Faerie Lights
Pantoum Sonnet33 total reviews
Comment from May 1
Aww, they sound so magical, I would probably be mesmerized and fall into their trap. Ah, yes the poor Rip Van Winkle that's a tale we should all remember. They must be so gorgeous that many would forget to be cautious.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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Aww, they sound so magical, I would probably be mesmerized and fall into their trap. Ah, yes the poor Rip Van Winkle that's a tale we should all remember. They must be so gorgeous that many would forget to be cautious.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2020
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I'm sorry the picture that went with this poem is no longer available. It was what inspired the piece. I am happy you found it magical anyway. Yes, poor ol' Rip was really mesmerized. Beware.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Debi this is really very good - a perfect sonnet in both rhyme abab and good iambic pentameter. You incorporated the pantoum, also in perfect form, into your work and the whole is a very good read. Well done. A lovely read that does not sound at all contrived by the combination of the two poetry forms. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Debi this is really very good - a perfect sonnet in both rhyme abab and good iambic pentameter. You incorporated the pantoum, also in perfect form, into your work and the whole is a very good read. Well done. A lovely read that does not sound at all contrived by the combination of the two poetry forms. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Hi Dorothy,
Thank you for a very encouraging review. I appreciate the analysis of the combined forms. I am so happy to hear you enjoyed it.
Debi
Comment from rspoet
You've written a magical poem in the Pantoum form
Of course, there is good magic and dark magic
and we must take care, those alluring lights may be
bait in a clever trap. It is interesting in nature
how many creature do exactly that, alluring bait to catch the unwary
The repetition works so well in this poem
like repeating the moves in a complex dance
it enhances the mystery.
the rhymes are great, the meter flows very well
Just a gorgeous picture to match the poem
framed in night black with those alluring fairy lights for a font
Well done
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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You've written a magical poem in the Pantoum form
Of course, there is good magic and dark magic
and we must take care, those alluring lights may be
bait in a clever trap. It is interesting in nature
how many creature do exactly that, alluring bait to catch the unwary
The repetition works so well in this poem
like repeating the moves in a complex dance
it enhances the mystery.
the rhymes are great, the meter flows very well
Just a gorgeous picture to match the poem
framed in night black with those alluring fairy lights for a font
Well done
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful review and all the positive comments about the writing. I appreciate the detailed comments about the theme and about which elements worked. Watch out for those wicked faeries and their tricks.
Also, I see you won the story contest about finding a fairy in the woods. Congratulations. That was certainly a good fairy the man found. I so enjoyed that story so I am happy to see you won.
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You are welcome for the review and I thank you for the congratulations on the win. It was a fun story to write. I'd glad you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very well done! The combination works nicely here, and the lines are lovely in themselves. I don't read much poetry, but I know good stuff when I see it. Bravo! :)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Very well done! The combination works nicely here, and the lines are lovely in themselves. I don't read much poetry, but I know good stuff when I see it. Bravo! :)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Well if you don't read much poetry then I am doubly honored that you read this verse and that you liked it! Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Debi,
Well, what an entrancing and cautionary tale.
One certainly must be careful while walking in the woods at night...and steer away from pretty lights for all the magic they may bring can leave one sleeping in a dream:)
Loved the imagination displayed in this fanciful write, enhanced with your solid rhyme and meter...well done!
You have a knack for this genre...always a pleasure, my friend,
Bill
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi Debi,
Well, what an entrancing and cautionary tale.
One certainly must be careful while walking in the woods at night...and steer away from pretty lights for all the magic they may bring can leave one sleeping in a dream:)
Loved the imagination displayed in this fanciful write, enhanced with your solid rhyme and meter...well done!
You have a knack for this genre...always a pleasure, my friend,
Bill
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi Bill,
Thank you for the fabulous six stars! I am honored you liked it that much.
Yes, do be careful when dealing with the faerie folk. They like to trick humans. Look at the trouble they made in A Midsummer Night's Dream just for fun.
Thank you a for the encouraging remarks about the writing and the genre. I do like bad faeries for some reason.
Debi
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Debi. I really like the theme and execution of this excellent poem. Especially this time of year, one can feel the lurking danger of those fairie lights aglow in the woods. Great job, my friend.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi, Debi. I really like the theme and execution of this excellent poem. Especially this time of year, one can feel the lurking danger of those fairie lights aglow in the woods. Great job, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi again Bev,
I seem to have this thing for bad fairies. Watch out, they can be trixters.
Debi
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Oh, yeah. I absolutely do believe that. Can't say I blame them, either, what with how we treat their home.
You're welcome, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment from hannahorion
This poem complies with A Pantoum Sonnet form: Title:Faerie Lights. Comments; The language of this sonnet is clear and concise. It tells the story of faerie lights displaying magic in the night where wicked sprites dance. I found this poem entertaining and it was a pleasure thinking about its structure. I gave it five stars because of the originality of its imagery and theme.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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This poem complies with A Pantoum Sonnet form: Title:Faerie Lights. Comments; The language of this sonnet is clear and concise. It tells the story of faerie lights displaying magic in the night where wicked sprites dance. I found this poem entertaining and it was a pleasure thinking about its structure. I gave it five stars because of the originality of its imagery and theme.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review about the form, theme, imagery and especially the originality. I am pleased you found the verse entertaining. Thank you so much.
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My pleasure
Comment from LeslieP5
The pantoum sonnet is an interesting form and the cascading ripple effect enhances the impact of the words and images. Beguiling faraie lights start the poem; the trap and warnings are noted. I like the way the end 2 lines takes us back to the beginning and the beguiling faraie lights and the positive emotions they evoke.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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The pantoum sonnet is an interesting form and the cascading ripple effect enhances the impact of the words and images. Beguiling faraie lights start the poem; the trap and warnings are noted. I like the way the end 2 lines takes us back to the beginning and the beguiling faraie lights and the positive emotions they evoke.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Leslie. You put thought and detail into it. I appreciate how you point out the cascading ripple effect and note how the closing couplet works. Debi
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You're welcome!
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You're welcome!
Comment from Joy Graham
Nice pantoum sonnet :) Fine iambic pentameter with great repeating lines. Good rhymes and I especially like your near rhyme of adore and sure. I've always been suspicious of faeries and your poem seals the deal now. A little scary, I'm staying clear for sure.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Nice pantoum sonnet :) Fine iambic pentameter with great repeating lines. Good rhymes and I especially like your near rhyme of adore and sure. I've always been suspicious of faeries and your poem seals the deal now. A little scary, I'm staying clear for sure.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi joy,
Very wise to avoid those various faerie types. They do love to tick humans and we may not find it so funny.
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing.
Debi
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Your, Pantoum Sonnet-Faerie Lights, is a scary poem. I thought fairies were harmless; little did I know! LOL Good job!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Your, Pantoum Sonnet-Faerie Lights, is a scary poem. I thought fairies were harmless; little did I know! LOL Good job!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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LOL. It depends on which fairies you run into. We have made them pretty harmless in the present day. If you read some of the older fairy tales, fairies were not very nice to humans. Thank you for the excellent review. I appreciate the encouragement.
