The Explorer
A joint poem by Feral (Fez) from Malanda and davisr (Rhonda)19 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your joint effort in composing this poem. The artwork is perfect.
The many places that were explored in the poem add to the enjoyment. I liked all except finding penguins in Greenland--maybe reindeer but no penguins--they live at the South Pole. But since this is fiction, maybe you intended that part to be as written.
Good job on the rhyme.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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I enjoyed your joint effort in composing this poem. The artwork is perfect.
The many places that were explored in the poem add to the enjoyment. I liked all except finding penguins in Greenland--maybe reindeer but no penguins--they live at the South Pole. But since this is fiction, maybe you intended that part to be as written.
Good job on the rhyme.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank, yes, Fez knew there were no penguins in Greenland, but put them there for the sake of his story. Kind of a combination of fantasy and poetic license! Thanks for the review,
Rhonda
Comment from TAB_that's me
This sounds like it would be some wonderful explorations. As usual you and Fez did a great job together on this. I can still tell yours from his but they are becoming very similar. Next time you should do the first part just to see if it throws us off:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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This sounds like it would be some wonderful explorations. As usual you and Fez did a great job together on this. I can still tell yours from his but they are becoming very similar. Next time you should do the first part just to see if it throws us off:)
Teresa
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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I did that once, but it didn't turn out so well. Thanks for the suggestion, though, and the review!
Rhonda
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Would be quite an adventure to be an explorer on the high seas living the life that takes you from one place to another. A well written story indeed.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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Would be quite an adventure to be an explorer on the high seas living the life that takes you from one place to another. A well written story indeed.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, Brett! You are very encouraging, as always.
Rhonda
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a sort of nonsense poem not like jabberwocky, with nonsense words but normal words to create nonsense ideas. All those places in a giant boat twelve foot long? Got to be nonsense and Penguins in Greenland, it'll be polar bears in Antarctica next. A great piece of collaborative fun.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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This is a sort of nonsense poem not like jabberwocky, with nonsense words but normal words to create nonsense ideas. All those places in a giant boat twelve foot long? Got to be nonsense and Penguins in Greenland, it'll be polar bears in Antarctica next. A great piece of collaborative fun.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Exactly what it was, nonsensical with a historic twist! It's summer here in Texas, and time for nonsense. Thanks for reviewing!
Rhonda
Comment from MelB
I enjoyed traveling this exploration with the two of you. Your right, peace of mind may be one of the best treasures to find. This was another fun adventure and an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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I enjoyed traveling this exploration with the two of you. Your right, peace of mind may be one of the best treasures to find. This was another fun adventure and an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, you're a sweetheart!
Rhonda
Comment from alexisleech
Another wonderful collaboration, guys. Each country held a treasure and should they have been found for the first time, I'm sure your coffers would be very full!
Great rhyme and meter throughout. Well done!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Another wonderful collaboration, guys. Each country held a treasure and should they have been found for the first time, I'm sure your coffers would be very full!
Great rhyme and meter throughout. Well done!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, Alexis. I always enjoy your comments. Have a great weekend,
Rhonda
Comment from Nosha17
That was a lovely trip around the world, Rhonda! I wrote a poem about wishing I were a parrot on board a pirate ship, travelling the seven seas! Loved all the things you intend to do on your explorer trip, excellent rhyming and great adventure. Faye
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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That was a lovely trip around the world, Rhonda! I wrote a poem about wishing I were a parrot on board a pirate ship, travelling the seven seas! Loved all the things you intend to do on your explorer trip, excellent rhyming and great adventure. Faye
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Faye. Your piem sounds fun, too!
Rhonda
Comment from gamay
Hello Rhonda, Another fine poem between you and Fez. I think its funny its funny how you sealed in the 12 ft. boat. Most of the fish a lot bigger than you. Good luck. gamay
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Hello Rhonda, Another fine poem between you and Fez. I think its funny its funny how you sealed in the 12 ft. boat. Most of the fish a lot bigger than you. Good luck. gamay
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank, you, gamay for the wonderful six star review. Yes, it was a small boat, but it grew larger as we traveled. Lol
Rhonda
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, davisr, you did an excellent job co-writing this poem with fez. my favorite stanza was the one about going over niagra falls in a barrel and roping a moose.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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this is an excellent write, davisr, you did an excellent job co-writing this poem with fez. my favorite stanza was the one about going over niagra falls in a barrel and roping a moose.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you, so much for the review. Now in reality, I'm not much of a daredevil, but going over a waterfall and splashing in the pool below does sound fun...maybe a small one, anyway!
Comment from ellie6
A nice travelogue. All this in a twelve foot boat ? You and Fez are brave explorers.
A good fun poem and a fine bit of collaboration.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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A nice travelogue. All this in a twelve foot boat ? You and Fez are brave explorers.
A good fun poem and a fine bit of collaboration.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. Yes, the boat was small in the beginning, but as we grew rich, we got a yacht.
