug-2015
    You are very welcome my friend and yes, they are!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Time marches on, and as this well written poem crystal clearly depicts, time waits for nobody regardless of how well organized around time our lives may be. And, there is only so much time each one of us is allotted in life.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Thank you Brett. Yes, a very valid assessment.
Comment from sandramitchell
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I've not heard of. or seen this style before, I like it though and it must be quite hard to do, when you have to have the same beginning and ending word in each line. You did it easily, no line felt forced and your theme was excellent. Time waits for no man, is so true. :) Sandra

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 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Thank you Sandra. I assure you, it wasn't easy. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from robina1978
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Amazing how you were guided to yet an other Sonnet form. I liked that it was about time. Your photo is excellent, and complements your poem perfectly. A very nice Sonnet about this.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Thank you so much Ine, for a wonderful review and stars. You make my Sunday joyous.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A great sonnet. We did create time as we know it, I can't imagine a life without time. I once again complicates you on your photographic abilities. Excellent work on the poem and the photograph

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 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
    Thank you so much Sandra.