Inside My Head
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "One Word"I am what I am,my thoughts, my words,my poems
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Cute poem that asks a valed question. I like Ending and beginnings can often start the same-One Word. You say a lot in such a little poem, with just a few lines. Good job!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Cute poem that asks a valed question. I like Ending and beginnings can often start the same-One Word. You say a lot in such a little poem, with just a few lines. Good job!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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thanks for your comment,glad you liked it
Comment from barkingdog
This is an interesting question and well put in an entertaining fashion.
Your quatrain reads smoothly and has good rhyme and even tempo.
Since you punctuate in the final line, you may want to consider adding your question marks in the others.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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This is an interesting question and well put in an entertaining fashion.
Your quatrain reads smoothly and has good rhyme and even tempo.
Since you punctuate in the final line, you may want to consider adding your question marks in the others.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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good tips thank you for your coments
Comment from pelegrino
Nice thought for a song. It contains the cell, the basic idea, so I think you could expand, you can make it into one, by developing, by arguing that proposition in lyrical and musical terms.
Why don't you try?
I for one would follow your argumentation in good faith, although at the moment I must say, I lees than persuaded.
I would use quite a few and different words for ending something and starting something anew, even if it was the same old thing.
But I am fascinated by your idea/challenge to an equal degree.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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Nice thought for a song. It contains the cell, the basic idea, so I think you could expand, you can make it into one, by developing, by arguing that proposition in lyrical and musical terms.
Why don't you try?
I for one would follow your argumentation in good faith, although at the moment I must say, I lees than persuaded.
I would use quite a few and different words for ending something and starting something anew, even if it was the same old thing.
But I am fascinated by your idea/challenge to an equal degree.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015
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interesting what you say, will have a think on it, thnx Bill
Comment from skye
This is so great. I -- we use it everywhere -- believe it to be true.
Your short, succinct lines make this one very fun to read, but it is filled with egocentric truth..... that i that is always needy, always needing to be first.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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This is so great. I -- we use it everywhere -- believe it to be true.
Your short, succinct lines make this one very fun to read, but it is filled with egocentric truth..... that i that is always needy, always needing to be first.
Excellent.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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I am pleased that you recognise my thoughts in this poem, its nice to know that what I write is interpreted as I write it, thnx Skye
Comment from petalangela
Nope there is no I left in my life
I died along with my ego and self esteem
And the would you is projecting blam
It probably be mayb or perhaps a direct pointer to my uncertainties
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Nope there is no I left in my life
I died along with my ego and self esteem
And the would you is projecting blam
It probably be mayb or perhaps a direct pointer to my uncertainties
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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thanks for your comment
Comment from tfawcus
This is a bit of a wake-up call to all of us egocentrics! Most relationships might last a little longer if thought of in terms of 'we'.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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This is a bit of a wake-up call to all of us egocentrics! Most relationships might last a little longer if thought of in terms of 'we'.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015
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too true
